The champ
Such an honour16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This sixty-word story, The Champ, is definitely aimed at me. I never realized, when I entered egg and spoon racing, that such glory was even attainable. Thank you.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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This sixty-word story, The Champ, is definitely aimed at me. I never realized, when I entered egg and spoon racing, that such glory was even attainable. Thank you.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Yes it was you Bill. Thanks for reading,
Comment from w.j.debi
Ninety and still racing. That has to be a record in itself. And it does take a steady had to not drop that egg so William is certainly deserving.
You've done a great job telling a complete story in a few words, and making it interesting and fun to read as well.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2018
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Ninety and still racing. That has to be a record in itself. And it does take a steady had to not drop that egg so William is certainly deserving.
You've done a great job telling a complete story in a few words, and making it interesting and fun to read as well.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, much appreciated.
Comment from meeshu
this is so funny, Jen. and I am not sure why it is so funny. sixty words is not a lot to work with but you have succeeded in making my day/night. thank you.......meeshu
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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this is so funny, Jen. and I am not sure why it is so funny. sixty words is not a lot to work with but you have succeeded in making my day/night. thank you.......meeshu
Comment Written 18-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2018
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Thank you Meeshu for your great revue.
Comment from Pamusart
Cute Jen. Not sure how I missed this. I must have accidentally deleted the notification. Sorry. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. I can just see those ninety year olds in an egg and spoon race.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Cute Jen. Not sure how I missed this. I must have accidentally deleted the notification. Sorry. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. I can just see those ninety year olds in an egg and spoon race.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Thanks Pam. You probably missed it as it was a blind entry to the competition. Cheers Jen.
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Ah. Yes. I went to your profile
Comment from Swampfox1
It is a complete story and it is well written and as of some of the others I have read the last line is the clincher, the finisher and the final say. Well done and certainly a good entry into the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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It is a complete story and it is well written and as of some of the others I have read the last line is the clincher, the finisher and the final say. Well done and certainly a good entry into the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2018
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Many thanks for the great review. Jen.
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you're welcome
Comment from ShirleyT1
Wow! I didn't see that ending at all! Great job of writing a complete story in sixty words. I commend you on the surprise ending! Good job and thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Wow! I didn't see that ending at all! Great job of writing a complete story in sixty words. I commend you on the surprise ending! Good job and thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! I must say I expected a different ending. LOL! But we do what we can. I might even take third place in a downhill wheelchair race some day.
By the way, "well deserved" does not need a hyphen because "well" is an adverb here. Hyphens are used to connect adjectives.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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LOL! I must say I expected a different ending. LOL! But we do what we can. I might even take third place in a downhill wheelchair race some day.
By the way, "well deserved" does not need a hyphen because "well" is an adverb here. Hyphens are used to connect adjectives.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Hi thanks a lot Phyllis. I thought that about the hyphen. It was Giraffemag that told me to put one in. Obviously he doesn't know everything.(but more than me).
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I just looked it up. From the rules, which are being more and more ignored as English grammar is no longer taught in most schools (for nearly three decades now!), are being forgotten, so both are acceptable now.
Once, an adverb (such as WELL) did not take a hyphen when in front of an adjective. Only adjective-adjective pairs did. Now, it seems many sources say to put in the hyphen. So go ahead and use it. Can't say how the rule got confused, but it is now either the new rule or about to become the new rule. Progress backwards... that's what we have now. :)
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent piece. Cute twist at the end. I was trying to figure it out but you surprised me. As we boomers get older this is something we can relate to. Good pacing and word selection. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Excellent piece. Cute twist at the end. I was trying to figure it out but you surprised me. As we boomers get older this is something we can relate to. Good pacing and word selection. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2018
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Many thanks, much appreciated.
Comment from poetwatch
Congratulation, you have what other wish for... a pat on the back... as a champion you must know that the honor that this holds for you is that if you scramble those eggs we can make a cake and I'll help you eat it. Good funny entry for the 60 Word Dash contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Congratulation, you have what other wish for... a pat on the back... as a champion you must know that the honor that this holds for you is that if you scramble those eggs we can make a cake and I'll help you eat it. Good funny entry for the 60 Word Dash contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Thanks so much for your great review.
Comment from JDRBAR
This certainly tells a complete story LOL. Love it. I'm not over 90 (yet) but I don't think I could ever win a spoon and egg race. He deserves the trophy. Good luck with this.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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This certainly tells a complete story LOL. Love it. I'm not over 90 (yet) but I don't think I could ever win a spoon and egg race. He deserves the trophy. Good luck with this.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2018
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Thanks for the great review.
