This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Oh, Lordy, Miss Veronica!"Third book in the time travel trilogy
32 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
So, as I promised myself, it's my First Weekday of Vacation, and I am starting to read this wonderful story! No wonder it always did so well. I am spellbound already and looking forward to reading more every day.
Interesting, charming characters, easy word flow, gentle but moving pace, and intriguing concept! I know I am going to thoroughly enjoy this book. xo
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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So, as I promised myself, it's my First Weekday of Vacation, and I am starting to read this wonderful story! No wonder it always did so well. I am spellbound already and looking forward to reading more every day.
Interesting, charming characters, easy word flow, gentle but moving pace, and intriguing concept! I know I am going to thoroughly enjoy this book. xo
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2019
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aww, bless your heart. Thank you so much for reading this book. This is one that I'm editing now, checking any errors. I hope you do enjoy it. You are so sweet. Even bigger hugs. :)) Sandra xx
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Well, you know it's not, as we say in Yiddish, a mitzvah, right? (a "good deed.") I was looking forward to it and promised myself that after Recital Day was over, I would finally get to indulge. xo
Comment from TheStoryMan
This sounds like a very interesting book. I may need to check out the one you have published and the second when it's available. You are a talented writer. I wish you much luck with your books!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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This sounds like a very interesting book. I may need to check out the one you have published and the second when it's available. You are a talented writer. I wish you much luck with your books!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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What a lovely compliment, thank you so much Ron, for that and the good luck wishes. Trying to make it big in the big world outside FS, is very hard. But, who knows, one day.... It has been known to happen. :)) Thank you for the lovely review, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Sandra, women certainly have come a long way, and we are living much better lives, in some ways, and then modernity has created unknown pressures in others. I like the way you begin, we are drawn into the story immediately with that great image of someone concentrating so hard. And you weave the new with the old very seamlessly. I also like the characters and the way you talk about the age differences between them. That really plants it on our minds very clearly. I noticed no errors and found this an engaging read with good dialogue that is hard to write. Especially as you incorporate an accent. Nicely written and thanks for sharing more of this very imaginative story, Anastasia.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hello Sandra, women certainly have come a long way, and we are living much better lives, in some ways, and then modernity has created unknown pressures in others. I like the way you begin, we are drawn into the story immediately with that great image of someone concentrating so hard. And you weave the new with the old very seamlessly. I also like the characters and the way you talk about the age differences between them. That really plants it on our minds very clearly. I noticed no errors and found this an engaging read with good dialogue that is hard to write. Especially as you incorporate an accent. Nicely written and thanks for sharing more of this very imaginative story, Anastasia.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for going back and reading the first part, Anastasia, that is so nice of you. Yes, we have come a long way, at least most of us have, but there are still countries around who will not recognise women as being equal and treat them as possessions. So sad. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Ah, the ladies are back! More adventures about to commence. :-)
I'm questioning one thing... at the beginning, you have Veronica and Mildred share thoughts. It's five years later.
Would this bit be more logical if Veronica was having a memory of the conversation about Mildred and her friend, when Mildred first came back, a few years ago?
Two possible corrections:
How about we both enrol for a course on computing at the local college. I'm sure they do further education classes for adults.'
(It's 'enroll' here. Not sure if you spell it differently there.
h this while I tie my boot laces up. And with that, she pushed the pole into my hands.
(Should there be an ' after laces up.')
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Ah, the ladies are back! More adventures about to commence. :-)
I'm questioning one thing... at the beginning, you have Veronica and Mildred share thoughts. It's five years later.
Would this bit be more logical if Veronica was having a memory of the conversation about Mildred and her friend, when Mildred first came back, a few years ago?
Two possible corrections:
How about we both enrol for a course on computing at the local college. I'm sure they do further education classes for adults.'
(It's 'enroll' here. Not sure if you spell it differently there.
h this while I tie my boot laces up. And with that, she pushed the pole into my hands.
