The Reason's Simple
Kids!14 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
I laughed at Charles Schultz's Peanuts when one of the kids said, "The cute girl smiled and me and said HI, and I didn't know what to do so I hit her." Fits the prompt, excellent post.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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I laughed at Charles Schultz's Peanuts when one of the kids said, "The cute girl smiled and me and said HI, and I didn't know what to do so I hit her." Fits the prompt, excellent post.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Hahaha. Children are so literal in their explanations. They're so funny. Thank you, Red.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this true, school yard story in dialog. I'm glad the teacher helped the friends make up. I enjoyed the parallel picture and colorful text as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for sharing this true, school yard story in dialog. I'm glad the teacher helped the friends make up. I enjoyed the parallel picture and colorful text as well. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this great review. I appreciate you taking the time.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Very clever! There's an element of surprise that made me laugh out loud in those last words. It's just right in length. You have a great ear for dialogue. I'd love to see you write a series of these.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Very clever! There's an element of surprise that made me laugh out loud in those last words. It's just right in length. You have a great ear for dialogue. I'd love to see you write a series of these.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate your support. I'll give some thought to a series. I hadn't thought of it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great response to the prompt. Your words + picture are a perfect pairing. The length is just right, too. I like the colors to indicate which person is speaking rather than quotation marks which would have added clutter. Your story told is humorous & so believable. I got a good laugh. The ending is priceless. Sounds just like a boy. Great job & best wishes to win this contest. Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This is a great response to the prompt. Your words + picture are a perfect pairing. The length is just right, too. I like the colors to indicate which person is speaking rather than quotation marks which would have added clutter. Your story told is humorous & so believable. I got a good laugh. The ending is priceless. Sounds just like a boy. Great job & best wishes to win this contest. Jan
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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What's even better is it's a true story, as you know. Thank you, Jan, for a great review and support.
Comment from Lady Jane
Oh my. Well, hopefully she got the frustration out of her system. Clean, solid writing here. No spags or nits to address. I like how the writer used color to signify the speaker. This was an easy, fun write. Don't change a thing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Oh my. Well, hopefully she got the frustration out of her system. Clean, solid writing here. No spags or nits to address. I like how the writer used color to signify the speaker. This was an easy, fun write. Don't change a thing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate your wonderful comments and your support.
Comment from Craigitar
Ha ha! Fun little dialogue only story. Well written. I liked that you used three different colors to show who was talking rather than quotation marks--creative. The last line was a complete surprise and made me laugh. Good entry for the contest. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Ha ha! Fun little dialogue only story. Well written. I liked that you used three different colors to show who was talking rather than quotation marks--creative. The last line was a complete surprise and made me laugh. Good entry for the contest. Best of luck!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you for a delightful review. I'm glad you thought it's funny.
Comment from country ranch writer
Typical answer! Kids get into all kinds of scrapes and awhile later they are best of friends. That's why they tell adults to let the kids work things out on their own.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Typical answer! Kids get into all kinds of scrapes and awhile later they are best of friends. That's why they tell adults to let the kids work things out on their own.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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I agree. They iron things out themselves. Parents only complicate things. Thank you.
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Comment from jenintorre
A very cute little dialogue only story with a good punch line.
I love your artwork and lay-out. It is very easy to read. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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A very cute little dialogue only story with a good punch line.
I love your artwork and lay-out. It is very easy to read. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Jen. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just had to write it. 8-)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
You don't want to break up, now, do you? (omit commas)
Sounds like what a child would say for sure. Cute story written in dialog. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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You don't want to break up, now, do you? (omit commas)
Sounds like what a child would say for sure. Cute story written in dialog. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Yes, kids! The story is short and full of action. Great lesson for kids, younger or older. Funny and amusing, every word is in its place and serves its purpose.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Yes, kids! The story is short and full of action. Great lesson for kids, younger or older. Funny and amusing, every word is in its place and serves its purpose.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you for a delightful review. Children are so much fun.
