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Comment from LIJ Red
I wish I had written the name of Chief Joseph's friend and advisor who he listed among the dead in his famous last speech..Toohoolhoolsote, or something like...
On a road near here is a sign, Trail Of Tears, The Assembly...excellent poem, with a lot of good sense in it...
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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I wish I had written the name of Chief Joseph's friend and advisor who he listed among the dead in his famous last speech..Toohoolhoolsote, or something like...
On a road near here is a sign, Trail Of Tears, The Assembly...excellent poem, with a lot of good sense in it...
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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"I am tired of fighting. Our chiefs are killed. Looking Glass is dead. Toohoolhoolzote is dead. The old men are all dead. It is the young men who say, 'Yes' or 'No.' "
It's a short speech, but moving. Anyway, thank you for reading my poem.
Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Brown
This is lovely; I find it very moving and one tries to imagine the stories that the land could tell. Some really nice vocabulary and beautiful descriptions, great picture too. (I'm now going to look at my atlas to find Wisdom Montana.)
Best wishes, Elizabeth.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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This is lovely; I find it very moving and one tries to imagine the stories that the land could tell. Some really nice vocabulary and beautiful descriptions, great picture too. (I'm now going to look at my atlas to find Wisdom Montana.)
Best wishes, Elizabeth.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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I have been through the Big Hole, it was a short cut off the Interstate 15 to my dad's house in the Bitterroot Valley. We camped up on the pass in the Pioneer Mountains, it was just gorgeous. Strange how the place is so very peaceful today. I'm sure it seemed peaceful to the Nez Perce until the early morning hours when their camp was surprised by the U.S. Army. They ended up killing many women and children in the camp. Why they did this I do not know. Looking Glass was leading the tribe to Canada, to safety - why not just let them go? It's a sad history, and I know both sides have their own story - but still.
Carol
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Thank you for your interesting reply. I had not heard of the Nez Perce nor their sad story, although I'm sure it's one of many. It makes one wonder what compels men to do such things.
Such romantic place names you have over there!
Best wishes, Elizabeth.
Comment from kiwijenny
we let the river runs red....let the river run red.
I went on part of the trail of tears in Kentucky. I turned my head because I was sure I heard whispers of Indian voices in the wind. Land built on flesh flayed.....yikes strong imagery, powerful
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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we let the river runs red....let the river run red.
I went on part of the trail of tears in Kentucky. I turned my head because I was sure I heard whispers of Indian voices in the wind. Land built on flesh flayed.....yikes strong imagery, powerful
God bless
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Thank you, yes - let the river run red, blood runs red in all of our veins no matter what our race.
Carol
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Cilverde ... you make Montanna sound wonderful in this poem, ethereal with the voices of past warriors. It was as if their voices are still calling across this place you talk about in your poem. It is a state that always sounds so American and holds a lot of iconic associations for me as a non-American. Good ones, lol. Wide open spaces and endless possibilities. A dream that is under threat, but I don't see that threat as your current political woes.
The author notes were well-written and filled in the gaps for the reader also. I like author notes, otherwise, it can be harder to connect with.
I really loved this verse:
Today, the broad mountain still leans
over the Big Hole, and the voices won't stop.
We betray ourselves.
The wind will not let us rest until
we let the river runs red
through our veins.
It is also the only place where I saw a possible error. I would write 'until we let the river run(no 's') red through our veins'. ??? But I'm not sure, so check it out.
Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Hi Cilverde ... you make Montanna sound wonderful in this poem, ethereal with the voices of past warriors. It was as if their voices are still calling across this place you talk about in your poem. It is a state that always sounds so American and holds a lot of iconic associations for me as a non-American. Good ones, lol. Wide open spaces and endless possibilities. A dream that is under threat, but I don't see that threat as your current political woes.
The author notes were well-written and filled in the gaps for the reader also. I like author notes, otherwise, it can be harder to connect with.
I really loved this verse:
Today, the broad mountain still leans
over the Big Hole, and the voices won't stop.
We betray ourselves.
The wind will not let us rest until
we let the river runs red
through our veins.
It is also the only place where I saw a possible error. I would write 'until we let the river run(no 's') red through our veins'. ??? But I'm not sure, so check it out.
Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing, Ana.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Oh you are right, yes it should be "run" thanks for noticing that! So much for late night edits!!
Carol
Comment from humpwhistle
I love this sort of retrospective view of our troubled history.
I agree, gunshots echo, screams resound.
Atonement takes time, and requires more responsibility.
My genes may or may not reflect it, but I feel akin to people who belong here.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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I love this sort of retrospective view of our troubled history.
I agree, gunshots echo, screams resound.
Atonement takes time, and requires more responsibility.
My genes may or may not reflect it, but I feel akin to people who belong here.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Lee. I hope there was still some $$ on this. I feel the same way, akin to the people who lived with the land in the place where I grew up.
Much appreciated,
Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, I came in late to this, but I still wanted to review. Yet again you've painted a beautiful picture with your words of your beloved Montana. I liked your poem a lot. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Hi Carol, I came in late to this, but I still wanted to review. Yet again you've painted a beautiful picture with your words of your beloved Montana. I liked your poem a lot. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Ulla, I appreciate your support :))
Carol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a soulful write of past ghosts that still haunt and torment us. Your words are powerful and I loved your free-write, you felt every word, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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This is a soulful write of past ghosts that still haunt and torment us. Your words are powerful and I loved your free-write, you felt every word, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Dolly! I really appreciate your kind words and the stars!!
Carol
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Voices in the Big Hole", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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"Voices in the Big Hole", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much!
Carol
Comment from Joan E.
You really capture the vastness and the history of this part of the country. Your alliteration of "r's," "f's" and "w's" adds to the intensity of the "voices" in this free verse. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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You really capture the vastness and the history of this part of the country. Your alliteration of "r's," "f's" and "w's" adds to the intensity of the "voices" in this free verse. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Joan. It is a beautiful valley, even with the all the history.
Carol
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Carol, a well written, good poem. Your wording is excellent - good use of metaphor in 'The wind will not let us rest until the river runs through our veins.' - very poetic. I like your second stanza -
Nobody wins this kind of war,
or any war. Everyone loses, and peace
suffers the most;
valleys settle too quickly
into echoes of gunshots at dawn....... very profound - well done, regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Hi Carol, a well written, good poem. Your wording is excellent - good use of metaphor in 'The wind will not let us rest until the river runs through our veins.' - very poetic. I like your second stanza -
Nobody wins this kind of war,
or any war. Everyone loses, and peace
suffers the most;
valleys settle too quickly
into echoes of gunshots at dawn....... very profound - well done, regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Dorothy. I appreciate your support!
Carol