(Should there be an ' after laces up.')
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Hi Sue, thank you for catching that missing speech mark. :)) Enrol is spelt with one L in the UK. I must remember to put things like that in my authors notes. I'll have another look at that first paragraph and see what I can do.
Thanks so much for the helpful review, my friend, and the lovely six stars!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows a person returning from the dead and time-traveling a good mixture.
A few mistakes I found. In the paragraph about Ann returning for her lesson haln-hour should be half-hour and enrol should be enroll. In the eighth paragraph from the end you can erase the "to" between could and listen.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This shows a person returning from the dead and time-traveling a good mixture.
A few mistakes I found. In the paragraph about Ann returning for her lesson haln-hour should be half-hour and enrol should be enroll. In the eighth paragraph from the end you can erase the "to" between could and listen.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hi Joan, thank you so much for reading and reviewing my first chapter. I do so appreciate your help as well. Two of them aren't errors, though. Enrol, in England is spelt with the one L, and, 'half an hour' is how we say in here as well. The 'to' definitely was a mistake, and had now been hastily removed. We do have a few spelling differences in UK English, and US English, sometimes I will actually go with the American if my story is based in America, but this one is an all English cast and story.. We are in London in 1896 at the moment, and will be hopping back and forth between that era and the first world war, as well as slipping home to 1996 to see James and the children now and again. All fun and games. Thank you again, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome. I learned something new today. I will check from now on where the writer is from when I see that spelling. The other mistake you corrected me on was that half was incorrectly spelled as haln in the version I read.
Joan
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I didn't read that bit right, lol, yes, you are right, it was wrong! (Doesn't that read weird? lol) I've made the correction now, Joan, thank you for telling me again. I can't even blame that on my poor hearing!! Must get stronger glasses. :)) xxx
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Glad I can help. I had to go and check it out again to see if my glasses picked it up right.
Joan
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Sandra. I'm coming to this fresh, having not read the earlier stories, so I was interested to see how easy or otherwise it would be to understand what was going on. No worries there. The reader is eased in with enough references to earlier events as well as being led into the inevitable recurrence of the narrator's time travel.
A swift introduction to the family and Yank! Back to the early years of the 20th century and suffragettes on the march. I will be interested to see how that turns out. Of course, new Zealand gave women the vote quite a bit earlier - 1893?? Very advanced we are.
Good luck with the new story.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Hi, Sandra. I'm coming to this fresh, having not read the earlier stories, so I was interested to see how easy or otherwise it would be to understand what was going on. No worries there. The reader is eased in with enough references to earlier events as well as being led into the inevitable recurrence of the narrator's time travel.
A swift introduction to the family and Yank! Back to the early years of the 20th century and suffragettes on the march. I will be interested to see how that turns out. Of course, new Zealand gave women the vote quite a bit earlier - 1893?? Very advanced we are.
Good luck with the new story.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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HI Steve, telling me that you managed to get into the story was so good to know. It's difficult to gauge how much info to put in about the back copies. You have set my mind at ease. Yes, Roy Owen told me that, and that the farmers didn't get the vote until the same time. That was a surprise. Thank you so much for trying my story out, and for the good luck as well. It's going to be an interesting story to say the least. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from meeshu
I really like they you have written this time-travel piece. the time of Suffragettes and temperance in America is a fascinating time to visit. well written, Sandra............meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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I really like they you have written this time-travel piece. the time of Suffragettes and temperance in America is a fascinating time to visit. well written, Sandra............meeshu
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Meeshu, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Gloria ....
This is great that I've managed to stop in a novel in its first chapter, and what a delightful writing style you have, Sandra. Mildred sounds utterly fascinating and not in the least flustered by her experience, other than that pesky computer.
I should say this shall be a terrific premise for the suffragettes as there will be so many avenues to explore.
Excellent writing and looking forward to reading along. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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This is great that I've managed to stop in a novel in its first chapter, and what a delightful writing style you have, Sandra. Mildred sounds utterly fascinating and not in the least flustered by her experience, other than that pesky computer.
