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A Chain Rhyme34 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. Very well penned, Yvonne. the rhyming is interesting, I had to read it a couple times to get them all................meeshu
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This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. Very well penned, Yvonne. the rhyming is interesting, I had to read it a couple times to get them all................meeshu
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from pome lover
that is really beautifully and well written!
Is it true, an unknown grave under the ivy?
Your words are truly those of a poet.
Though sad, it is a most enjoyable read.
Thanks for writing it and good luck in the contest.
pome lover
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that is really beautifully and well written!
Is it true, an unknown grave under the ivy?
Your words are truly those of a poet.
Though sad, it is a most enjoyable read.
Thanks for writing it and good luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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There must be such a grave somewhere. I don't know where this came from. It just popped in my head. Thank you for a wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from BeasPeas
What a wonderful poem which I surely enjoyed reading. Presentation, theme, wording and flow are all great. I'm not sure what a chain poem is and will have to look it up. Good luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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What a wonderful poem which I surely enjoyed reading. Presentation, theme, wording and flow are all great. I'm not sure what a chain poem is and will have to look it up. Good luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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aaba, bbcb, ccdc, dddd -- chain rhyme. I should have put in the notes, but I think we weren't supposed to do that. Thank you for reviewing. I'm happy you like it.
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Hi Yvonne. I did see that on the contest site. I wondered if "chain" meant like the "loop" poem with some sort of repetition. I gave some consideration to entering this one, but will most likely pass it by. Your poem is wonderful, though. Marilyn
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You should give it a go.
Comment from Pantygynt
I seem to remember adversely criticising a previous effort of yours to do a chain rhyme - correct me if I am wrong. Well there is nothing to criticise in this one. The chaining rhymescheme laid down is followed perfectly and apparently with fine flow and ease. Nothing here seems contrived as the sad story unfolds.
This is a fine poem appropriately placed as we approach Remembrance day once again.
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I seem to remember adversely criticising a previous effort of yours to do a chain rhyme - correct me if I am wrong. Well there is nothing to criticise in this one. The chaining rhymescheme laid down is followed perfectly and apparently with fine flow and ease. Nothing here seems contrived as the sad story unfolds.
This is a fine poem appropriately placed as we approach Remembrance day once again.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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I'm so glad you think so. Thank you for this great review.
