Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Bill, what a clever pranka. You have such a clever way with words, but that is not the first time I've told you that. As usual you left me smiling and with a great image. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 04-May-2018

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reply by the author on 04-May-2018

Thank, Ulla

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hello Bill, you are clever with words. I liked this one very much. Lots of great alliteration, and poor Pam. All that power and nowhere to go. I think the picture suits the poem and I noticed no errors, just a fun poem I'd recommend to others for review, Ana.

 Comment Written 03-May-2018

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reply by the author on 03-May-2018

Thanks, Ana

Comment from Phillip C Kuhn

Excellent

I don't fully understand the style of poetry, it's interesting and I do get what your saying, so as far as the piece goes, it's pretty solid, I enjoy creativity on all levels.

 Comment Written 03-May-2018

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reply by the author on 03-May-2018

Thanks, Phillip. It?s sung to the Brady Bunch theme. It should be available on YouTube.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks how awfully and abruptly the sponge Pam Porifera after filtered radiation and developing consciousness sought to sap the entire sea; well written, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 03-May-2018

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reply by the author on 03-May-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Good luck babe. That is going to require a whole lot of sucking. By the time she finishes, she will have very muscular cheeks. Maybe she can enlist the aid of her cousin Bob. Old Bob the boob should be able to accommodate her, it is widely believed that he is pretty much a sucker already.

 Comment Written 02-May-2018

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reply by the author on 02-May-2018

Thanks, nomi

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

The sponge looks like someone in a mask about ready to rob a bank. Some nice touches of alliteration with Sought to sap the sea. The gold against the red is a little difficult to read. Some kind of mutation occurred, it would seem. Maybe Pam will begin soaking up all the other creatures in the sea. judi

 Comment Written 02-May-2018

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reply by the author on 02-May-2018

That's the second reference to the color of the text. I'll give it another look. Thanks.

reply by judiverse on 02-May-2018

It's good when something is an easy fix. judi

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Now that is a fine looking sponge, it almost looks good enough to eat if I weren't already full on air, I might consider it. LOL.

Great job Bill.

Gloria

 Comment Written 02-May-2018

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reply by the author on 02-May-2018

Thanks, Gloria

Comment from JanPerry

Good

Okay what's with the sponges? Is this your Google exercise?
Try something heavier like a donkey next time. This would make a good joke. Ha..
I might be educational if I understood it better.

 Comment Written 02-May-2018

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reply by the author on 02-May-2018

If you don't like sponges now, by the time I write eight more about them you'll be putting them in a pile on the floor of your locsl grocery store snd setting them on fire.

reply by JanPerry on 04-May-2018

No problem. I'll soak it up.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Bill;
I see we have moved on to the sponge family. Great use of the words - I only caution the use of orange font on the red background. It can be a bit hard to read.

I love the thought of a sponge 'sapping' the sea. She sucks it up until it is dry!

~patty~

 Comment Written 02-May-2018

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reply by the author on 02-May-2018

Thanks, Patty