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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Life sucks but it beats the flipside"A collection of award winning poems
25 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
This is lovely, I enjoyed reading this poem and feel uplifted that you decided to become a teacher. I commend you for all your hard work. I see no need for any changes. You have excellent poetic form and a smooth flow of lines and verses.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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This is lovely, I enjoyed reading this poem and feel uplifted that you decided to become a teacher. I commend you for all your hard work. I see no need for any changes. You have excellent poetic form and a smooth flow of lines and verses.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Only your second poem? Wow! I can see many more good things coming from your pen. Your poem has heart and soul and all you need now is rhythmn and blues, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Only your second poem? Wow! I can see many more good things coming from your pen. Your poem has heart and soul and all you need now is rhythmn and blues, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much Dolly.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming story /poem about your life. When we leave school we seldom know what we really want to do. We do what society expect from us, but life always leads us to where we are suppose to be.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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A very well-written rhyming story /poem about your life. When we leave school we seldom know what we really want to do. We do what society expect from us, but life always leads us to where we are suppose to be.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing the piece.
Comment from JanPerry
Yes, so teaching was a safer option. Not having to stare death in the face all the time when you were a soldier. But teaching is all year round, where the other is only 180days per year. Well said. No mistakes.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Yes, so teaching was a safer option. Not having to stare death in the face all the time when you were a soldier. But teaching is all year round, where the other is only 180days per year. Well said. No mistakes.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. You tell a compelling story with the "grass is always greener" theme. I like the events you tell and the sequencing. One suggestion. You might want to try to make the syllable counts for each line to be the same or very close. Your poems will read more smoothly. I had a couple of reviewers who I respect point this out to me. It has made a difference for the better for me. Anyway, keep writing and sharing. Hugh
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Excellent. You tell a compelling story with the "grass is always greener" theme. I like the events you tell and the sequencing. One suggestion. You might want to try to make the syllable counts for each line to be the same or very close. Your poems will read more smoothly. I had a couple of reviewers who I respect point this out to me. It has made a difference for the better for me. Anyway, keep writing and sharing. Hugh
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the pointers Hughes
Comment from Knighteagle
If this is only your second poem, what have you been waiting for? This is terrific with story telling and humor. Wonderfully done and a great entry for the contest. Best of luck with the contest. Keep writing poems, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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If this is only your second poem, what have you been waiting for? This is terrific with story telling and humor. Wonderfully done and a great entry for the contest. Best of luck with the contest. Keep writing poems, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and the great review
Comment from Boogienights
i know, right? I couldn't wait until I became an adult and was able to do my own thing. Now I wish that I could go back to my youth and live it over for just a day. ..."don't it always seem to go, that you don't know what you've got till its gone." I really liked this rhyming poem, good luck in the contest..
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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i know, right? I couldn't wait until I became an adult and was able to do my own thing. Now I wish that I could go back to my youth and live it over for just a day. ..."don't it always seem to go, that you don't know what you've got till its gone." I really liked this rhyming poem, good luck in the contest..
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Like the old saying wish i knew then what i know now.Thanks for reading and reviewing
Comment from Sandra blair
What an interesting life you lead. I'm sorry about all the tragedy.
This is great poem. I love the way you call kids creatures. They sure are.
Thanks for sharing.
Still laughing about grey Poupon.
Take care,
Sandra :)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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What an interesting life you lead. I'm sorry about all the tragedy.
This is great poem. I love the way you call kids creatures. They sure are.
Thanks for sharing.
Still laughing about grey Poupon.
Take care,
Sandra :)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading Sandra
Comment from royowen
Not bad forbthevsecknd attempt Earl, 180 days doesn't seem very long to atten school. But I can understand leaving the army after seeing babies die, there's lots of ptsd becacause of these factors, somehow fighting for freedom and kids dying, doesn't fit somehow. Understandable working with kids though. Well done, good couplet rhyming, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Not bad forbthevsecknd attempt Earl, 180 days doesn't seem very long to atten school. But I can understand leaving the army after seeing babies die, there's lots of ptsd becacause of these factors, somehow fighting for freedom and kids dying, doesn't fit somehow. Understandable working with kids though. Well done, good couplet rhyming, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing Roy
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welcome Earl
Comment from kiwijenny
180 days ain't so bad...I love teaching...I've taught high school and now I'm teaching four year olds it's the best.
I'm sorry you hit the skids but I'm glad you teach kids
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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180 days ain't so bad...I love teaching...I've taught high school and now I'm teaching four year olds it's the best.
I'm sorry you hit the skids but I'm glad you teach kids
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you fof reading and reviewing
