My Sick Day
If you are happy and you know it, thank your meds!!8 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow...been there/done that (minus the Maids4Day) -- but you put it to such great rhythm! Could almost feel the drumbeat off in the distance as your symptoms chimed in on the guitar. Good job!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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Wow...been there/done that (minus the Maids4Day) -- but you put it to such great rhythm! Could almost feel the drumbeat off in the distance as your symptoms chimed in on the guitar. Good job!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from JDRBAR
I cannot find a thing to critique. This is wonderful. I love Maxine as well. I know I'm guilty of procrastinating when it comes to drugs and doctors, but also know when to give in LOL. Great humor.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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I cannot find a thing to critique. This is wonderful. I love Maxine as well. I know I'm guilty of procrastinating when it comes to drugs and doctors, but also know when to give in LOL. Great humor.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2018
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Thanks so much! I love Maxine too. Thanks for the review.
Comment from LIJ Red
The mirror encounter is not the core of this work, but since I am no contest judge, it don't matter to me. Humorous and readable. Fivers. Huh? What do they mean 150 characters needed to save a review?
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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The mirror encounter is not the core of this work, but since I am no contest judge, it don't matter to me. Humorous and readable. Fivers. Huh? What do they mean 150 characters needed to save a review?
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Ha ha. Too funny. Thanks for the review!
Comment from aanneee
First off, if this is your truth then I do hope you are feeling better. Thank you for the chuckle wit Maxine and thank you for the very good writing for your Mirror contest. You nearly had me in tears, but like I said...nearly. Very nicely done I enjoyed reading this and wish you luck in the contest...Dinah
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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First off, if this is your truth then I do hope you are feeling better. Thank you for the chuckle wit Maxine and thank you for the very good writing for your Mirror contest. You nearly had me in tears, but like I said...nearly. Very nicely done I enjoyed reading this and wish you luck in the contest...Dinah
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thank you Dinah. And, yes, I?m sick today, but thought I would laugh my way through it! I?m especially fond of Maxine and look to her for a smile now and again. Thanks for the delightful review and good wishes! Melissa
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a wonderful poem. I loved every stanza. Such a creative and fun approach to the writing prompt, "mirror." This is a perfect entry for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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What a wonderful poem. I loved every stanza. Such a creative and fun approach to the writing prompt, "mirror." This is a perfect entry for this contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thanks so much! I enjoyed your comments and review.
Comment from RFL
Very cute, clever! Made me smile. Two thoughts: 1) I didn't quite get the line about "meat lovers"; and, 2) Would have liked to see a bit more in the mirror. Best to you, Rona
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Very cute, clever! Made me smile. Two thoughts: 1) I didn't quite get the line about "meat lovers"; and, 2) Would have liked to see a bit more in the mirror. Best to you, Rona
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Hi Rona, thanks so much for your comments and review. The Meat Lovers is a specialty pizza they make at Pizza Hut. I didn?t know how to incorporate the mirror too well into my head cold theme, so mentioned it slightly.
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent rhyming and humorous poem for the Mirror Prompt contest. The poet's woes from the flu are described beautifully. We all have been there and we all have felt that way. It's a painful sloppy mess during but it's also comical after it's over. Well done.
The line, "I need some meds, my hubby said," I know you didn't apply quotations, but why not write, with the quotations, "You need some meds," my hubby said, It appears more correct and explanatory.
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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This is an excellent rhyming and humorous poem for the Mirror Prompt contest. The poet's woes from the flu are described beautifully. We all have been there and we all have felt that way. It's a painful sloppy mess during but it's also comical after it's over. Well done.
The line, "I need some meds, my hubby said," I know you didn't apply quotations, but why not write, with the quotations, "You need some meds," my hubby said, It appears more correct and explanatory.
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thanks so much for the suggestion and comments. I will definitely use your idea!!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Cybertron1986
There's an abundance of humor here that make your piece very strong. It delivers a direct voice supplemented with genuine comedy. For example, "There's some trouble, I'm seeing double." That made me laugh. Many parts are very relative to the last time I, too, experienced the flu. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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There's an abundance of humor here that make your piece very strong. It delivers a direct voice supplemented with genuine comedy. For example, "There's some trouble, I'm seeing double." That made me laugh. Many parts are very relative to the last time I, too, experienced the flu. Well done.
Comment Written 30-May-2018
reply by the author on 30-May-2018
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Thanks so much for your comments and good review. Much appreciated!!
