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16 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
A great bit of nostalgia, bittersweet and a bit melancholy. How things change-we never know what life will bring, though it seemed so in youth.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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A great bit of nostalgia, bittersweet and a bit melancholy. How things change-we never know what life will bring, though it seemed so in youth.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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Yes, the bit of melancholy that seems to be my thing. Thank you for feeling what I had in mind and for reviewing my poem :))
Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, the sweet dreams of youth that don't always bear fruit. I loved your poem full of so many memories. I can understand why you love Montana and its majestic landscape. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Hi Carol, the sweet dreams of youth that don't always bear fruit. I loved your poem full of so many memories. I can understand why you love Montana and its majestic landscape. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Ulla. I'm glad to be able to visit home fairly often, and I'm riding horses again now. Thank you so much for this review, the 15th so I get the award - yay :))
Carol
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Awe, I'm so glad you are going back fairly often and that you're riding again. That's great. I so understand. I think I did tell you that horses have been a big part of my life?
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I think you did tell me that, how wonderful to hear! I love horses. Do you still ride? I always think we have much in common :))
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No, I don't ride anymore for the reason that I love them too much, It would take up my whole life. Another reason is that where I live in Spain it would cost me a fortune. :)))
Comment from rspoet
Hello Carol,
How beautiful words are when they flow from your talented pen
I can picture you there, perhaps alongside a young James Dean,
in the "gin clear" of freedom, and that defiant cigarette.
Oh, for that leap into waking.
Who's to say what wisdom is or is not,
but one thing I can say, this is beautiful poetry.
Robert
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Hello Carol,
How beautiful words are when they flow from your talented pen
I can picture you there, perhaps alongside a young James Dean,
in the "gin clear" of freedom, and that defiant cigarette.
Oh, for that leap into waking.
Who's to say what wisdom is or is not,
but one thing I can say, this is beautiful poetry.
Robert
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Robert, I have fond memories of that summer, especially working on the ranch. Agreed as to what wisdom is or is not...it's all relative!
Thanks for all the stars, much appreciated :))
Carol
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork, Carol.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Effective imagery about your
early life in Montana:
"I remember those wide open days"
"Montana dawn breaking in glory"
-The poem becomes wistful as
you left those days behind, and
end it with duty and work,
trying to make your way back.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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-Very nice artwork, Carol.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Effective imagery about your
early life in Montana:
"I remember those wide open days"
"Montana dawn breaking in glory"
-The poem becomes wistful as
you left those days behind, and
end it with duty and work,
trying to make your way back.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thank you, I do miss those days. Much appreciated :))
Carol
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You are welcome, Carol.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent free verse that captures a feeling of freedom and youth. "The soft breath of horses" is a great line that appeals to the senses and creates a clear scene of the ranch. "Over tall seas of grass" is another lines that creates a feel for the scene and time.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Excellent free verse that captures a feeling of freedom and youth. "The soft breath of horses" is a great line that appeals to the senses and creates a clear scene of the ranch. "Over tall seas of grass" is another lines that creates a feel for the scene and time.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thank you, I do love that feeling when horse hangs his head over my shoulder and puffs in my ear. I love being on a ranch and doing whatever - riding, working, hanging out with my horse buddy Wyatt :))
Carol
Comment from Just2Write
Funny how we often do not listen to that strong voice inside us when we are young. I lived up the coast from Vancouver much of the year when I was young and immortal. It was the place where I always felt I belonged, and I felt I would always live there. That never happened. Life got in the way and I lived in or close to the city until I retired. I could never live there now - I could not afford price that the land has soared to. Missed opportunity.
I liked this nostalgic Free Verse. It touches deep into the soul.
Rose.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Funny how we often do not listen to that strong voice inside us when we are young. I lived up the coast from Vancouver much of the year when I was young and immortal. It was the place where I always felt I belonged, and I felt I would always live there. That never happened. Life got in the way and I lived in or close to the city until I retired. I could never live there now - I could not afford price that the land has soared to. Missed opportunity.
I liked this nostalgic Free Verse. It touches deep into the soul.
Rose.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Rose. I had no idea that I would ever leave Montana (not that I knew what I wanted to do, at all). I ended up leaving a year later and never moved back. I have been lucky enough to visit often, but at times I envy my high school friend who never left. Now I live north of L.A. - NEVER would have thought I'd move here!!
hugs,
Carol
Comment from royowen
You've had more of life than most people Carol, I guess you've experienced much in your days on Earth, some good., some not so good, but whatever, I think you probably consider all enriching, and part of a rich tapestry to draw on. Well done Carol, great scribing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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You've had more of life than most people Carol, I guess you've experienced much in your days on Earth, some good., some not so good, but whatever, I think you probably consider all enriching, and part of a rich tapestry to draw on. Well done Carol, great scribing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Yes I suppose I have, the good and bad are part of what life is all about - lots of stories to draw upon. Thanks for all your reading of my work and your support Roy :))
Carol
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And so it is Carol.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your nostalgic reflections. Your "flags" metaphor and descriptions of those scenes of youth were compelling. Your "wisdom fled away" was memorable. Sweet dreams- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you for sharing your nostalgic reflections. Your "flags" metaphor and descriptions of those scenes of youth were compelling. Your "wisdom fled away" was memorable. Sweet dreams- Joan
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Joan - that is a fond memory of working on the ranch that summer.
Carol
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Carol. I absolutely love Montana and Wyoming. been out there four times in my life, just passing through but wish I could have stayed. It's definitely God's country.
Your poem is a haunting refrain about the place you obvviously love:
"the acres of prairie facing massed
blue mountains;
the soft breath of horses;
wide, streaky dawns and soft nights
full of stars."
You really deserve six stars for this, Carol. (got none) It's beautiful. Bob
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Hi, Carol. I absolutely love Montana and Wyoming. been out there four times in my life, just passing through but wish I could have stayed. It's definitely God's country.
Your poem is a haunting refrain about the place you obvviously love:
"the acres of prairie facing massed
blue mountains;
the soft breath of horses;
wide, streaky dawns and soft nights
full of stars."
You really deserve six stars for this, Carol. (got none) It's beautiful. Bob
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Now that you mention your visits to Montana, I remember you talking about it. I do agree that it's God's country, in Wyoming too, I feel like my roots are there - as much as I love California. I've done quite a few 'Western' poems and was thinking, maybe some day I'll have enough for a book - self published, lol. Why not?
Thanks for your sweet comments :))
Carol
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Not sure if my publisher handles poetry books. want me to ask? :) Bob
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I guess you could but it is nowhere near publication at this point. Thank you, dear Bob :))
Comment from Marie Foster1
Very rarely does a non-rhyming poem catch and keep my attention. I really like this one. It tells a story and places the reader in a different time and space. I really enjoyed it. Good job!!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Very rarely does a non-rhyming poem catch and keep my attention. I really like this one. It tells a story and places the reader in a different time and space. I really enjoyed it. Good job!!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
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Thank you! I do enjoy telling stories in my poems :))
Carol
