Copperfield
2-10-2 Poetry17 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 2-10-2 poem about the effects of neglect on children that make them look older years before their time. The eyes tell the story better than anything else.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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A very well-written 2-10-2 poem about the effects of neglect on children that make them look older years before their time. The eyes tell the story better than anything else.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you Sandra for the review and encouraging comments.
Comment from RodG
Easy to see why this one won the ribbon. Your poem captures the essence of that great photograph. Congratulations on your win! Rod
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Easy to see why this one won the ribbon. Your poem captures the essence of that great photograph. Congratulations on your win! Rod
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much RodG. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. Melissa
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Thank you very much RodG. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. Melissa
Comment from Dean Kuch
I agree, Anonymous Poet.
The looks in the eyes of pictures of children like this suffering from starvation and poverty bring to mind what we called in the Marine Corps "The Thousand Yard Stare." Grunts in the field who have seen the horrors of combat often acquire this whether they want to or not.
It's as if they can see beyond this earthly realm and into the next.
Good composition of your 2-10-2 and a pertinent topic indeed.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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I agree, Anonymous Poet.
The looks in the eyes of pictures of children like this suffering from starvation and poverty bring to mind what we called in the Marine Corps "The Thousand Yard Stare." Grunts in the field who have seen the horrors of combat often acquire this whether they want to or not.
It's as if they can see beyond this earthly realm and into the next.
Good composition of your 2-10-2 and a pertinent topic indeed.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much.
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You're welcome.
Good luck!
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Yes Writer these two conditions when inflicted upon and or experienced by children takes them into an areana of void and worry that reflects in their eyes because their missing the main ingredients that keeps them youthful and that is Love.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Yes Writer these two conditions when inflicted upon and or experienced by children takes them into an areana of void and worry that reflects in their eyes because their missing the main ingredients that keeps them youthful and that is Love.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for your comments and review.
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Thanks for sharing
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is a powerful entry for this contest. "Old eyes" is such a wonderful way to depict the sadness of neglect. It literally pours from their eyes. There is no light. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This is a powerful entry for this contest. "Old eyes" is such a wonderful way to depict the sadness of neglect. It literally pours from their eyes. There is no light. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you Debbie.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Ohhhhh.... How very sad this 2-10-2 poem is, but so very true.
"cause small children to wear old eyes." I like the way you phrased that.
Nicely done! Good luck! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Ohhhhh.... How very sad this 2-10-2 poem is, but so very true.
"cause small children to wear old eyes." I like the way you phrased that.
Nicely done! Good luck! ~Kerry
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you.
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Welcome.
Comment from June Sargent
Such profound sentiments expressed in three short lines. Sad eyes reflect a heavy heart. Tragic when it's a child. We just can't keep looking away.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Such profound sentiments expressed in three short lines. Sad eyes reflect a heavy heart. Tragic when it's a child. We just can't keep looking away.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from victor 66
It seems that in other countries and perhaps even in the U.S., adults have used and abused children forever. How can the human race have evolved for so many centuries and yet we do not feel the need for compassion. I don't have much hope for mankind, now or ever. This was a good write and a good read. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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It seems that in other countries and perhaps even in the U.S., adults have used and abused children forever. How can the human race have evolved for so many centuries and yet we do not feel the need for compassion. I don't have much hope for mankind, now or ever. This was a good write and a good read. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you Victor.
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You are welcome.
Comment from The Death
Your poem highlights one of the bitter truths of our society. Good choice to have a single sentence running across three lines. Excellent word economy. The picture compliments your words well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Your poem highlights one of the bitter truths of our society. Good choice to have a single sentence running across three lines. Excellent word economy. The picture compliments your words well. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the great review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Boogienights
This is an excellent entry in the 2-10-2 contest. You are right, children who lack in basic comforts and especially in love of family lose the Joy's of life. They see the world as a hard place. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is an excellent entry in the 2-10-2 contest. You are right, children who lack in basic comforts and especially in love of family lose the Joy's of life. They see the world as a hard place. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much.
