Arsenic and Unhinged Grace
A Wicked Tale of a Crazed Wife45 total reviews
Comment from clsandau
This is a very intriguing story in a poem - my favorite type of poetry because you do get an actual story out of it. Your poem moved along very smoothly and the rhyming is right on. She finally got her revenge on dear old Robert - well deserved it sounds like. Wonderful picture to describe your poem - I'm impressed she can still get down on her knees!! The use of dialogue throughout is a great feature with this particular poem too. Wishing you the best in the contest - it should do very well.
Carol
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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This is a very intriguing story in a poem - my favorite type of poetry because you do get an actual story out of it. Your poem moved along very smoothly and the rhyming is right on. She finally got her revenge on dear old Robert - well deserved it sounds like. Wonderful picture to describe your poem - I'm impressed she can still get down on her knees!! The use of dialogue throughout is a great feature with this particular poem too. Wishing you the best in the contest - it should do very well.
Carol
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Carol!
This is definitely a twisted and tragic little tale - not my usual fare - but I started to write it, and it took on a life of its own! I had so much fun penning this verse.
Thank you for your exceptional and complimentary review. So appreciated.
diane
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mrs. K.T. I have been on the site since 2004. How is it I have never run into your work or you before? I am from Montague, Michigan which is just down the coast from you...north of Muskegon actually. I like your poetry however this one is just a tad long. I cannot help but wwonder where you got th inspiration to pen this poem though. Take care and blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hi, Mrs. K.T. I have been on the site since 2004. How is it I have never run into your work or you before? I am from Montague, Michigan which is just down the coast from you...north of Muskegon actually. I like your poetry however this one is just a tad long. I cannot help but wwonder where you got th inspiration to pen this poem though. Take care and blessings, Bob
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Bob!
I joined FanStory in 2007, and I consistently wrote for the next 4 - 5 years. But then my career and family responsibilities took on a greater part of my life, and I only sporadically submitted my work. I've been back since January 2018, and it is really exciting to be penning and posting my work.
This particular post is, indeed, "a tad long." But it flows quickly if read aloud! :) Also, it's not my usual fare! The first two stanzas just popped in my head, and well, it went from there! Twisted but fun!
Here's to another cold Michigan Sunday!
diane
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Hi Diane. Yeah, but spring cannot be far off....right? Bob
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I am hoping!
The bay is "rockin' and rollin'" today and wind gusts are exceeding my comfort zone! C'mon spring!
diane
Comment from RGstar
I absolutely loved this. First thought going one way, then swung another. The twist was sweet, the ending subtle. A lovely innovative piece of writing with dark humour the main aspect of the write.
Bravo.
I hope this does well, for very different from the others.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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I absolutely loved this. First thought going one way, then swung another. The twist was sweet, the ending subtle. A lovely innovative piece of writing with dark humour the main aspect of the write.
Bravo.
I hope this does well, for very different from the others.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Friend!
What a twisted little tale! Not my usual fare whatsoever. It took on a life of its own as I wrote it.
So very pleased that you enjoy/enjoyed.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, this is a wicked but delightful tale about a crazed, abused, and overworked woman who turns out to be very smart as she turns the tables on her husband Robert who pulled a gun on her for nagging:
By the way, dear Robert
You are sweating so much!
Oh my goodness!
So clammy to touch!
She used not only words, but poison to exact her revenge:
"Stomach Cramps!"
"I need to explode!"
"Damn metallic taste!"
My...that's quite the load.
Your well rhymed poem told a compelling story of double-cross and murder. What makes your poem successful is your shocking but entertaining twist ending:
Oh my! You've dropped
Your new flashy gun
And here I thought
I might have to run!
This was a kill-or-be-killed world in which she won one.
Thank you for sharing your entertaining poem. I wish you much contest success.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Yes, this is a wicked but delightful tale about a crazed, abused, and overworked woman who turns out to be very smart as she turns the tables on her husband Robert who pulled a gun on her for nagging:
By the way, dear Robert
You are sweating so much!
Oh my goodness!
So clammy to touch!
She used not only words, but poison to exact her revenge:
"Stomach Cramps!"
"I need to explode!"
"Damn metallic taste!"
My...that's quite the load.
Your well rhymed poem told a compelling story of double-cross and murder. What makes your poem successful is your shocking but entertaining twist ending:
Oh my! You've dropped
Your new flashy gun
And here I thought
I might have to run!
