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Comment from Pantygynt
When I saw the explanatory line I expected these to linked by a word or syllable, but your linking by theme is more subtle in this sequence of of springtime cinquains. I love the oxymoron in the penultimate line that makes for a strong finish.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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When I saw the explanatory line I expected these to linked by a word or syllable, but your linking by theme is more subtle in this sequence of of springtime cinquains. I love the oxymoron in the penultimate line that makes for a strong finish.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Well, yes, they are linked by idea, not by a word or syllable. But I like the idea of repeating a word or phrase from one to the next. Anupam (The Death) has done a poem that uses repeating phrases that is very good.
Comment from misscookie
I have falling be hind again You have captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for this lovely poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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I have falling be hind again You have captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for this lovely poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading. Aren't we all behind most of the time? :)
Carol
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You're very welcome the word behind is the name of F/s game.
Cookie
Comment from RGstar
Apart from Azure, dear Ciliverde, if only for the fact an often over-used wordt, I really liked this short piece. Beautifully serene and giving. At one with its theme, at one with harmony.
Beautiful.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Apart from Azure, dear Ciliverde, if only for the fact an often over-used wordt, I really liked this short piece. Beautifully serene and giving. At one with its theme, at one with harmony.
Beautiful.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Azure, yes I can see what you mean. Another word for blue with two syllables, hmmm...
Thanks for the review and comments, and all the stars too :)
Carol
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Turquoise is beautiful...gets away from the stigma...even 'cyan' , but I guess most would recognize turquoise
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautiful painting that really complimented the poems. The poems each has lots and lots of imagery and the reader really enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Beautiful painting that really complimented the poems. The poems each has lots and lots of imagery and the reader really enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much, Harry - I appreciate your words about the imagery :)
Carol
Comment from Artasylum
Such a beautiful piece of imagery. love the green you've used for the background and the fun shape of your poem... fun read... very pretty. yours, diana
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Such a beautiful piece of imagery. love the green you've used for the background and the fun shape of your poem... fun read... very pretty. yours, diana
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much! I love the color green - that and blue are my favorites :)
Carol
Comment from meeshu
this is a great example cinquain poetry and what can be done with it in the proper hands. I like the form and linking them, one stanza always seems to leave so much unsaid........meeshu
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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this is a great example cinquain poetry and what can be done with it in the proper hands. I like the form and linking them, one stanza always seems to leave so much unsaid........meeshu
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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It's hard to say all there is to say in just one cinquain...I have noticed that myself, lol. Thank you for the comments :))
Carol
Comment from Teri7
These are very beautiful linked cinquain poems you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing them. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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These are very beautiful linked cinquain poems you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing them. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thanks so much and sorry for the late reply! :))
Carol
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a joy to read. Such great descriptive words and it flowed so effortlessly! My favorite stanza: Azure light in limpid sky; soul-bursting music of throated thrush recalls the dawn of day.
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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What a joy to read. Such great descriptive words and it flowed so effortlessly! My favorite stanza: Azure light in limpid sky; soul-bursting music of throated thrush recalls the dawn of day.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thank you so much, someone said azure was an overused word, I might try to think of a different one. I appreciate your review :))
Carol
Comment from apky
I liked the last stanza very much, which is not to day that the rest of your poem wasn't excellent as well. It was. The last lines remind us that we should recognize that we are just a small part of the larger picture and should behave accordingly.
All things
are one, I know,
and so I am content -
a tiny piece of vastness in
this light.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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I liked the last stanza very much, which is not to day that the rest of your poem wasn't excellent as well. It was. The last lines remind us that we should recognize that we are just a small part of the larger picture and should behave accordingly.
All things
are one, I know,
and so I am content -
a tiny piece of vastness in
this light.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Yes! We are a small part of the whole picture - we don't understand it all and don't need to - but we can still marvel at it :))
Carol
Comment from rspoet
Hello Carol,
This is truly an exceptional series of cinquains
some read like splendid haiku with great satori lines.
The imagery is always what I look for first
and no one does it better.
A tiny piece with a large heart and talent to match.
Spring in the meadow, in the air and all down the page
Beautifully done, love the art work, too
Robert
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Hello Carol,
This is truly an exceptional series of cinquains
some read like splendid haiku with great satori lines.
The imagery is always what I look for first
and no one does it better.
A tiny piece with a large heart and talent to match.
Spring in the meadow, in the air and all down the page
Beautifully done, love the art work, too
Robert
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thank you, Robert, and I apologize for the late reply. I was out of town for a week with very limited wifi - in Montana, which was fabulous. I appreciate your kind comments very much :))
Carol
