Be Wee With Bea
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Sharing With Others"An allegory in the Winnie the Pooh genre
12 total reviews
Comment from Robert colley
Crazy as it seemed , when I reviewed your profile some . About 6 to 8 grade and up higher grade books as well. To me seem like the 1 st 4 to 6 paragraphs I felt a little slow as I was lost as in how the wording was. I looked at it as I was this is my last chance to get better in my life kinda a way. Meaning I was not really understanding your point of view. So I read it again and then all started to call into place for me. But don't know how it would for someone else with a learning disability . But that is another fix for another day. But I like where it's going
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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Crazy as it seemed , when I reviewed your profile some . About 6 to 8 grade and up higher grade books as well. To me seem like the 1 st 4 to 6 paragraphs I felt a little slow as I was lost as in how the wording was. I looked at it as I was this is my last chance to get better in my life kinda a way. Meaning I was not really understanding your point of view. So I read it again and then all started to call into place for me. But don't know how it would for someone else with a learning disability . But that is another fix for another day. But I like where it's going
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your dedicated review. Most would just dismiss it. If you begin with Ch. & read on til here it will make more sense. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Ricky1024
'With Other's was well written Rich in Theme As well as Imagery.
It Read and Flowed Well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Dr.Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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'With Other's was well written Rich in Theme As well as Imagery.
It Read and Flowed Well.
Adjective and Objective Contents were Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Dr.Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your thorough review. I hope you enjoyed it.
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
This is the first chapter I have read of the story as I haven't seen any other chapters but I really did enjoy this it was quite imaginative, very enjoyable thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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This is the first chapter I have read of the story as I haven't seen any other chapters but I really did enjoy this it was quite imaginative, very enjoyable thanks for sharing
Comment Written 27-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your generous review. If you wanted to go to my portfolio you could catch up. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Miranda Langston
This is certainly a very creative chapter. I love the names of the characters and even though i have only begun to read this book, i already feel invested in them :)
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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This is certainly a very creative chapter. I love the names of the characters and even though i have only begun to read this book, i already feel invested in them :)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your animated review. I hope you scan my profile to read the other previous chapters. You will appreciate them as much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Swampfox1
A lot of thought and imagination going into this story, I can tell that and it does flow very well and it reads well and I did not find any errors to speak of. A bear invites a raccoon into her den. Wow, and she certainly does get plenty exercises of different types.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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A lot of thought and imagination going into this story, I can tell that and it does flow very well and it reads well and I did not find any errors to speak of. A bear invites a raccoon into her den. Wow, and she certainly does get plenty exercises of different types.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your animated review. I hope you scan my profile to read the other previous chapters. You will appreciate them as much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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You're welcome. I will do that.
Comment from diamondbogle
I love this. Its pleasant to read. Very well put together and flows nicely. I noticed no errors. Held my attention throughtout. Overall very well done.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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I love this. Its pleasant to read. Very well put together and flows nicely. I noticed no errors. Held my attention throughtout. Overall very well done.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your animated review. I hope you scan my profile to read the other previous chapters. You will appreciate them as much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Mabaker
Okay Liz, tell me what other reviewers said about this story. I really am serious and for a reason.
Your writing is flawless for an article or a textbook. You can't be faulted on those. But you must lighten up a bit. You come across as a teacher and appear not to need help. That means your writing seems stiff, it is perfect for a teaching aid, your command of words brilliant, however, you are not writing a thesis, but a story of a bear who tries to be kind and it fails. Now put that marvelous brain that you have and write something for fun. I have faith in you Liz so get moving, you have been reviewing me for ages now I want to review a different type of story from you. You want, and you are intelligent enough to write from the place inside where all good writing comes from. Sincerely Anne. I am giving you a six because this is a terrific piece of writing, now write a story.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Okay Liz, tell me what other reviewers said about this story. I really am serious and for a reason.
