Lasting Impression
5-7-5 the short life span of a butterfly21 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Some beauty is as fleeting as the butterfly. Other last forever in your memory.
This is a deep poem which can also describe life in general.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Some beauty is as fleeting as the butterfly. Other last forever in your memory.
This is a deep poem which can also describe life in general.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Thank you for sharing your insights on my piece on Lasting Impression. I did intend for it to apply to life in general - some experiences are imprinted forever in our memories Hopefully, they're good ones!
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Aussie
A beautiful photo to compliment your three little lines. Butterflies represent life, yet they only live for nineteen days. In our rainforests we have such splendour like the Monarch butterfly. Good luck in the contest my friend. XXK.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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A beautiful photo to compliment your three little lines. Butterflies represent life, yet they only live for nineteen days. In our rainforests we have such splendour like the Monarch butterfly. Good luck in the contest my friend. XXK.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed my tribute to the butterfly!
Comment from Raul1
Exceptional poem! I think that this poem talks about a flower and the man likes it. It is like he's giving his honest opinion about it of how beautiful it is. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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Exceptional poem! I think that this poem talks about a flower and the man likes it. It is like he's giving his honest opinion about it of how beautiful it is. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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Appreciate your sharing your insights.
Comment from Teri7
June, This is a very well written 5-7-5 you have penned for the three line poetry contest. You used very good words about the butterfly and how beautiful it is. It's life is very short and makes me so sad. Great words and imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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June, This is a very well written 5-7-5 you have penned for the three line poetry contest. You used very good words about the butterfly and how beautiful it is. It's life is very short and makes me so sad. Great words and imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review my piece!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, June,
A great entry for the three-line poetry contest. In these limited words, you have managed to convey the beauty of the butterfly and the impact it has on our lives. How can anyone forget their first glimpse of a flying flower?
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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Hi, June,
A great entry for the three-line poetry contest. In these limited words, you have managed to convey the beauty of the butterfly and the impact it has on our lives. How can anyone forget their first glimpse of a flying flower?
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
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Yes, we are surrounded by beauty that can make lasting impressions. We just need to take time to look. Thanks for the kind review. Patty.
Comment from rama devi
Well voiced. Lucid and resonant. I like this. Fine presentaiton too. I applaud the alliteration of I and M. Excellent word economy and flow.
The only stumble, for me, is the feeling that a verb is missing. In regular prose, the opening of the sentence would be THE IMPACT OF BEAUTY IS IMPOSSIBLE TO MEASURE. I know you're limited by syllable count. BUt maybe you could use 's:
Impact of beauty's
impossible to measure
Additionally, I think man' need not be capped here:
in Man's finite terms
(Especially since we are talking about man being finite...the cap seems off-key).
What a stunning photo - quite apropos.
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Well voiced. Lucid and resonant. I like this. Fine presentaiton too. I applaud the alliteration of I and M. Excellent word economy and flow.
The only stumble, for me, is the feeling that a verb is missing. In regular prose, the opening of the sentence would be THE IMPACT OF BEAUTY IS IMPOSSIBLE TO MEASURE. I know you're limited by syllable count. BUt maybe you could use 's:
Impact of beauty's
impossible to measure
Additionally, I think man' need not be capped here:
in Man's finite terms
(Especially since we are talking about man being finite...the cap seems off-key).
What a stunning photo - quite apropos.
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Again, I appreciate the suggestions and will revise accordingly.
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Yay! :-)))
Comment from donette1914
this is so stunning and the short term of a butterfly
I hope for the best in the contest
thank you for sharing
this is outstanding
easy to understand
i like the artwork
donette1914 Aug 26 2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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this is so stunning and the short term of a butterfly
I hope for the best in the contest
thank you for sharing
this is outstanding
easy to understand
i like the artwork
donette1914 Aug 26 2018
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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So glad you enjoyed my piece on the swallowtail butterfly.
Comment from Joan E.
Your tiny, 3 Line Poem made a "Lasting Impression on me! You reinforced your message with the perfect artwork and even included alliteration to intensify the message. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Your tiny, 3 Line Poem made a "Lasting Impression on me! You reinforced your message with the perfect artwork and even included alliteration to intensify the message. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your sentiments on my poem! It is much appreciated.
Comment from Anne B Francis
The picture is beautiful as are the words - as the saying goes beauty is in the eye of the beholder - the male species is visual, until he looks beneath the cloth
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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The picture is beautiful as are the words - as the saying goes beauty is in the eye of the beholder - the male species is visual, until he looks beneath the cloth
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your sentiments on my poem!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, June, with your 3 line contest entry. Your words flow well. They readers much to ponder. I like the choice of picture. Your words could also refer to mist anything that touches us for a brief moment. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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You did a good job, June, with your 3 line contest entry. Your words flow well. They readers much to ponder. I like the choice of picture. Your words could also refer to mist anything that touches us for a brief moment. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your sentiments on my poem! It is always appreciated.
