Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Ugh! He didn't even feed it corn and cook it in garlic and olive oil first? Hope he survived. For all we know, the snail could survive that, too. Great story told in perfect monorhyme quatrains.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018

Thanks, lyenochka.

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

Haaaaaaa, you got me right out on the first line. A snail sailed around the brim. That is a perfectly poetic description of what they do.

HA, I didn't really expect Jungle Jim to eat it, after all that work sailing the brim. But hey, free protein.

A most fun poem, Bill. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Wow! This is astounding! Thanks, Gloria.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

Wow. Jungle Jim definitely lives up to his name, haha. Nice poem, I like the imagery you use, and the description of the snail as cute as a pup is very cool. I find snails cute too actually, although I wouldn't eat one. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Oliver

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Yikes! Tea and snails. Not my idea of a snack. lol

Cute poem with a fun beat to it. Good rhyming.

It seems to me Jungle Jim will eat anything. I know what happened to my missing dirty socks now. 8-)

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Yeww! Ya think? What's in that tea?

Comment from Marisela Contona

Excellent

I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Marisela

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks sharing of a peculiar experience of seeing a snail sailed around the brim of a cup; innocent snail was taken off and poet enjoyed a cup of tea swallowing; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

This is a fine poem. It made me think of a cup I once had. It had a snail at the bottom of the cup. It could not be seen under coffee or tea. I used to get a kick out of giving it and it's coffee to visiting colleagues. So funny when they first see the snail. They get freaked out and then relieved when they know it is not real. Thank you for sharing

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, Pamusart, for giving this a look. Nice cup.

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Bill,

I see you have started a series on snails. You certainly love insects and creepy crawly.

I love your rhymes, especially the last two stanza. Any child or adult can enjoy this poem.

Great job as usual.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2018

---

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018

Thanks, PF