Memory Eraser
When it's too painful to remember...53 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi, a very sad poem, obviously, but you have executed it well with good rhythm and rhyme. I feel it is a good poem and I enjoyed reading it. Nice publishing choices too. I wish you the best of luck in the contest and thank you for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hi, a very sad poem, obviously, but you have executed it well with good rhythm and rhyme. I feel it is a good poem and I enjoyed reading it. Nice publishing choices too. I wish you the best of luck in the contest and thank you for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and for your nice review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Very good use of the required words
I'm impressed especially from the part that keeps her thoughts locked in a box,
so her heartache won't get worse.
And waits to die to wipe her memories away.
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Very good use of the required words
I'm impressed especially from the part that keeps her thoughts locked in a box,
so her heartache won't get worse.
And waits to die to wipe her memories away.
Gert
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this kind review.
Comment from Shanbreen
Well written poem for the contest incorporating the designated words. My only comment would be to create stanzas. For example, you could start a new one at:
She prefers to be alone,
One more thing, would you pity her? That may be hard for some readers to swallow.
Overall the free-form poem flows well. Best for the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Well written poem for the contest incorporating the designated words. My only comment would be to create stanzas. For example, you could start a new one at:
She prefers to be alone,
One more thing, would you pity her? That may be hard for some readers to swallow.
Overall the free-form poem flows well. Best for the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the good suggestion..I appreciate the help.
Comment from heart of Lou
Oh my goodness, what a well-written poem. It flows and rhymes just perfectly. You have done a great job using the assigned words. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Oh my goodness, what a well-written poem. It flows and rhymes just perfectly. You have done a great job using the assigned words. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, I always appreciate the comments.
Comment from victor 66
This is a very nice "use these words" writing prompt entry. It has good rhythm, excellent rhyme and an easy flow of words. As good as the technical aspects of your poem are, the story is also excellent! Best wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is a very nice "use these words" writing prompt entry. It has good rhythm, excellent rhyme and an easy flow of words. As good as the technical aspects of your poem are, the story is also excellent! Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Wow, thanks so much for your kind words and the six stars.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
It's a nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, and depicting its theme having a mystical flavor.
Impressive and matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hello Friend,
It's a nice piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, and depicting its theme having a mystical flavor.
Impressive and matching the theme phraseology.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this great review and the six stars...it made my day!
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Most Welcome!
~ RP
Comment from AprilViolet
This poem gave me the chills! So beautifully written and full of meaning. Especially like the picture you choose as it is very haunting like the poem! Definitely deserves 6 stars in my humble opinion.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This poem gave me the chills! So beautifully written and full of meaning. Especially like the picture you choose as it is very haunting like the poem! Definitely deserves 6 stars in my humble opinion.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much, your opinion means a lot.
Comment from mally mack
Hi there,
This was a really creative poem and you did in fact follow the promptly truly and added each word required into the rhyme.
I'm not sure if it is the structure of the poem being so narrow, but the flow was very rough. The words are good but some lines are very wordy and it takes away from the musical aspect of it when read aloud.
Good luck In the contest
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hi there,
This was a really creative poem and you did in fact follow the promptly truly and added each word required into the rhyme.
I'm not sure if it is the structure of the poem being so narrow, but the flow was very rough. The words are good but some lines are very wordy and it takes away from the musical aspect of it when read aloud.
Good luck In the contest
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for taking time to read and review.
Comment from Lady Jane
What a unique voice this poem captures and the darkness, gloom is so well conveyed with the rich, excellent verbiage. The rhyme is spot on and perfectly metered. I found no errors. You've utilized the words included in contest rule. The image is a perfect accompaniment to this dark and wrenching poem. Very well crafted piece of poetry, writer. It's a sure contender in my book.
Janelle
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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What a unique voice this poem captures and the darkness, gloom is so well conveyed with the rich, excellent verbiage. The rhyme is spot on and perfectly metered. I found no errors. You've utilized the words included in contest rule. The image is a perfect accompaniment to this dark and wrenching poem. Very well crafted piece of poetry, writer. It's a sure contender in my book.
Janelle
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you this wonderful review. :)
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, the rhyming rhythm is flawless in this dark, yet stunning poem, well constructed in its dramatic presentation, verse and imagery. It complies perfectly with the prompt, the words artfully rendered within the poem, unforced and easy in delivery - a strong entry. Best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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In my opinion, the rhyming rhythm is flawless in this dark, yet stunning poem, well constructed in its dramatic presentation, verse and imagery. It complies perfectly with the prompt, the words artfully rendered within the poem, unforced and easy in delivery - a strong entry. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this very nice review. :)
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You are very welcome...Eve
