Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi June,

Congratulations on winning the contest :) I find the etheree poems are tough to write. You have done a fine job of combining the correct syllables in each line with a lovely story. Who can resist a poem about the Serengeti? Not me. Well done.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018

Thank you, Joy, for your supportive and encouraging comments! After two years I finally managed to write an etheree that made sense and didn't sound like a child wrote it...

Comment from LynnetteOK

Excellent

This is a creative and interesting topic. The description is wonderful, evoking images in my mind.
The Etheree format was followed perfectly.
Finally, the photo you chose to use is a great fit.
Very well written!
Best of luck in the contest.
LynnetteOK

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018

Thank you for reading and sharing your insights!

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

The dwindling structure of the poem parallels the dwindling images of the Serengeti as the sun goes down and the light fades, and the harsh features of the plain become bathed in darkness and a sense of peace. Beautifully described.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018

Thank you so much, Tony, for dropping by to read my piece on the Serengeti. Glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I,loved your etheree it was ethereal....is that where the form came from?
I have never been to Africa but my sister said it was beautiful in a spectacular way... your poem captured that
God bless

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018

Thank you for dropping by to review my piece on the Serengeti!