She Waits
A Kyrielle9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, She Waits, has the general set up, along with an abaC rhyme scheme, and creates a sad scene of hopeless abandonment. We know these people, who wait for someone to return and for life to go forward.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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This kyrielle, She Waits, has the general set up, along with an abaC rhyme scheme, and creates a sad scene of hopeless abandonment. We know these people, who wait for someone to return and for life to go forward.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thanks, Bill, for stopping by to read and review this kyrielle.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good abab rhyme scheme utilized in your Kryielle entry, Anonymous Poet.
Cactus blooms take a very long time to bloom.
To wait all of that time only to have it die would be more than a bit discouraging, indeed.
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Good abab rhyme scheme utilized in your Kryielle entry, Anonymous Poet.
Cactus blooms take a very long time to bloom.
To wait all of that time only to have it die would be more than a bit discouraging, indeed.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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So nice to hear from you,Dean! Appreciate your insightful comments. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This is a very well-written poem with a lot of deep emotions! I love the style of the Kyrielle poem and your repeated lines add so much to the appeal of the piece. This is a solid entry to the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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This is a very well-written poem with a lot of deep emotions! I love the style of the Kyrielle poem and your repeated lines add so much to the appeal of the piece. This is a solid entry to the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Thank you for your positive feedback.
Comment from Joan E.
What a striking artwork and evocative Kyrielle! I admired your alternating rhymes plus repeats and the touching theme of lost love. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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What a striking artwork and evocative Kyrielle! I admired your alternating rhymes plus repeats and the touching theme of lost love. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thank you for your insightful review and generous rating!
Comment from Bobby Jo
This feels sad as if I'm up at 3 waiting for my own cactus to bloom. I like the rhyming to this, it reads like a sad song.
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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This feels sad as if I'm up at 3 waiting for my own cactus to bloom. I like the rhyming to this, it reads like a sad song.
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thanks for dropping by to read and review this sad kyrielle. Guess it could be a song!
Comment from apky
I know nothing about this kind of poetry writing or any other particular forms of poems that I read about here. I'm simply in love with the reading of poem and love what each individual poem has to tell me. Like yours did:
By morning blossom will have died,
just like her hopes and dreams of groom,
who left behind heartbroken bride
waiting for the cactus to bloom
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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I know nothing about this kind of poetry writing or any other particular forms of poems that I read about here. I'm simply in love with the reading of poem and love what each individual poem has to tell me. Like yours did:
By morning blossom will have died,
just like her hopes and dreams of groom,
who left behind heartbroken bride
waiting for the cactus to bloom
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Appreciate very much your positive feedback. It's encouraging.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There's sadness in this poem which is so well rhymed with a silky soft flow and a joy to read, I wish you luck with the contest, the last stanza is my favourite, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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There's sadness in this poem which is so well rhymed with a silky soft flow and a joy to read, I wish you luck with the contest, the last stanza is my favourite, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thanks, Dolly, for your insights.
Comment from dginnh
Hi, This was nice, and I learned of a new style of writing while reading this, so a win win. The line that stands out is "For one night joy replaces strife" I wasn't sure if the "F" was capitalized on purpose to emphasize the brief glimpse of hope, or just a typo. The imagery was very good, albeit sad. Dave
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Hi, This was nice, and I learned of a new style of writing while reading this, so a win win. The line that stands out is "For one night joy replaces strife" I wasn't sure if the "F" was capitalized on purpose to emphasize the brief glimpse of hope, or just a typo. The imagery was very good, albeit sad. Dave
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks for sharing your insights.
Comment from W G Griffiths
I like the poem and you did a great job following the rules. Flowed nicely. A blues poem. I am left wondering more about the cactus than the woman. The cactus is the CC
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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I like the poem and you did a great job following the rules. Flowed nicely. A blues poem. I am left wondering more about the cactus than the woman. The cactus is the CC
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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The cactus is called the Queen of the night. A short but beautiful existence as opposed to the woman?s dad one. Thanks for the review,
