Lipstick on your collar
Caught my husband out at last.8 total reviews
Comment from Nuki
I liked this poem very much, it had a natural rhythm.
Did you draw this picture as well? Your choice of colors are excellent. The red background, as well as the red in the girl's hair. ð??¹
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
I liked this poem very much, it had a natural rhythm.
Did you draw this picture as well? Your choice of colors are excellent. The red background, as well as the red in the girl's hair. ð??¹
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the review. I didn't draw the picture.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about betrayal. To suspect it is making a person paranoid. When we find out our gut feeling was right it feels like the world aroyb us crumble under our feet.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
A very well-written poem about betrayal. To suspect it is making a person paranoid. When we find out our gut feeling was right it feels like the world aroyb us crumble under our feet.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Many thanks for your comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I suppose if your husband or significant other were a cross-dresser that could be construed as a bit of a betrayal in a way, heh-heh.
Especially if he ruined your new blouse!
Excellent rhyming in this entry with a surprise twist. I gotta admit, I didn't see it coming.
Well done and good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean �
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
I suppose if your husband or significant other were a cross-dresser that could be construed as a bit of a betrayal in a way, heh-heh.
Especially if he ruined your new blouse!
Excellent rhyming in this entry with a surprise twist. I gotta admit, I didn't see it coming.
Well done and good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean �
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thanks a lot Dean. Take care Jen.
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You're welcome, Jen. I hope my vote helps.
~Dean
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Yes a great help. Thanks. X
Comment from mandyjpg
What an interesting take on betrayal. There was a twist at the end which surprised me. I even let out a chuckle at the end. Nice work! I wish you good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
What an interesting take on betrayal. There was a twist at the end which surprised me. I even let out a chuckle at the end. Nice work! I wish you good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from GLOBALEYES
This was cute and totally unsuspecting, especially with the selected picture . There is a nice rhyme pattern with good meter. Suggestion: "I'll stop you 'from' ever wearing..." completes that last beat. Betty Davis
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
This was cute and totally unsuspecting, especially with the selected picture . There is a nice rhyme pattern with good meter. Suggestion: "I'll stop you 'from' ever wearing..." completes that last beat. Betty Davis
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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You are quite right. I have changed it. Thank you so much for your help.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This made me laugh, at first I was wondering where it was going until the last stanza! he he he, I then laughed, good luck with the contest, a great entry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
This made me laugh, at first I was wondering where it was going until the last stanza! he he he, I then laughed, good luck with the contest, a great entry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks Dolly. So glad you liked it. X
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Betrayal' writing prompt.
You have made your story clear in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
I think this is a good entry for the 'Betrayal' writing prompt.
You have made your story clear in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Ricky1024
Lipstick on Your Collar is a betrayal contest poetry prompt Richard team as well as imagery Floyd well-read well with no grammar issues as well skip to measure for firmly in place good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
Lipstick on Your Collar is a betrayal contest poetry prompt Richard team as well as imagery Floyd well-read well with no grammar issues as well skip to measure for firmly in place good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Many thanks