A Farmers Lament
A tribute to farmers who protect wildlife25 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
Your quatrain is well written and offers up some very strong imagery in the minds eye. The rhyme and meter were very smooth and enjoyable to read. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Your quatrain is well written and offers up some very strong imagery in the minds eye. The rhyme and meter were very smooth and enjoyable to read. Good Luck!
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you so much, Hitcher, for your kind response to my poem.
Comment from meeshu
very well written and a message of hopeless lament. I share some of your guilt, I have never fired a weapon but in my early years I would take down 2 or 3 beautiful Pheasants a year. I grew up in Iowa, next to an open prairie. our house had a large picture window---you can do the math. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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very well written and a message of hopeless lament. I share some of your guilt, I have never fired a weapon but in my early years I would take down 2 or 3 beautiful Pheasants a year. I grew up in Iowa, next to an open prairie. our house had a large picture window---you can do the math. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you so much, meeshu, for your sympathetic response to my lament. I truly appreciate your kind praise.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Author;
It is so sad to read these words, and maddening. Why do people think they can trespass in the name of 'hunting?' I've heard all the arguments about thinning down the populations for the good of the species. Blah, blah, blah.
Your poetry incorporates the words associated with the hunter and make the hardships of the farmer real;
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Dear Anonymous Author;
It is so sad to read these words, and maddening. Why do people think they can trespass in the name of 'hunting?' I've heard all the arguments about thinning down the populations for the good of the species. Blah, blah, blah.
Your poetry incorporates the words associated with the hunter and make the hardships of the farmer real;
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Hi Patty. I truly appreciate your sympathetic response to my lament, and many thanks for the best wishes.
Comment from Boogienights
I love this poem, the wonderful rhyme, the idea of protecting wildlife and the great picture you paired it with. I don't like hunting in any form, although I understand it, as long as the game is eaten and not hunted for sport...but to go on private property? They should be arrested! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I love this poem, the wonderful rhyme, the idea of protecting wildlife and the great picture you paired it with. I don't like hunting in any form, although I understand it, as long as the game is eaten and not hunted for sport...but to go on private property? They should be arrested! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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My lament is that these hunters are poachers and never asked permission to hunt on the farmer's property. Many thanks for your very kind praise of my poem.
Comment from Swampfox1
I can feel your pain in the poem. The poem does convey your sentiments and how your feel to the reader, in fact, it does it very well. Good luck in the contest, I think you have a wonderful entry. I see that you followed some of the rhyming scheme but not all of it. Do you think it might hurt your chance in the contest? The rules state: "A quatrain is a poem that has four lines for each stanza. It usually has rhyme scheme of abab or its variant, xbyb. Click here for an example.". I don't know which scheme you followed but the first stanza eludes to abab. I would suggest following the same scheme throughout. such as ,
I shout and whistle, wave my arms,
but I'm ignored; they're too intent
on finding ringnecks--they wish them harm.
They'll shoot on sight if dogs flush them, airbound sent."
It's just a suggestion, I am sure you can do well on your own.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I can feel your pain in the poem. The poem does convey your sentiments and how your feel to the reader, in fact, it does it very well. Good luck in the contest, I think you have a wonderful entry. I see that you followed some of the rhyming scheme but not all of it. Do you think it might hurt your chance in the contest? The rules state: "A quatrain is a poem that has four lines for each stanza. It usually has rhyme scheme of abab or its variant, xbyb. Click here for an example.". I don't know which scheme you followed but the first stanza eludes to abab. I would suggest following the same scheme throughout. such as ,
I shout and whistle, wave my arms,
but I'm ignored; they're too intent
on finding ringnecks--they wish them harm.
They'll shoot on sight if dogs flush them, airbound sent."
It's just a suggestion, I am sure you can do well on your own.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you so much, Swampfox1, for taking the time to read and comment upon my quatrain entry. I am delighted you could feel the Speaker's pain and appreciate your kind praise. If you reread the poem you will notice that every stanza is written in ABCB rhyme (including the first one).
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Cool. I will re-read and take more notice. And, you are very welcome. Thanks.
Comment from Pantygynt
Some take the law into their own hands and believe they have the right to do anything they wish anywhere they want, and they are the ones who've got the guns. You are better off thinking twice. it's safer that way.
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Some take the law into their own hands and believe they have the right to do anything they wish anywhere they want, and they are the ones who've got the guns. You are better off thinking twice. it's safer that way.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you for sharing my poem. Indeed, there are hunters out there who have no conscience when it comes to getting what they are after.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
These, thy creatures, chose to make
my farm their home, don't ask me why.
Forgive me, Lord, for having failed
to keep them safe. I've let them die
An excellent poem much enjoyed by me kindest regards and warm wishes Meia xx
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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These, thy creatures, chose to make
my farm their home, don't ask me why.
Forgive me, Lord, for having failed
to keep them safe. I've let them die
An excellent poem much enjoyed by me kindest regards and warm wishes Meia xx
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you so much, Meia, for sharing my poem. I am delighted you enjoyed it so much.
Comment from Air Spirit
I was brought to tears in reading your poem... this is a subject that is so vitally important, but gets little or no attention by the public... but so near and dear to my heart, being an avid animal lover... the brutality of hunting animals for 'sport' -- seriously? they think it is a sport to chase something with a shotgun and shoot it? Oh.... I get so upset ... but your poem is wonderful in that it brings to light the absurdity and cruelty of man in his disrespect and disrespect God's creatures, big and small... I loved that you wrote "...stomp through the rows and trample stalks
in search of injured or new prey..." because if someone can kill for 'sport' -- then most likely, they have no respect or regard for Mother Nature either... Your form is perfect - and so well done... excellent poem, and a great entry for the competition!
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I was brought to tears in reading your poem... this is a subject that is so vitally important, but gets little or no attention by the public... but so near and dear to my heart, being an avid animal lover... the brutality of hunting animals for 'sport' -- seriously? they think it is a sport to chase something with a shotgun and shoot it? Oh.... I get so upset ... but your poem is wonderful in that it brings to light the absurdity and cruelty of man in his disrespect and disrespect God's creatures, big and small... I loved that you wrote "...stomp through the rows and trample stalks
in search of injured or new prey..." because if someone can kill for 'sport' -- then most likely, they have no respect or regard for Mother Nature either... Your form is perfect - and so well done... excellent poem, and a great entry for the competition!
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Thank you, Air Spirit, for taking the time to read my poem and make your own sentiments about hunting so clear. I also appreciate your very kind praise.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Quatrain Poetry writing prompt.
Well rhymed, well written, and a story well told.
The story itself is a sad but true one. Too many people have little or no respect for property or nature.
Sharon
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Quatrain Poetry writing prompt.
Well rhymed, well written, and a story well told.
The story itself is a sad but true one. Too many people have little or no respect for property or nature.
Sharon
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Many thanks for sharing my quateain and your sympathetic response to my story.
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow I think that's so rude that hunters are so bent on their prey they ignore it's your farm.
When we used to live in Tennessee I'd hear gun shots all around..frustrating.
I loved your imagery of shattered wing..poor pheasant.
God bless
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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Wow I think that's so rude that hunters are so bent on their prey they ignore it's your farm.
When we used to live in Tennessee I'd hear gun shots all around..frustrating.
I loved your imagery of shattered wing..poor pheasant.
God bless
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 18-May-2018
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I truly appreciate your kind praise and sympathetic response to my story.
