Woven
5/7/5 poem28 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Val, very nicely written sweet girl...we have good and we bad memories...all of which made us who we are...I love your poem you...the second line I think has to many syllables....you should still have time you change it...picture perfect you...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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HI Val, very nicely written sweet girl...we have good and we bad memories...all of which made us who we are...I love your poem you...the second line I think has to many syllables....you should still have time you change it...picture perfect you...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thanks Linda I have. Hugs
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your so welcome sweet girl...always...love xxoo
Comment from Alexander Vasa
How gorgeous is this 5-7-5 poem for the contest? The words, the art, just lovely. And the tapestry of life is an image we can all make sense of in our own way. Both tears and laughter, the warp and weft of life, the cloth of our existence, I love cloth as an image. There's just something about it. Nicely written and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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How gorgeous is this 5-7-5 poem for the contest? The words, the art, just lovely. And the tapestry of life is an image we can all make sense of in our own way. Both tears and laughter, the warp and weft of life, the cloth of our existence, I love cloth as an image. There's just something about it. Nicely written and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the 5-7-5 poem contest. Great words with correct syllable count. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the 5-7-5 poem contest. Great words with correct syllable count. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Salty is one syllable I have checked it twice.
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I have changed it to sad and not salty, as I am seeing too many variances. I hope you change your review
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse tells of teh best memories.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse tells of teh best memories.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you
Comment from Old Soldier
Good, really good. Like the way you did that with tears and laughter. It works. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading.
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Good, really good. Like the way you did that with tears and laughter. It works. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing and keep writing and reading.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this lovely review
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is such a simple yet elegant post. I would be surprised if it does not win. I have no suggestion for improvement because I think it is perfect. Even your drawing and background colors are perfect. Good luck.
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This is such a simple yet elegant post. I would be surprised if it does not win. I have no suggestion for improvement because I think it is perfect. Even your drawing and background colors are perfect. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Debbie, you have made me feel proud of this piece. I wanted to share a bit of life in a different way, and you totally got my message. I am thankful for this review. May the sun shine on you.
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That's funny. I'm never proud of a piece either until someone else tells me that it's good. "Woven" is definitely good.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is good. I like the clever wording you've used to get your point across. Memories woven and tapestry of life. This was well thought out. I believe that a tapestry is woven if I'm using that correctly. You talk about how those memories are woven into a tapestry painting of one's life. You've done a fine job presenting this and I enjoyed reading it. Well done Val!
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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This is good. I like the clever wording you've used to get your point across. Memories woven and tapestry of life. This was well thought out. I believe that a tapestry is woven if I'm using that correctly. You talk about how those memories are woven into a tapestry painting of one's life. You've done a fine job presenting this and I enjoyed reading it. Well done Val!
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review, which is very thoughtful and not a fluffy bit for money. Once again, I appreciate your thoughts.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Wonderful, crisp, colorful haiku; deeply meaningful. Tears and laughter-- part of our life, our growth and understanding. The photo fits perfectly.
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Wonderful, crisp, colorful haiku; deeply meaningful. Tears and laughter-- part of our life, our growth and understanding. The photo fits perfectly.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review, and I especially like the word "crisp"
