Haiku (sentinel trees)
Haiku Poem23 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great poem, DD. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture choice is awesome. Your well-chosen words paint a great picture, too. Good job on the syllable count per line. I could visualize this scene a I read it even if no picture had been included, I like the words ;sentinel'--standing guard and 'grave'--cemetery. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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This is a great poem, DD. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture choice is awesome. Your well-chosen words paint a great picture, too. Good job on the syllable count per line. I could visualize this scene a I read it even if no picture had been included, I like the words ;sentinel'--standing guard and 'grave'--cemetery. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Jan. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a most lovely haiku DD. Your presentation is elegant and eloquent and indeed meets the criteria of haiku in a most poetic way.
I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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This is a most lovely haiku DD. Your presentation is elegant and eloquent and indeed meets the criteria of haiku in a most poetic way.
I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you kindly for taking the time to review my haiku poem Gloria. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
Both the verse and picture are haunting. But each complements the other.
Bare arms with sentinel trees is an excellent image of the solitude of this place. The bare arms also magnifies the haunting image of the graves.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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Both the verse and picture are haunting. But each complements the other.
Bare arms with sentinel trees is an excellent image of the solitude of this place. The bare arms also magnifies the haunting image of the graves.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Mark. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Joy Graham
Oh well done! You have a solemn zinger in line three. So perfectly described. My first thought after reading and then looking at the picture was how they all fell in a straight line like the crosses. Then it hit me that the crosses act as a sort of fence around them. It really is a sight to behold and makes one get emotional. I love everything about this haiku. I don't keep up with all the rules, but in my humble opinion this is a masterpiece!
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Oh well done! You have a solemn zinger in line three. So perfectly described. My first thought after reading and then looking at the picture was how they all fell in a straight line like the crosses. Then it hit me that the crosses act as a sort of fence around them. It really is a sight to behold and makes one get emotional. I love everything about this haiku. I don't keep up with all the rules, but in my humble opinion this is a masterpiece!
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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Joy, I am so very humbled by your appreciation and understanding of my haiku poem. Your observations and thoughtful comments with the shining six stars warmed my heart. Thank you so very much. ~DD
Comment from LIJ Red
I read elsewhere that there is not hard and fast minimum for Haiku syllables, so this one is valid. The artwork is chillingly impressive. Overall, an excellent post.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I read elsewhere that there is not hard and fast minimum for Haiku syllables, so this one is valid. The artwork is chillingly impressive. Overall, an excellent post.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem LIJ Red. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, what an awesome play on words, and a most wonderful tribute to those fallen soldiers. Your presentation, too, is simply sublime. This should do very well in the contest -- it even has not an implied kigo, but an actual, stated one that fits beautifully (wintry silence).
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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Wow, what an awesome play on words, and a most wonderful tribute to those fallen soldiers. Your presentation, too, is simply sublime. This should do very well in the contest -- it even has not an implied kigo, but an actual, stated one that fits beautifully (wintry silence).
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Dawn. Your comments are always much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It certainly looks a lovely place for your final resting place, it's just a shame they were only lads and it wasn't natural old age that took them. You poem is perfect with the words. The trees do look like sentinels watching over the headstones. Excellent contest entry. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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It certainly looks a lovely place for your final resting place, it's just a shame they were only lads and it wasn't natural old age that took them. You poem is perfect with the words. The trees do look like sentinels watching over the headstones. Excellent contest entry. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Sandra. Your comments are very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow. Your words almost deliver the cold that you know exists in that image and in that place at this time of year -- a wonderful offering for this contest!! ;) :) Thank you for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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Wow. Your words almost deliver the cold that you know exists in that image and in that place at this time of year -- a wonderful offering for this contest!! ;) :) Thank you for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem YM Roger. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh dear! I have used the same pun in a tanka due for posting tomorrow as part of my cold coach ride series. People may think I have copied your excellent idea with my 'grave discomfort' line, but I promise you I actually wrote it while on the coach last week, well before I saw this neat haiku.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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Oh dear! I have used the same pun in a tanka due for posting tomorrow as part of my cold coach ride series. People may think I have copied your excellent idea with my 'grave discomfort' line, but I promise you I actually wrote it while on the coach last week, well before I saw this neat haiku.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Pantygynt. Your comments are much appreciated, as always. ~DD
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your choice of words for this haiku. I liked your choice of "sentinel" to describe the trees. That's what they look like in your poem. Then, when I read your notes, I loved your word choice even more. Sentinel has a military and watching over connotation. "Wintry silence" is a good image as well. The words make me feel the chill and quiet.
"A grave sight" is an excellent third line. It's similar to grave side. And the sight of those tombstones is certainly grave. Even without the tombstones and notes about the battle, you portray a grave sight.
This is a well-crafted haiku. In addition, you chose a season for your topic. That is always a good thing to do for a haiku. Yours should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I like your choice of words for this haiku. I liked your choice of "sentinel" to describe the trees. That's what they look like in your poem. Then, when I read your notes, I loved your word choice even more. Sentinel has a military and watching over connotation. "Wintry silence" is a good image as well. The words make me feel the chill and quiet.
"A grave sight" is an excellent third line. It's similar to grave side. And the sight of those tombstones is certainly grave. Even without the tombstones and notes about the battle, you portray a grave sight.
This is a well-crafted haiku. In addition, you chose a season for your topic. That is always a good thing to do for a haiku. Yours should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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I do apologise for the delay in response. However, thank you for taking the time to review my haiku poem Debbie. Your insightful comments are very much appreciated. ~DD
