Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about the cause and effect of social negligence and devoid of rights to work and live, even children work in the copper field without safety work like adult workers getting no due pay or amenities; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thank you.

Comment from Therese103

Excellent

Awwww.....such a sad poem! Very true though.......I really think this is a great entry in the upcoming 2-10-2 contest.
God bless you.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks so much for the great review and comments. Much appreciated.

Comment from phill doran

Excellent

Hello Anon
Very good. Making use of the title to add to the overall theme is a clever idea - if I read Copperfield as the Dickens character (and not the las Vegas magician!)
The words are well chosen - to 'wear' eyes rather than to have them is good writing, it implies an artificial, unnatural condition. It also opens up the possibility that the situation can be saved - something worn may be removed: there is a way back.
There will be a lot of entries - there normally are for the smaller formats - but this is strong and I wish you well in the contest and with your further writing.
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks so much Phill.... I appreciate your comments and encouragement. And yes, I was referring to Dickens.

Comment from Phillip C Kuhn

Excellent

The image acted as an amazing if not perfect companion to the bold and heartfelt piece you constructed out of three lines, good work and thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from zlp22

Excellent

Very true, some children and even adults look old beyond their years.Picture is perfect. However even if you are poor you could still be well looked after. Good luck on your future writing.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks so much for your good review and encouraging comment.

Comment from mally mack

Excellent

Haunting - All of it. The photo was perfect. The words, they resonate. Too much truth in so few syllables. I guess that was the point huh?

Bravo
Mallory

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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thank you Mallory for the good review. That photo just makes my soul hurt. I wish we could help them all.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

How sad. Many children end up paying the price for their parent's mistakes. This is a great contest entry and should do well in the voting. You may even win. Good luck.

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 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks Thomas.... much appreciated. The picture just grips my soul!!