God is Right There Inside You
Wrong, right ... you'll know.4 total reviews
Comment from Lance Polin
Excellent rhythm and certainly fulfills the challenge of this contest very adeptly. And I am sure you've already been told that the last 'your' is wrong. You are. You're. The other way you're talking about my sad, or everyone else's sad and that would see to undermine the purpose of this poem entirely, raising children who are confused and just do not know what is true. You really did a wonderful job and congratulations on your win.
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Excellent rhythm and certainly fulfills the challenge of this contest very adeptly. And I am sure you've already been told that the last 'your' is wrong. You are. You're. The other way you're talking about my sad, or everyone else's sad and that would see to undermine the purpose of this poem entirely, raising children who are confused and just do not know what is true. You really did a wonderful job and congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
This is beautiful. It reminds me of these verses
14 For when Gentiles, who do not have the law, by nature do what the law requires, they are a law to themselves, even though they do not have the law.
15 They show that the work of the law is written on their hearts, while their conscience also bears witness, and their conflicting thoughts accuse or even excuse them - Romans 2:14-15
We have a law written on our hearts.
God bless
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This is beautiful. It reminds me of these verses
14 For when Gentiles, who do not have the law, by nature do what the law requires, they are a law to themselves, even though they do not have the law.
15 They show that the work of the law is written on their hearts, while their conscience also bears witness, and their conflicting thoughts accuse or even excuse them - Romans 2:14-15
We have a law written on our hearts.
God bless
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well worded and nicely written poem telling a child about God. You used very good believable words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well worded and nicely written poem telling a child about God. You used very good believable words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
Comment from Kelly Hanna
Hi. I'd change the last verse from what's to what is, both times. It just flows better for me that way. Only an opinion, of course. I loved the softness and warmth of the poem. The length and rhymes were both well done. Good luck in the contest!
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Hi. I'd change the last verse from what's to what is, both times. It just flows better for me that way. Only an opinion, of course. I loved the softness and warmth of the poem. The length and rhymes were both well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
