Memory Eraser
When it's too painful to remember...53 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hello, Author. You have used the required words very effectively, I believe. The dark mood you project with each of your lines is conducive to the overall outcome of the poem.
Obviously, this person is in a world of hurt and yourpoem takes us there with confounding imagery:
"She prefers to be alone,
as she practices her craft.
brews a potion that helps you forget,
most people think she's daft."
Bravo! Good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hello, Author. You have used the required words very effectively, I believe. The dark mood you project with each of your lines is conducive to the overall outcome of the poem.
Obviously, this person is in a world of hurt and yourpoem takes us there with confounding imagery:
"She prefers to be alone,
as she practices her craft.
brews a potion that helps you forget,
most people think she's daft."
Bravo! Good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much for taking time to read and review.
Comment from royowen
An excellent post and entry in this "use these words" poetry contest. You've done this very well indeed, and great theme and use of the Ballad style metre in 8686 and abcb rhyme, beautifully written with a nice even rhythm and articulate language, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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An excellent post and entry in this "use these words" poetry contest. You've done this very well indeed, and great theme and use of the Ballad style metre in 8686 and abcb rhyme, beautifully written with a nice even rhythm and articulate language, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, I always like hearing from fellow writers.
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Most welcome
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderfully written poem and a beautiful yet very sad story trying to erase the memory of a lost love, an excellent work, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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What a wonderfully written poem and a beautiful yet very sad story trying to erase the memory of a lost love, an excellent work, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much..I appreciate hearing from someone whose work I admire.
Comment from Dean Kuch
There are some inventive end rhyme pairings here, like "hers" and "curse". You can also add a third to that mix-- "worse."
It's a melancholy musing, for sure, and the rhyming coupled with your carefully chosen words made for an interesting story of a woman done wrong.
This makes one wonder, is it better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all?
I doubt it.
Good luck to you.
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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There are some inventive end rhyme pairings here, like "hers" and "curse". You can also add a third to that mix-- "worse."
It's a melancholy musing, for sure, and the rhyming coupled with your carefully chosen words made for an interesting story of a woman done wrong.
This makes one wonder, is it better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all?
I doubt it.
Good luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, it's a pleasure to hear from you.
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You're welcome. 8}
Comment from Ben Colder
I was inspired to think about those who suffer with Alzheimer and the long wait science has failed to cure. Your wording is strong and compliments the contest. Best to you.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I was inspired to think about those who suffer with Alzheimer and the long wait science has failed to cure. Your wording is strong and compliments the contest. Best to you.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Hitcher
It is a great entry that takes the reader on a journey, starting with the outside worlds perceptions of her... the witch/demon who lives in darkness, dines with ghosts.The first half of the poem was my favorite : ) The second half was also very good as it described her reason for being/living the way she does and the hopelessness of her existence. An Excellent entry, I hope it does well for you : ) Good luck!!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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It is a great entry that takes the reader on a journey, starting with the outside worlds perceptions of her... the witch/demon who lives in darkness, dines with ghosts.The first half of the poem was my favorite : ) The second half was also very good as it described her reason for being/living the way she does and the hopelessness of her existence. An Excellent entry, I hope it does well for you : ) Good luck!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, it's much appreciated. :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet,
Well, you managed to use the requirements of the contest AND the fact that the poem reads well was an extra bonus.
The story told within the lines of your poem could lead to a short story,
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
patty
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Dear Anonymous Poet,
Well, you managed to use the requirements of the contest AND the fact that the poem reads well was an extra bonus.
The story told within the lines of your poem could lead to a short story,
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
patty
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review.
Comment from Adam Ihnken
Well written, I was debating putting in on this contest as well and had a similar story in mind, but you did a wonderful job with the words and writing, so if I do I may go a different direction.
Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Well written, I was debating putting in on this contest as well and had a similar story in mind, but you did a wonderful job with the words and writing, so if I do I may go a different direction.
Well done!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Great poem. Great subject matter full of emotion and meaning. Great imagery followed with good word choices overall think you did a really good job.good look in the contest!!!!!!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Great poem. Great subject matter full of emotion and meaning. Great imagery followed with good word choices overall think you did a really good job.good look in the contest!!!!!!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this fine review. :)
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You're welcome
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You're welcome
Comment from KL Williams
Excellent work on this writing prompt entry. I thought the rhythm and rhymes were great. Your descriptive words really brought through the emotions in this piece. Best of luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Excellent work on this writing prompt entry. I thought the rhythm and rhymes were great. Your descriptive words really brought through the emotions in this piece. Best of luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, I appreciate your comments.
