Back in time
Too late now22 total reviews
Comment from beizanten
A great beginning, the emotion flow well. i bet everyone at one point of time wish they could back in time to avoid mistake and regret. A pretty good second stanza. The ending is quite powerful
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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A great beginning, the emotion flow well. i bet everyone at one point of time wish they could back in time to avoid mistake and regret. A pretty good second stanza. The ending is quite powerful
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Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Debbie Pope
Now this is very good. I am totally impressed with how you handled the prompt. Don't we all wish that we could "Avoid mistakes and grief, somehow." This is the first thing that comes to mind when I think of looking back.
And I always think, I wish that I could go back, knowing what I know now. Once again, you capture in your poem the universal thoughts that come to everyone's mind. By addressing thoughts that come to everyone, you show how much thought went into your lines. You talked about what needed to be said.
Your images are strong. I particularly like "In the final lap of life," Your rhymes are good as well.
Excellent poem.
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Now this is very good. I am totally impressed with how you handled the prompt. Don't we all wish that we could "Avoid mistakes and grief, somehow." This is the first thing that comes to mind when I think of looking back.
And I always think, I wish that I could go back, knowing what I know now. Once again, you capture in your poem the universal thoughts that come to everyone's mind. By addressing thoughts that come to everyone, you show how much thought went into your lines. You talked about what needed to be said.
Your images are strong. I particularly like "In the final lap of life," Your rhymes are good as well.
Excellent poem.
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Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018
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Many thanks Debbie for your great review.
