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When passion fades
2 total reviews
Comment from
Cass Carlton
Last line of second last verse.I would change "then" to "from". It seems ungrammatical as it is. Also the last verse. I would suggest dropping "Then" from the second last line and changing the words of the last line for more impact. It just seems to trail away to silence as it is. Just suggestions, it's your poem. Other than that it is a well written with poem about losing love. It has good rhythm and rhyme scheme and follows all the contest requirements. Good Luck cheers Cass
Comment Written 01-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing my poem and for the excellent feedback. I really appreciate it :)
Comment from
meeshu
This is a pleasure to read. Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. Very even flow and rhythm, almost like a march. very good..
Comment Written 01-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
Thank you so much. This means a lot coming from someone whose work I admire.
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