Your writing is flawless for an article or a textbook. You can't be faulted on those. But you must lighten up a bit. You come across as a teacher and appear not to need help. That means your writing seems stiff, it is perfect for a teaching aid, your command of words brilliant, however, you are not writing a thesis, but a story of a bear who tries to be kind and it fails. Now put that marvelous brain that you have and write something for fun. I have faith in you Liz so get moving, you have been reviewing me for ages now I want to review a different type of story from you. You want, and you are intelligent enough to write from the place inside where all good writing comes from. Sincerely Anne. I am giving you a six because this is a terrific piece of writing, now write a story.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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You have nailed it. I am very serious in my writing. Let me think if I have any not so serious. I guess once a teacher, always a teacher. O'm also a Pisces, usually quite serious with the twinlke in the eye. I have written some silly stuff. Here is one:
Washer Mosher
Don't ever overstuff your washer
Don't you be a laundry mosher.
Never jam your clothes in with your feet
and never thrash your arms around during this feat.
For you might just hit the start button
and then you're as good as ground mutton.
Never put the bleach up too high
for you may find it splashing in your eye.
Then you'll be so blind,
that stop button you'll never find.
You'll whirl faster round and round
and just like that matching sock,
parts of you will never be found.
Remember tipping over the box of baking soda bicarbonate
will startle your dog enough to urinate.
A chemical reaction will cause such a boom
they'll be looking for you and your dog all over the room.
So if you want to be around to tell your story
rather than going out with fireworks and glory
please don't any washing moshing do,
even though it seems like good clean fun to you.
Comment from Nanny 6
This chapter certainly addresses what happens when you do a good deed and invite someone into your home ... when differences arise that you're not used to putting up with. Wonder where the cat ends up? : )
I enjoyed the read...
Judy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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This chapter certainly addresses what happens when you do a good deed and invite someone into your home ... when differences arise that you're not used to putting up with. Wonder where the cat ends up? : )
I enjoyed the read...
Judy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you for you involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had to divide this chapter up because I wanted people to really read it. This actually happened to me, not in a cave but in my apartment. Most of this whole book is autobiographical.
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What a great way to tell your story! : )
Comment from Beck Fenton
I like this story and how Bea is learning how to problem solve the way her mother taught her. I also like the way she forgets and doesn't do things right sometimes. Good reading!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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I like this story and how Bea is learning how to problem solve the way her mother taught her. I also like the way she forgets and doesn't do things right sometimes. Good reading!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you for your pleasant review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Insignificant Weed
Do the animals have more sense than we do? This selection has a plot and follows the plan very clearly. The sense of the "striving for goodness" with the bear is very admirable. I am trying to get the pattern for the capitalized words in this piece. I thought they represented "good practices" but was caught off guard with "the DAM in TIMOTHY'S POND." I figure that the use of these capitalized words were explained in the introduction.
I am relatively new with this reviewing thing, but think there is a comma missing here: " She then without much delay, was able to return . . ." - my instinct tells me that there should be a comma after "She" because "then without much delay" is an interrupter. Let me know what you think. I might be on the wrong track.
I love the idea of the animals caught in situations that are similar to human beings. This give us a creative way of exploring our motives, our connection with "THE MAKER OF THE BEES." Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Do the animals have more sense than we do? This selection has a plot and follows the plan very clearly. The sense of the "striving for goodness" with the bear is very admirable. I am trying to get the pattern for the capitalized words in this piece. I thought they represented "good practices" but was caught off guard with "the DAM in TIMOTHY'S POND." I figure that the use of these capitalized words were explained in the introduction.
I am relatively new with this reviewing thing, but think there is a comma missing here: " She then without much delay, was able to return . . ." - my instinct tells me that there should be a comma after "She" because "then without much delay" is an interrupter. Let me know what you think. I might be on the wrong track.
I love the idea of the animals caught in situations that are similar to human beings. This give us a creative way of exploring our motives, our connection with "THE MAKER OF THE BEES." Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the heads up on the comma. The program, Grammarly, cites the comma as my nemesis. It always has been. I think I may be overcorrecting because I used to use them too often. I divided this chapter up so that people will really read it and absorb it. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Well, keep up the good work. This is very enjoyable.
