Be Wee With Bea
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Someone Caring"An allegory in the Winnie the Pooh genre
7 total reviews
Comment from SueZen
Wonderful meeting Bea again and those who she encounters and befriends on her Golden Path. And wise of Bea to give them names, so that the MAKER would be able to sort them out, etc. She is indeed very organized in many ways and mindful of the importance of listening, which is only possible when we empty our minds of its chatter and thus create space for the words, feelings, ideas, etc. of others to enter. So much to "learn" from Bea on all levels and very worthwhile to practice in our daily lives for the benefit of ALL. Bless you, beautiful Bea!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Wonderful meeting Bea again and those who she encounters and befriends on her Golden Path. And wise of Bea to give them names, so that the MAKER would be able to sort them out, etc. She is indeed very organized in many ways and mindful of the importance of listening, which is only possible when we empty our minds of its chatter and thus create space for the words, feelings, ideas, etc. of others to enter. So much to "learn" from Bea on all levels and very worthwhile to practice in our daily lives for the benefit of ALL. Bless you, beautiful Bea!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Another six stars. Sweeet. Thank you for your lovely review. You really bond nicely with Bea.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your writing is so nice, Liz. In this chapter, I particularly like the explanation of Bea's need to name things. I agree with that. Without a name we are non-existent. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Your writing is so nice, Liz. In this chapter, I particularly like the explanation of Bea's need to name things. I agree with that. Without a name we are non-existent. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your sweet review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Another cute chapter in the book about Wee Bee. Now she has met a new friend who sounds as if she befriends abused children. Will be interested to see what happens next. Rox
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Another cute chapter in the book about Wee Bee. Now she has met a new friend who sounds as if she befriends abused children. Will be interested to see what happens next. Rox
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I'm glad you are enjoying Bea's adventures. Thank you for the nice review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Just wonderful -- Bea has her friend Willow now! But oh, what sorrows Willow holds...I had no idea this would get so emotional, but you are doing a great job with it! Oh, and I am certainly enjoying it!! :) ;) I've included a few grammatical catches below - employ or ignore as you like. :) ;) Thank you SO MUCH for sharing another part of Bea's saga with us!! :) Yvette
"She a bit" 'She was a bit'
"BRAIN exercise, as she looked around" 'BRAIN exercise looking around' [too many 'as' in a row there]
"with tear smudged faces" 'with tear-smudged faces'
"them our more easily" 'them out more easily'
"important to Bea remember them so she could hold in her heart" 'important for Bea to remember them so she could hold them in her heart'
"and the ways they stood, or threw themselves" 'and in the ways they stood; it was there when they threw themselves' [or some other 'fix' more in your own style -- need to fix the awkward use of conjunctions/clauses there at the end]
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Just wonderful -- Bea has her friend Willow now! But oh, what sorrows Willow holds...I had no idea this would get so emotional, but you are doing a great job with it! Oh, and I am certainly enjoying it!! :) ;) I've included a few grammatical catches below - employ or ignore as you like. :) ;) Thank you SO MUCH for sharing another part of Bea's saga with us!! :) Yvette
"She a bit" 'She was a bit'
"BRAIN exercise, as she looked around" 'BRAIN exercise looking around' [too many 'as' in a row there]
"with tear smudged faces" 'with tear-smudged faces'
"them our more easily" 'them out more easily'
"important to Bea remember them so she could hold in her heart" 'important for Bea to remember them so she could hold them in her heart'
"and the ways they stood, or threw themselves" 'and in the ways they stood; it was there when they threw themselves' [or some other 'fix' more in your own style -- need to fix the awkward use of conjunctions/clauses there at the end]
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your very helpful review. I have made the proper edits. I'm glad you are enjoying this
Comment from Beck Fenton
I always like to read about Bea. Her working through problems is always a good example for all of us.
I didn't 't get that Willow was actually a weeping willow tree. I thought she was a live animal... It wasn't until this line that I actually got the whole picture " Bea knew she was right when her tall friend began to weep and told Bea that she knew that the children hid sadness and FEARS in their deepest parts."
A couple things I picked up...
She(WAS) a bit worried this might happen as she carefully tiptoed toward her new sad friend.
When Bea asked her why she was so sad, she told Bea that it had to do with the children who had come to visit her over the many years. (I'm wondering if Bea will meet real children now?)
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I always like to read about Bea. Her working through problems is always a good example for all of us.
I didn't 't get that Willow was actually a weeping willow tree. I thought she was a live animal... It wasn't until this line that I actually got the whole picture " Bea knew she was right when her tall friend began to weep and told Bea that she knew that the children hid sadness and FEARS in their deepest parts."
A couple things I picked up...
She(WAS) a bit worried this might happen as she carefully tiptoed toward her new sad friend.
When Bea asked her why she was so sad, she told Bea that it had to do with the children who had come to visit her over the many years. (I'm wondering if Bea will meet real children now?)
Keep writing!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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So far you might be the only one who figured out Willow's identity. Thank for the writing glitch. Someone else kindly found several more. So it should be quite ship-shape at this point. In the next part, the tree reveal comes out stronger. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from WildWithWords
Such a cute story, Liz. It has a natural warmth and innocence to it.
Good editing adds to the appeal, though check the very wide paragraph spacing (which may have happened during the uploading).
Nice work.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Such a cute story, Liz. It has a natural warmth and innocence to it.
Good editing adds to the appeal, though check the very wide paragraph spacing (which may have happened during the uploading).
Nice work.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your helpful review. The spacing really gets messed up during the transferring. I'll have a look at it. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from Lance Polin
I . . . I'm sorry. It's . . . it's not the story. It's the . . . it's the prose. It's . . . it's like . . . like flat and . . . and . . . uh . . . the story's fine, anyway . . .
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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I . . . I'm sorry. It's . . . it's not the story. It's the . . . it's the prose. It's . . . it's like . . . like flat and . . . and . . . uh . . . the story's fine, anyway . . .
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read about Bea and her adventures, and writing a review. I'm glad you liked it.
