Memory Eraser
When it's too painful to remember...53 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Wow, this is an amazing poem. It left a deep impression with me. It is not only so sad but so very tragic as well. She has nothing to look forward to other than her own demise. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Wow, this is an amazing poem. It left a deep impression with me. It is not only so sad but so very tragic as well. She has nothing to look forward to other than her own demise. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author did an outstanding job with the guidelines
of this poem. The poem was convincing, creative, sad and thought
provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of
this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Excellent Poem! The author did an outstanding job with the guidelines
of this poem. The poem was convincing, creative, sad and thought
provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of
this poem.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for such a nice review.
Comment from gramag4
Incredible word picture!! You have captured the painful emotions that life brings our way and tries to crush us with. The emotions are palpable... excellent job!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Incredible word picture!! You have captured the painful emotions that life brings our way and tries to crush us with. The emotions are palpable... excellent job!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and for such nice comments.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a great contest entry. I'm sure you will do well in the vote. IT is very sad and haunting.
She has no interest in such looks,
she really doesn't care.
This is how my cat feels when I look at her.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is a great contest entry. I'm sure you will do well in the vote. IT is very sad and haunting.
She has no interest in such looks,
she really doesn't care.
This is how my cat feels when I look at her.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, I always appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is like a Halloween poem filled with witch craft and dark rememberances of abuse, there's much sadness in these words, good luck with the contest, you fulfilled the brief here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is like a Halloween poem filled with witch craft and dark rememberances of abuse, there's much sadness in these words, good luck with the contest, you fulfilled the brief here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks for taking time to read and review, I always appreciate it.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
This is an ingenius poem using the prompt words provided. I felt saddened and drawn in by this woman's story and almost wanted to know more about how she came to live in the dark and all the things she prays to forget. I like the sense of mystery and black magic, and the image you chose matches the context of the poem perfectly. This was an interesting subject choice and one that I think most people will relate to because we all have things we would love to forget so would all like to visit your witch if we could. Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is an ingenius poem using the prompt words provided. I felt saddened and drawn in by this woman's story and almost wanted to know more about how she came to live in the dark and all the things she prays to forget. I like the sense of mystery and black magic, and the image you chose matches the context of the poem perfectly. This was an interesting subject choice and one that I think most people will relate to because we all have things we would love to forget so would all like to visit your witch if we could. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Wow, thanks so much for this great review.
Comment from meeshu
this is a spectacular use of the key words. such a melancholy write. one can picture this woman, most of us have known her, I think. good luck
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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this is a spectacular use of the key words. such a melancholy write. one can picture this woman, most of us have known her, I think. good luck
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much for reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt mysterious and sad poem. When we get hurt by someone we trust we feel like we can just sit alone in a dark room and wait to die without having others around us to remind us of what was and we don't care what others may think about our behavior.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt mysterious and sad poem. When we get hurt by someone we trust we feel like we can just sit alone in a dark room and wait to die without having others around us to remind us of what was and we don't care what others may think about our behavior.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and for the nice review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
I thoroughly enjoyed the creativity and "story" of your poetic offering. Vivid imagery.
If I may, there a number of lines that require a semi-colon as opposed to a comma. I know...who cares? Well, I taught English for nearly 40 years, and old habits die hard:
For instance:
She sits upon the windowsill,
her eyes electric blue.
Her long black hair and ruby lips,
can cast a spell,(;) it's true.
Each man that catches just a glimpse,
possess her with a stare.
She has no interest in such looks, (;)
she really doesn't care.
Her voice can mesmerize you,
her laugh like music chimes.
Some whisper that she is a witch, (;)
her spells are deadly rhymes.
Some claim that they have dined with her, (;)
a demon was their host.
Food served in dishes made of bones, (;)
her butler was a ghost.
She's just a woman, flesh and blood, (;)
there is no mystery.
Who in the past was badly hurt,
a violent history.
She prefers to be alone,
as she practices her craft.
brews (Brews) a potion that helps you forget, (;)
most people think she's daft.
She sells it cheap to those in need,
and drinks it everyday.
It makes his image disappear, (;)
the memories fade away.
So do not fear, but pity her, (;)
her lifelong love she's lost.
Her homemade potion tried and true,
is always worth the cost.
Once the world and life were hers, (;)
'till love became her curse.
She keeps her thoughts locked in a box,
so her heartache won't get worse.
The filled up barrels wait for her,
a private lifetime supply.
Enough to ease her mind and soul,
as she sits and waits to die.
Again, I thoroughly enjoyed your poetic offering, and I wish you all the best in the contest!
diane
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hello!
I thoroughly enjoyed the creativity and "story" of your poetic offering. Vivid imagery.
If I may, there a number of lines that require a semi-colon as opposed to a comma. I know...who cares? Well, I taught English for nearly 40 years, and old habits die hard:
For instance:
She sits upon the windowsill,
her eyes electric blue.
Her long black hair and ruby lips,
can cast a spell,(;) it's true.
Each man that catches just a glimpse,
possess her with a stare.
She has no interest in such looks, (;)
she really doesn't care.
Her voice can mesmerize you,
her laugh like music chimes.
Some whisper that she is a witch, (;)
her spells are deadly rhymes.
Some claim that they have dined with her, (;)
a demon was their host.
Food served in dishes made of bones, (;)
her butler was a ghost.
She's just a woman, flesh and blood, (;)
there is no mystery.
Who in the past was badly hurt,
a violent history.
She prefers to be alone,
as she practices her craft.
brews (Brews) a potion that helps you forget, (;)
most people think she's daft.
She sells it cheap to those in need,
and drinks it everyday.
It makes his image disappear, (;)
the memories fade away.
So do not fear, but pity her, (;)
her lifelong love she's lost.
Her homemade potion tried and true,
is always worth the cost.
Once the world and life were hers, (;)
'till love became her curse.
She keeps her thoughts locked in a box,
so her heartache won't get worse.
The filled up barrels wait for her,
a private lifetime supply.
Enough to ease her mind and soul,
as she sits and waits to die.
Again, I thoroughly enjoyed your poetic offering, and I wish you all the best in the contest!
diane
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much. Punctuation has never been my strong suit, I appreciate the help.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Mistreat Writer;
>I was truly an vehemently entertain is so most of all your rhymings were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each line which, thereforeAs made the enjambment or context flow smoothly.
>But the enjambment itself, had some small hiccups with syntax but they nearly unnoticeable except for the fact that the meter was not, as consistent throughout the writing.
>I love the story within the poem type of style.
>Thanks for the wonderful entertainment and good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alx
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Cheers, Mistreat Writer;
>I was truly an vehemently entertain is so most of all your rhymings were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each line which, thereforeAs made the enjambment or context flow smoothly.
>But the enjambment itself, had some small hiccups with syntax but they nearly unnoticeable except for the fact that the meter was not, as consistent throughout the writing.
>I love the story within the poem type of style.
>Thanks for the wonderful entertainment and good luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much for reading and for your comments.
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You're very welcome, Boogienights.
Alx
