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Remembering

A Puente Potlatch Challenge

17 total reviews 
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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VIRTUAL SIX -- I wish I had a real one for you, as this is a lovely, lovely poem, June! It makes a parent proud to see their youngster grow up and become independent, but is even more wonderful to have them return home again. I especially love the second half of your Puente poem. It is so very touching.

I love this form (thanks for your author notes) with its bridge line and how the poem turns to another aspect of your topic. Great job on this Potlatch challenge!

Hugs,
Connie

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2018
    Thank you! It was a fun challenge and I am glad the words resonated with you. Appreciate your dropping by to share your sentiments.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Exceptional
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Lovely Puente poem June, you've mastered this form extremely well. In the first verse bringing up the child so that he may confidently go out into the world, and in the second, knowing that to the loving home he always will return.
very nice,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
    Thank you so much for dropping by to read and review my puente. And the generous rating is much appreciated!
Comment from BeasPeas
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This is very well composed, June. Great job. Your message is nicely united by the pivot line. Word choices are good, as is rhyme. First part is the child spreading his wings, second is honoring parents and home as he ages. Marilyn

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights!
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is stellar, June. Each section of the child's life traversed with the bridge of stars guiding him home.

Your metre is fine, your rhymes too and most importantly a most uplifting message in a well crafted Puente.

Excellent and a pleasure to read and review.

Gloria

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Gloria. It was a fun challenge. Glad the message came through . Always nice to hear from you!
Comment from Chrissy710
Exceptional
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Hi June What a lovely Puente describing the child free to roam but then returns home satisfied and mindful of his beginnings Well done a great club entry for this style Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thank you so much for the insightful review and exceptional rating! I'm glad the message resonated with you. It was a fun challenge. I enjoyed the write.
Comment from Aussie
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How true your words. A loving home will always welcome family back no matter the time or years gone by, that home will always stand by. I loved your poem and if everyone had a loving home there might not be so much violence today.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Appreciate very much your thoughtful comments. The family is the basic foundation of society - and when it's not strong, things will crumble. Glad you got the gist of this puente. Always good to hear from you.
reply by Aussie on 24-Nov-2018
    "Build your house on a strong foundation and happiness will follow you." "There were two men, one built on sand and the other a strong foundation." From the Bible. XXK.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job with your potlatch challenge poem, June. Your poem meets the criteria well. Good job with the great rhymes and smooth flow of your lines. I enjoyed reading this and can see how this could fit many people everywhere. The picture is a great pairing with your words. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Jan. Keep the challenges coming. I not only enjoy the write, but am learning a lot in the process. Glad the message of this puente came through. Appreciate the helpful review, as always.
Comment from Joan E.
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Thank you for demonstrating this form so well and adding the notes about its requirements. I admired your focus on the family and loving memories, plus your rhymes. Enjoy the rest of your holiday weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Appreciate very much your thoughtful comments. The family is the basic foundation of society - and when it's not strong, things will crumble. Glad you got the gist of this puente. And thank you for taking the time to read and review.
reply by Joan E. on 24-Nov-2018
    I am glad to be on the same wavelength. Hugs- Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Puente poem about the little children we cannot always see enough to become part of our lives and have some positive influence in their lives.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2018
    Thank you for sharing your insightful comments.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Smiles to you June Sargent
All I know to write a Puente poem is no easy task to write, I like how you bridged your poem with you last verse.
Gert

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2018
    Thank you for stopping by to read and review my puente - I was so tired of revising it I just posted it before I totally destroyed it! Glad you enjoyed it.
reply by Gert sherwood on 23-Nov-2018
    You are so welcome June Sargent
    Gert