I should say this shall be a terrific premise for the suffragettes as there will be so many avenues to explore.
Excellent writing and looking forward to reading along. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Gloria. Mildred is one of a kind, lol, but sweet. Being the anniversary of the UK getting the vote, I thought it might be fun to bring it into Veronica's and Mildred's time travels. Australia gave women the vote in 1893, I'm not sure when the US won their right to vote, must check up on that. :) Thank you for the lovely review, my friend. I'm glad you liked it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
My favorite line is..."Poor James."
Oh, how I sympathize with James--
Time travel, ghosts, people coming back from the dead, Powers That Be
What's the poor man to do, but grin and bear it.
(like someone named Graham, I bet)
I like the part about computers, many 'elders' on FS will relate.
and the nice touch about 'spoiling your dinner'
haven't we all heard or used that line.
And here we go again. Women in long skirts.
Exactly how are Veronica and Mildred dressed?
(it would have been fun if they were wearing mini skirts)
'I said, will you help me with this while I tie my boot laces up.['] needs an end quote
Poor Mildred. She has no idea what she's in for...
A great beginning.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Hello Sandra,
My favorite line is..."Poor James."
Oh, how I sympathize with James--
Time travel, ghosts, people coming back from the dead, Powers That Be
What's the poor man to do, but grin and bear it.
(like someone named Graham, I bet)
I like the part about computers, many 'elders' on FS will relate.
and the nice touch about 'spoiling your dinner'
haven't we all heard or used that line.
And here we go again. Women in long skirts.
Exactly how are Veronica and Mildred dressed?
(it would have been fun if they were wearing mini skirts)
'I said, will you help me with this while I tie my boot laces up.['] needs an end quote
Poor Mildred. She has no idea what she's in for...
A great beginning.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Poor James! Of course you would pick up on that! LOL, Graham agreed with you, too. (No dinner for him tonight!)
The 'it will spoil your dinner...' was one of my mother's favourite phrases when I wanted something to eat before a meal. I agree, we all must have had it said to us. Then we carried it on with our own children. :))
I'm delighted you enjoyed the first part of the story, Robert, thank you! And a bit thank you for the 6 shiny stars, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and title, Sandra.
-The new book gets off to a good start.
-Mildred is trying to become part of the
computer age; I think we'd better
keep an eye on her!
-I like how the children were
confided in by Mildred after she had passed on.
-"Poor James," as you said in the story.
He has the time travel to deal with
and usually a stressful work situation,
and being a husband and father on top of that!
-But the important thing is that they are family first.
-I really liked the ending, and hope
to see Veronica and Mildred in the
midst of the early women's movement!
-Great job, my friend.
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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-Good image and title, Sandra.
-The new book gets off to a good start.
-Mildred is trying to become part of the
computer age; I think we'd better
keep an eye on her!
-I like how the children were
confided in by Mildred after she had passed on.
-"Poor James," as you said in the story.
He has the time travel to deal with
and usually a stressful work situation,
and being a husband and father on top of that!
-But the important thing is that they are family first.
-I really liked the ending, and hope
to see Veronica and Mildred in the
midst of the early women's movement!
-Great job, my friend.
[Glitterfy.com - *Glitter Photos*]
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much, Pam, for the wonderful 6 stars and lovely review. And for the glitterfly pic. The Suffragettes must have been around all over the world, well, at least half the world. The other half is still under the complete rule of men! Apparently, Australian women got the vote earlier than us, in the late 1800s. But, men didn't get to vote it they were only farmers. I didn't know that. Roy Owen told me. So, it' wasn't just us girls. Thanks again, dear friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, review, and extra photo, Sandra. I like your comments about the suffragettes, and sharing about the Australian men and women voting from Roy. I think you chose a good avenue for exploration, and I can't wait to see Mildred's response if you take the story that way!
