His Cecelia
Everything's just fine...27 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
I hope he had her properly stuffed or else Celia is going to smell really bad! Lol! Kind of horror with a sense of humor. Lots of people have a hard time letting go of pets and people in their lives. Scary! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I hope he had her properly stuffed or else Celia is going to smell really bad! Lol! Kind of horror with a sense of humor. Lots of people have a hard time letting go of pets and people in their lives. Scary! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Adri7enne! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this might be it for me -- I just don't do 'dark' very well...but I can do 'creepy' maybe....:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Shanbreen
Yvette, you are such a tease. Loved these flash fictions you write. Just a few grammatical and language modifications:
Gonna run get comfortable!" (semi-colon or a comma after run?)
Mac ran out the door for an early meeting, phone ringing. (You could get away with a semi-colon after meeting but the way you have written the sentence, it seems the phone has to do something with the meeting. Do you think a period and starting a new sentence with the phone ringing would help?
Just some thoughts.
As usual, you have an uncanny ability to surprise the reader. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Yvette, you are such a tease. Loved these flash fictions you write. Just a few grammatical and language modifications:
Gonna run get comfortable!" (semi-colon or a comma after run?)
Mac ran out the door for an early meeting, phone ringing. (You could get away with a semi-colon after meeting but the way you have written the sentence, it seems the phone has to do something with the meeting. Do you think a period and starting a new sentence with the phone ringing would help?
Just some thoughts.
As usual, you have an uncanny ability to surprise the reader. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Shanbreen -- always good to hear from you! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And although I haven't decided finally, yet, I'm pretty sure this is it for me -- I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week ahead of light and uplifting (i.e., non-'dark) FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This short horror story, His Cecelia, had me going for a minute as to who was sitting there. I guess he really, really liked that cat. Neat story.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This short horror story, His Cecelia, had me going for a minute as to who was sitting there. I guess he really, really liked that cat. Neat story.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Yeah, this was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I although I haven't finally decided, I'm pretty sure this is it for me -- I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in, Bill! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Rickie1
Roger
I was confused until I realized It was horror fiction. Now I understand the ending. It's still horrible, horrible good. Very cleaver revelation with the ending. Well done.
Rickie
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Roger
I was confused until I realized It was horror fiction. Now I understand the ending. It's still horrible, horrible good. Very cleaver revelation with the ending. Well done.
Rickie
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Rickie! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from jenintorre
Yuk yuk. A very creepy story. I really enjoyed reading it. I didn't expect the ending, it was a real surprise. Well done. Good luck in the competition. Cheers Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Yuk yuk. A very creepy story. I really enjoyed reading it. I didn't expect the ending, it was a real surprise. Well done. Good luck in the competition. Cheers Jen.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Jen! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...creepy? yes. Dark? no. :) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful weekend of light and uplifting FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Very creepy. A bit of Psycho-vibe going on there. I loved it. I'm freaked because who wouldn't love a man who loves cats. Now, I must re-think my position on this. What a great story with a perfect surprise ending.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Very creepy. A bit of Psycho-vibe going on there. I loved it. I'm freaked because who wouldn't love a man who loves cats. Now, I must re-think my position on this. What a great story with a perfect surprise ending.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Cindy! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting Halloween FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from giraffmang
Okay, I had this pegged as a dog, so I wasn't too far off the mark. lol
he laughed, knowing she wouldn't respond - she was too aloof for jokes- start this with a capital as the previous dialogue is closed off and it isn't a speech tag.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Okay, I had this pegged as a dog, so I wasn't too far off the mark. lol
he laughed, knowing she wouldn't respond - she was too aloof for jokes- start this with a capital as the previous dialogue is closed off and it isn't a speech tag.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, G! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting Halloween FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from sandragee
When I read 'he began his usual unending monologue' and 'knowing she wouldn't respond' I suspected that Cecelia was no longer among the living. She was dead. That was the twist to your story. But then you gave a twist to the twist by making Cecelia a dead cat stolen from the vet. A good and creepy story. Great flash.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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When I read 'he began his usual unending monologue' and 'knowing she wouldn't respond' I suspected that Cecelia was no longer among the living. She was dead. That was the twist to your story. But then you gave a twist to the twist by making Cecelia a dead cat stolen from the vet. A good and creepy story. Great flash.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Sandra! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting Halloween FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from royowen
A most imaginative story Yvette. It succeeded in getting the hairs on the back of neck to stand on end, so it succeeded in achieving and meeting that criteria for horror, wierd and wonderfuly eery, friend Yvette, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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A most imaginative story Yvette. It succeeded in getting the hairs on the back of neck to stand on end, so it succeeded in achieving and meeting that criteria for horror, wierd and wonderfuly eery, friend Yvette, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Roy! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting Halloween FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)
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Well done
Comment from ChibiElf
I figured out early on that he was talking to a cat (blame another story where I didn't get it till the end, now I know the signs) but I had no idea she was dead- shocker!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I figured out early on that he was talking to a cat (blame another story where I didn't get it till the end, now I know the signs) but I had no idea she was dead- shocker!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, ChibiElf! :) ;) This was one of those 'enter it to challenge yourself as an author' contests for me ... horror is certainly not 'my genre'! :) ;) And I'm pretty sure this is it for me, though, as I just don't do 'dark' very well...:) ;) Thanx again for stopping in -- here's wishing you a wonderful week of light and uplifting Halloween FUN! :) ;) Yvette :)