This was a kill-or-be-killed world in which she won one.
Thank you for sharing your entertaining poem. I wish you much contest success.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018
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Hello Sis Cat!
Every time I re-read my poem, I cannot help but think that I tapped into a really dark place in my mind! It's a tad bit twisted!
So very pleased that you enjoy/enjoyed.
Thank you for your thorough and complimentary review!
I will admit: it was fun to pen this!
Diane
Comment from jdrhye
What a good twist....at first I thought you were talking to a child or a dog! I like the metaphors and the imagery. The tone is good as is the rhyme, rhythm and flow.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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What a good twist....at first I thought you were talking to a child or a dog! I like the metaphors and the imagery. The tone is good as is the rhyme, rhythm and flow.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hello!
So pleased you enjoyed! It was definitely a fun write. Took on a life all of its own!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I loved it! What a (ahem) fun poem, lol! I never did get to see the stage play of 'Arsenic and Old Lace', sad to say, I'm sure I would have enjoyed it. I really enjoyed your poetic version of it, lol. I'm glad she won in the end. That poor woman in the photo, I really feel sorry for her. I would help her make the 'tea', lol!! Well done, this is a superb, 'share a story in a poem' contest entry. Good luck! Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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I loved it! What a (ahem) fun poem, lol! I never did get to see the stage play of 'Arsenic and Old Lace', sad to say, I'm sure I would have enjoyed it. I really enjoyed your poetic version of it, lol. I'm glad she won in the end. That poor woman in the photo, I really feel sorry for her. I would help her make the 'tea', lol!! Well done, this is a superb, 'share a story in a poem' contest entry. Good luck! Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi Sandra!
This was a "hoot" two write! Definitely far removed from my usual fare!
I located the photograph after I wrote the piece = just as I imagine my narrator to look!
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Mrs KT wow what a bottler This is so good and a six if I had one. loved your tight meter and terrific rhyme and continuing dialogue throughout. Enjoyed this very much.
What fun to have been in the play . Do you still do theatre. I do and was in one last year with our local theatre company. The play was called 'Sex please we're sixty' and I had so much fun playing Charmine Beauregard I am 65 and had some great lines and costumes LOL never too old Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi Mrs KT wow what a bottler This is so good and a six if I had one. loved your tight meter and terrific rhyme and continuing dialogue throughout. Enjoyed this very much.
What fun to have been in the play . Do you still do theatre. I do and was in one last year with our local theatre company. The play was called 'Sex please we're sixty' and I had so much fun playing Charmine Beauregard I am 65 and had some great lines and costumes LOL never too old Cheers Christine
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi Chrissy!
I had so much enjoyment writing this twisted tale! I haven't done theater for years; I wish I did!
Definitely never too old!
Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Mustang Patty
Oh, my.
In some ways, your tale read like the tale of two lovers who surprised one another one Christmas. Only instead of something wonderful, your characters planned deadly surprises.
Well written and lovely. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Oh, my.
In some ways, your tale read like the tale of two lovers who surprised one another one Christmas. Only instead of something wonderful, your characters planned deadly surprises.
Well written and lovely. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi Patty!
I have to admit: this was so much fun to write!
Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Gracie619
I came across this poem as I sat with an afternoon coffee and enjoyed it so much, I had to read it more than once. Thank you for sharing this writing. You have quite the talent! What a great read!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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I came across this poem as I sat with an afternoon coffee and enjoyed it so much, I had to read it more than once. Thank you for sharing this writing. You have quite the talent! What a great read!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Oh my goodness, Gracie!
I loved knowing that you read it twice while enjoying a cup of coffee. (It's pretty fun to read it aloud, too!)
Thank you ever so much for your exceptional rating and complimentary review! Smiles all around!
diane
Comment from MelB
Hi Diane, remind me to never make you mad! LOL A fantastic story told in this poem. Sadly, this is how some abusers end up. I'm not familiar with that production, but the title drew me in right away.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi Diane, remind me to never make you mad! LOL A fantastic story told in this poem. Sadly, this is how some abusers end up. I'm not familiar with that production, but the title drew me in right away.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hello MelB!
I promise you that I am totally harmless...maybe! :) I really don't know where the events of this poem originated, but once I started this twisted little tale, it just took on a life of its own.
Thank you ever so much for the exceptional rating and complimentary thoughts. I am honored...
diane
