Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Good job, Bill, on this 575. Your picture is a great pairing with your words. I believe those words have a hidden message. I believe there is more to this with the bold, capital letters--maybe no matter how hard one tries they will never outrun infinity?? Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Thanks, Jan, for giving this a look. I added the caps to point out the names of the two television programs that people recall as weird and unusual. The inside and outer should in one line forms a paradox and the twilight and treadmill are alliterative. The treadmill itself is formed in the Greek sign for infinity, the figure eight.

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

That's funny, Bill! I love M. C. Escher's work, one of my favorite artists. I thought you did a good job matching the poem to the cartoon. Nicely done!

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Thanks, Russell.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Doo, doo, doo, doo, doo, doo, doo, doo. Be afraid, be very afraid. Welcome to the outer limits. This scene resembles traffic on a Friday afternoon on any typical Southern California Freeway. Especially during rush hour.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

This is the cloverleaf off-ramp that returns you to the road you were on.

reply by nomi338 on 11-Jul-2018

If it's all the same, I will opt to just stay at home.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about Gerbils World has something like twilight zone treadmill for the purpose Mr Gerbil knows as it is a fun he keeps for his mouse free living; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from Miranda Langston

Excellent

the picture made me laugh out loud and say the same thing the mouse is thinking but the poem was also very amusing. i like the tidbit about M.C. Escher you added below the poem

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 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Thanks, Miranda.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, this is hilarious! A twilight zone treadmill for Gerbils is a unique write and I don't know anyone else who could write this, but you Bill, pure magic, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Thank you, Dolly, for the nice review. Bill