Mystery of the Night
The moon's light is from the sun/mine from the Son40 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
Mother Moon is very seductive and she gave the character a taste of what she was missing out on.. Love the artwork and your couplet verse. thanks so much and looking forward. yours, diana
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Mother Moon is very seductive and she gave the character a taste of what she was missing out on.. Love the artwork and your couplet verse. thanks so much and looking forward. yours, diana
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your thorough uplifting review. I'm glad you appreciate the moon as I presented her.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This was so pretty and well written. The repeated lines make the poem so powerful and inspirational to the reader. This is a fine contender for the spiritual poem contest and it offers a unique style.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This was so pretty and well written. The repeated lines make the poem so powerful and inspirational to the reader. This is a fine contender for the spiritual poem contest and it offers a unique style.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Swampfox1
I fail to get it, actually , and I did think about it but fail to see how a poem about mother moon can be spirtual in nature in this day and age. I fail to connect with it completely. People that worship the moon, a change for the far , far worse. Wow!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I fail to get it, actually , and I did think about it but fail to see how a poem about mother moon can be spirtual in nature in this day and age. I fail to connect with it completely. People that worship the moon, a change for the far , far worse. Wow!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your honest review. The essence of this poem is how I learned by studying the source of the light for the moon, that I need to be humble and recognize that my light comes from Jesus. By reflecting on nature I learn a lot about my relationship with God. Even Jesus referred to nature to be able to understand His caring for us or not to worry.
Comment from suep
Good entry in this contest. Excellent choice of artwork and presentation. Great rhyming. I especially love the lines 'Like you, my light must come from the Son
For me, Jesus is the One/He is my strength when I am weak, He is the Light I must seek'. Nice work. Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Good entry in this contest. Excellent choice of artwork and presentation. Great rhyming. I especially love the lines 'Like you, my light must come from the Son
For me, Jesus is the One/He is my strength when I am weak, He is the Light I must seek'. Nice work. Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your uplifting review. Those are my favorite lines also. I'm glad you enjoyed it
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You're very welcome! :)
Comment from BeasPeas
I like your poem and its content, which reads like a prayer, especially these lines:
"When all around such darkness of night
From which source comes such power of light"
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"You are not your own light we see shine
It comes it comes (did you intend to repeat "it comes" (?) from a power not thine"
My only suggestion would be to unify line length.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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I like your poem and its content, which reads like a prayer, especially these lines:
"When all around such darkness of night
From which source comes such power of light"
and
"You are not your own light we see shine
It comes it comes (did you intend to repeat "it comes" (?) from a power not thine"
My only suggestion would be to unify line length.
Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the heads-up on the repetition. I have no idea how that happened. I'm glad you appreciated those particular lines. Those are my favorites too.
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Mother moon. Mother Earth. Father sun. Where does each get its gender from? This is a good entry for the contest. I understand Father Sun. He provides sun fir the family. Mother Earth because she provides our food, bed etc. Mother Moon. Why? I am not criticizing or asking for or suggesting any change. Just musing our loud what gender the moon is. I always think of her as female and so do poets and the tarot deck. But, can both earth and the moon be mothers? Hmmm. The moon gives us light to guide us in the night. Controls our tides. And participates in the gravitational pull of the earth. For all I know we would be propelled into space were it not for the moon. So, female, warm, nurturing. I guess we are in a village with multiple mothers. All communes are like that and coops. I wrote a poem once that started "Oh Farher Sun, your daughter, the earth". Sorry for the digression. I liked your poem. And it was fun thinking about this stuff. Mother Moon is as good as anything else. Probably best. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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This is a good entry for the contest. Mother moon. Mother Earth. Father sun. Where does each get its gender from? This is a good entry for the contest. I understand Father Sun. He provides sun fir the family. Mother Earth because she provides our food, bed etc. Mother Moon. Why? I am not criticizing or asking for or suggesting any change. Just musing our loud what gender the moon is. I always think of her as female and so do poets and the tarot deck. But, can both earth and the moon be mothers? Hmmm. The moon gives us light to guide us in the night. Controls our tides. And participates in the gravitational pull of the earth. For all I know we would be propelled into space were it not for the moon. So, female, warm, nurturing. I guess we are in a village with multiple mothers. All communes are like that and coops. I wrote a poem once that started "Oh Farher Sun, your daughter, the earth". Sorry for the digression. I liked your poem. And it was fun thinking about this stuff. Mother Moon is as good as anything else. Probably best. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Your musings, bemusings were amusing. I think it comes from Native American Moon myths. I think you are right in your identifications of the maternal qualities. I love digression...lol This was a fun review...thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a melancholy write and change we can if only we take that first step and then never look back. I enjoyed your rhymes and sentiments, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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This is a melancholy write and change we can if only we take that first step and then never look back. I enjoyed your rhymes and sentiments, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your affirming review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a lovely spiritual verse that makes you think. I noticed no errors, just a good poem with a great message and flow. Thanks for sharing your poem and best of luck in the competition, Ana.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hello, this is a lovely spiritual verse that makes you think. I noticed no errors, just a good poem with a great message and flow. Thanks for sharing your poem and best of luck in the competition, Ana.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2018
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Hello Ana, thank you for your affirming review. I'm glad you saw the good flow it has.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Spiritual Poem writing prompt.
Your reverence for Mother Moon is clear in your lovely verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Spiritual Poem writing prompt.
Your reverence for Mother Moon is clear in your lovely verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your lovely review. I appreciate you recognizing my reverence for Mother Moon. I glad it came through.
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is this poem and the picture selection is outstanding and complimented the poem. The poem has lots of imagery. The reader really liked the poem.
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Beautifully written is this poem and the picture selection is outstanding and complimented the poem. The poem has lots of imagery. The reader really liked the poem.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2018
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Thank you for you affirming review. I'm glad you like the poem and appreciated my use of imagery.
