Longing for home
City life is too fast12 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is a good entry. You make me want to head for the countryside as well. Everything about your presentation is good as well. The photo and matching background look good and are calming. I like your use of "long" in your final line and "calls" in your first. Those are good, strong words. They enable you to convey the depth of your love for the country.
I only have one suggestion. I would not waste a syllable on the word "The" in the first line. I would use a one syllable adjective like "calm" ( which would also support the alliteration of your first line).
I guess that I have one more. Your title is a sentence. I would just say "Longing for Home."
This is a good entry as it is. There is nothing with it. I just like to make every word count in these short poem contests. I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is a good entry. You make me want to head for the countryside as well. Everything about your presentation is good as well. The photo and matching background look good and are calming. I like your use of "long" in your final line and "calls" in your first. Those are good, strong words. They enable you to convey the depth of your love for the country.
I only have one suggestion. I would not waste a syllable on the word "The" in the first line. I would use a one syllable adjective like "calm" ( which would also support the alliteration of your first line).
I guess that I have one more. Your title is a sentence. I would just say "Longing for Home."
This is a good entry as it is. There is nothing with it. I just like to make every word count in these short poem contests. I wish you luck.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much Debbie for your help. I've changed it. X
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I like it, Mystery Writer.
Comment from kiwijenny
I absolutely agree. I lived in Atlanta for 20 years, raised my kids there but now I am in rural Kentucky and I couldn't be happier. It's quiet pace and decent people have my heart.
I love your poem it is a great reminder
God bless
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I absolutely agree. I lived in Atlanta for 20 years, raised my kids there but now I am in rural Kentucky and I couldn't be happier. It's quiet pace and decent people have my heart.
I love your poem it is a great reminder
God bless
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Many thanks, so glad you liked it. X
