~ The Tooth Fairy ~
Rhyming Poem (HM)28 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is delightful and reminds me of when I went to sleep with my head resting on the bristly side of a hair brush in an effort to stay awak in order to see, not the tooth fairy an my case, but Father Christmas. I didn't make it! This follows the alternate rhyme requirement perfectly.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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This is delightful and reminds me of when I went to sleep with my head resting on the bristly side of a hair brush in an effort to stay awak in order to see, not the tooth fairy an my case, but Father Christmas. I didn't make it! This follows the alternate rhyme requirement perfectly.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Pantygynt, this is a late response but thank you for popping in to review my Tooth Fairy poem. As always, I am very grateful. ~DD
Comment from apky
Beautiful artwork, a delight for the eyes.
I'm sure we all remember those fairy tooth yarns. I know I not only remember them but also carried on the tradition on my child.
You have crafted great meter and rhyme, in such a delicious story, which you tell with amazing, beautiful words. I don't think I've read a more skilfully told story in poetry.
I wish I still had a six to give.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Beautiful artwork, a delight for the eyes.
I'm sure we all remember those fairy tooth yarns. I know I not only remember them but also carried on the tradition on my child.
You have crafted great meter and rhyme, in such a delicious story, which you tell with amazing, beautiful words. I don't think I've read a more skilfully told story in poetry.
I wish I still had a six to give.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I am way behind on everything but ~ Thank you ~ apky for taking the time to review my Tooth Fairy poem and for your most encouraging comments....especially the mention of a six. I am very grateful. ~DD
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! That is what most children try to do, sometimes the parents get caught out! What a lovely poem for children. The tooth fairy has been around for years, I can still remember her coming to me! Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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LOL! That is what most children try to do, sometimes the parents get caught out! What a lovely poem for children. The tooth fairy has been around for years, I can still remember her coming to me! Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I am way behind on everything but ~ Thank you ~ Sandra for taking the time to review my Tooth Fairy poem and for your thoughtful comments. I am very grateful. ~DD
Comment from William Ross
Ha ha ha, busted. Great write wonderful humor. nicely done on the rhyming and meter. best of luck and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Ha ha ha, busted. Great write wonderful humor. nicely done on the rhyming and meter. best of luck and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I am way behind on everything but ~ Thank you ~ William for taking the time to review my Tooth Fairy poem. I?m glad you enjoyed it : -). ~DD
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a fun poem about the tooth fairy being dad :) I never heard the tooth fairy coming in, but I always had a coin under my pillow by morning. One Christmas Santa even managed to leave a gift in my room while I was asleep. You have fine rhymes in the ever present abab rhyme scheme. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is a fun poem about the tooth fairy being dad :) I never heard the tooth fairy coming in, but I always had a coin under my pillow by morning. One Christmas Santa even managed to leave a gift in my room while I was asleep. You have fine rhymes in the ever present abab rhyme scheme. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I am way, again, behind on everything but ~ Thank you ~ Joy for taking the time to review my Tooth Fairy poem and for your nice comments. I am very grateful. ~DD
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry writing prompt.
Your story of Dad caught in the act is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry writing prompt.
Your story of Dad caught in the act is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you Sharon for your review. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Susan B. Lamphier
I'm sorry to say I had to read this poem again and again, because it confused me. Not the topic, of course, but the rhyme and rhythm scheme. While the rhyme scheme is correct, the rhythm was awkward. I had to count each stanza out with my fingers (as I am sure you did). Most seem to have the correct beats, but the words were somehow not clear. Perhaps it is me, but I believe poetry should have some music in it, else why work so had to write it? Your rhythm made your rhymes disappear. I think, with a little more work, you might be able to add to that musicality. Otherwise, it has a clever story. Please take my gentle words, and continue to work though it. Blessings.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I'm sorry to say I had to read this poem again and again, because it confused me. Not the topic, of course, but the rhyme and rhythm scheme. While the rhyme scheme is correct, the rhythm was awkward. I had to count each stanza out with my fingers (as I am sure you did). Most seem to have the correct beats, but the words were somehow not clear. Perhaps it is me, but I believe poetry should have some music in it, else why work so had to write it? Your rhythm made your rhymes disappear. I think, with a little more work, you might be able to add to that musicality. Otherwise, it has a clever story. Please take my gentle words, and continue to work though it. Blessings.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to review on my poem. Much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Sugarray77
This a fun and witty poem that showcases your versatility in themes. Well done. I especially liked the ending when Dad gets caught sneaking in. Fun, fun. Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This a fun and witty poem that showcases your versatility in themes. Well done. I especially liked the ending when Dad gets caught sneaking in. Fun, fun. Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I am way behind on everything but ~ Thank you ~ Sugarray for taking the time to review my Tooth Fairy poem and for your encouraging comments. I am very grateful. ~DD
