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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from Pamusart
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This is very entertaining. I guess red got his comeuppance and green is the new enforcer. Looks like green might be the only one left. Lesson? Be wary of the new guy. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Very creative. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
    Thanks, Pamusart
Comment from Spitfire
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A fun read-aloud for a play group. Reminds me of 'Ten little Indians'. Clever pairing of color with connotation: Red feeling angry, green being clueless, blue putting the damper on everything.
Love the story line and how they all disappear. Delightful ending with Green left the victor.
Amusing use of repetition.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Thamk you, Shari. Green was the red herring, so to speak.
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very cute one scene script about the murder of the parakeets. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Thanks, Teri
Comment from Gloria ....
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Uh oh, now we know what their dastardly plan is, trying to eliminate kitty cat.

Ha, great ending with kitty and the canary feathers, erm parakeet feathers sticking out of his mouth.

For a second there I thought this would be a great puppet show for kids until that excellent ending.

beautifully done!

Gloria


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Thanks, Gloria.
Comment from JDRBAR
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I should delete a star for being so sadistic LOL I LOVE parakeets. How can you be so cruel? The repetition in the dialogue is very parakeet like. Nice job

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Thanks, JDRBAR
Comment from BeasPeas
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I can't believe I read that whole thing! But--it was so mesmerizing I couldn't stop myself. A murder of parakeets! Now that they're all killed off and only Green is left--what will be your next venture?
Marilyn

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    The Pit and the Parakeet (perhaps)
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Yellow's comment needs a question mark - ..."how are the humans involved(?)" (*grinning at this script*)

HAHAHAHA! ("Had a headache.")

Oh, that Green was MEAN! (ROFL) (I'm not sure I really want to get inside that mind of yours... LOL)

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Someone suggested that RED was Putin, PURPLE Trump, and the rest America.
Comment from estory
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This has a good pace to it, and some funny and interestingly done word play, that makes for some good comedy. It's also a reveal of human nature, through these parakeets, and the fact that they are parakeets giving voice to human concerns, is kind of social commentary. Interesting idea, with potential. estory

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    Thanks, estory
Comment from nomi338
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It is always wise to know whom you can trust before you place yourself in harms way. I never attend meetings that do not have a well mapped out agenda. When it becomes apparent that agenda is not being followed, I leave before things can get nasty or out of hand. I'm just saying.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
    It?s always the guy who seems like he doesn?t know anything who ends up stabbing everyone in 5be back.
reply by nomi338 on 12-Apr-2018
    My point exactly. Over the last few years of my life I have developed almost a sixth sense about when it is time to cover my backside and exit stage left, quickly.
Comment from Harry Smith
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Exceptionally well written is this script with a picture selection that really complimented the write. The reader really enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
    Thanks, Harry