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Comment from lyenochka
A sweet nostalgic piece, Bill! It's great that even old children's rides can still be enjoyed today by little ones. Especially liked your last verse:
"Today, however, beached here in the desert
faded blue and primer gray I've found
what swelled our nautic minds and filled our days
splashes only echoes of that splendid time"
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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A sweet nostalgic piece, Bill! It's great that even old children's rides can still be enjoyed today by little ones. Especially liked your last verse:
"Today, however, beached here in the desert
faded blue and primer gray I've found
what swelled our nautic minds and filled our days
splashes only echoes of that splendid time"
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, lyenochka.
Comment from judiverse
I'd never seen such an attraction--a whale slide. If each venture cost just a dime, that must have really been in the past. I like the description of what happened to the poor whale ride--beached in the desert. It seems that the whale fueled the children's imaginations and attracted them to the slide. Interesting reminder of times past, and what could tickle a child's fancy. Excellent rhyme. judi
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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I'd never seen such an attraction--a whale slide. If each venture cost just a dime, that must have really been in the past. I like the description of what happened to the poor whale ride--beached in the desert. It seems that the whale fueled the children's imaginations and attracted them to the slide. Interesting reminder of times past, and what could tickle a child's fancy. Excellent rhyme. judi
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Judi
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from frogbook
Oh I really loved this one. It was melancholy and nostalgic and had that feel we all know of the passing of youth and the things that may represent that to us. Reminded me of old pictures of abandoned amusement parks that always move me.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Oh I really loved this one. It was melancholy and nostalgic and had that feel we all know of the passing of youth and the things that may represent that to us. Reminded me of old pictures of abandoned amusement parks that always move me.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, FB
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bill, this was not promoted, but I broke my rule and reviewed it anyway, because it's so verrrry good. You really should have promoted this one so more would see it.
Some masterful lines and phrases follow... could have added more. You are REALLY good at rhyming poetry. You've got the alliteration thing going and a great theme behind this that we old folks relate to well.
the chilly pools once fed by crispy pipes
now worn and pitted holes reflecting heat
the rusty whale's back
beached here in the desert
faded blue and primer gray
splashes only echoes of that splendid time
Now, since I not only read (my pleasure) this poem but reviewed it for two measly cents, shouldn't you hurry up and review my chapter 35? Second half at least, where Gen. Boyd makes Charles look like the idiot he is.
I'm not going to post the best scene till Sunday, which is where Charles will have to put his lies up against testimony from the three Hampton girls. It's going to be a bloodbath. Charles will probably be run out of town by an angry mob. So stay tuned. :)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Bill, this was not promoted, but I broke my rule and reviewed it anyway, because it's so verrrry good. You really should have promoted this one so more would see it.
Some masterful lines and phrases follow... could have added more. You are REALLY good at rhyming poetry. You've got the alliteration thing going and a great theme behind this that we old folks relate to well.
the chilly pools once fed by crispy pipes
now worn and pitted holes reflecting heat
the rusty whale's back
beached here in the desert
faded blue and primer gray
splashes only echoes of that splendid time
Now, since I not only read (my pleasure) this poem but reviewed it for two measly cents, shouldn't you hurry up and review my chapter 35? Second half at least, where Gen. Boyd makes Charles look like the idiot he is.
I'm not going to post the best scene till Sunday, which is where Charles will have to put his lies up against testimony from the three Hampton girls. It's going to be a bloodbath. Charles will probably be run out of town by an angry mob. So stay tuned. :)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Phyllis, for breaking your rule and giving this a look. I value your comments. Look forward to Chuck bashing.
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I think I confused you... I'm contagious. Chapter 35 IS NOW posted. It's Chapter 36 coming on Sunday. So you can enjoy 35 right now...and get money for doing so. Lucky you! :)
Comment from damommy
Imagination is a great thing. Now you have those memories to look back on. Probably has a lot to do with your love of whales.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Imagination is a great thing. Now you have those memories to look back on. Probably has a lot to do with your love of whales.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, da
Comment from nomi338
Growing up and learning that the sources of our fondest fantasies is just that, a fantasy and nothing more, can be a sobering experience. This is especially true when the glaring truth is pointed out to you by someone you dare not argue with. Some truths reveal themselves to you by the simple act of your maturing to the point where the fantasy is obviously not true, could not possibly be true. You feel relieved to have worked this out before someone else reveals it to you, making you feel dumb and uninformed.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Growing up and learning that the sources of our fondest fantasies is just that, a fantasy and nothing more, can be a sobering experience. This is especially true when the glaring truth is pointed out to you by someone you dare not argue with. Some truths reveal themselves to you by the simple act of your maturing to the point where the fantasy is obviously not true, could not possibly be true. You feel relieved to have worked this out before someone else reveals it to you, making you feel dumb and uninformed.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Or, just after that.
Comment from robina1978
Absolutely marvellous artwork that complements your poem perfectly. It has gone old and splashes only echoes of that splendid time. Rhymes all the way.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Absolutely marvellous artwork that complements your poem perfectly. It has gone old and splashes only echoes of that splendid time. Rhymes all the way.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Ine.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks memoirs of childhood days playing, riding, and felt adventure at the shark that stands deserted there; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. WRITE, INSPIRE MAN CHANGE. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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This speaks memoirs of childhood days playing, riding, and felt adventure at the shark that stands deserted there; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. WRITE, INSPIRE MAN CHANGE. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill. If you haven't seen "whale Rider" put out by a New Zealander about the mystical power of the whales for the Maori people, I believe you would enjoy it tremendously. It came out a few years ago and is probably on something like Netflix. Another awesome chapter in your book. What animal is next? Have you decided? As my German teacher would say after a good transition of the language,
Zehr gut, gut gemack ... probably not spelled right ... nice one Bill!
smiles ... Kiwi
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hi Bill. If you haven't seen "whale Rider" put out by a New Zealander about the mystical power of the whales for the Maori people, I believe you would enjoy it tremendously. It came out a few years ago and is probably on something like Netflix. Another awesome chapter in your book. What animal is next? Have you decided? As my German teacher would say after a good transition of the language,
Zehr gut, gut gemack ... probably not spelled right ... nice one Bill!
smiles ... Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Kiwi. I?ll look up that show. Bill
