Me and You - 40+ years of Poems V2
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A Prayer Answered "Life, Love, Pain, Regrets, Struggles, Blessings
6 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
They say good things happen to those that wait and god works in mysterious ways. Nice work up for this story and I LOVE HAPPY ENDING.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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They say good things happen to those that wait and god works in mysterious ways. Nice work up for this story and I LOVE HAPPY ENDING.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and your family.
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Thank you for the review and insight
God Bless you and your family
Comment from Sally Law
Praises to our God and our Lord Jesus Christ for your healing and improvement in your health! I am so glad to hear that you're feeling good enough to write again. You are new to me, however, I am new to fan story around mid-August of this year. I will be fanning you right now, and know that I will continue to pray for you.
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Praises to our God and our Lord Jesus Christ for your healing and improvement in your health! I am so glad to hear that you're feeling good enough to write again. You are new to me, however, I am new to fan story around mid-August of this year. I will be fanning you right now, and know that I will continue to pray for you.
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review and God Bless you and your family. I will also be looking for Your postings.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful and praise-worthy offering for this contest -- just a wonderful witness to the power of prayer and the mercy of the Lord! :) ;) I've included below a few grammatical catches to make the reading smoother -- employ or ignore as you like. ;) I believe this is a wonderful entry subject! :) ;) Thank you for sharing! :)
"and Fell to my knees in Pain and Misery crying, saying" --> and fell to my knees in pain and misery, crying and saying
"Christ - "Please Lord, I can't take anymore of this Pain and Suffering". --> Christ, "Please Lord, I can't take anymore of this pain and suffering."
"his Kidneys" --> his kidneys
"first place. My answer would " --> first place, and my answer would
"Working environment 35+ years (Aerospace chemicals)." --> a thirty-five year work environment in aerospace chemicals.
"February My eldest" --> February, my eldest
"query in his" --> query on his
"need or Organs to Please notify """" --> need of organs to please contact.
"offer request and he notified my Kidney transplant Doctor" --> request, and he notified my kidney transplant doctor
"reservations and my Son pleaded some more asking - " what would you need to help make the decision"?" ---> reservations, and my son pleaded, asking my doctor what he would need to help make the decision.
"The Doctor listed" --> The doctor listed
"told my Wife and Son to expect to hear a no due to my" ---> told my wife and son to expect a 'No' due to my
"condition having recently lost my Left hand and Right finger tips. " --> condition: I have recently lost my left hand and right finger tips due to the Diabetes. [if that is incorrect, please just add a period after tips - my apologies if it is incorrect]
"Power of Prayer was in full effect as my Family and Friends familiar with my plight Prayed." ---> power of prayer was in full effect as my family and friends familiar with my plight prayed and prayed.
"and Blessings bestowed upon us to include new Transplant Family Members" ---> and blessings bestowed upon us to include a successful procedure as well as new Transplant Family members.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Such a wonderful and praise-worthy offering for this contest -- just a wonderful witness to the power of prayer and the mercy of the Lord! :) ;) I've included below a few grammatical catches to make the reading smoother -- employ or ignore as you like. ;) I believe this is a wonderful entry subject! :) ;) Thank you for sharing! :)
"and Fell to my knees in Pain and Misery crying, saying" --> and fell to my knees in pain and misery, crying and saying
"Christ - "Please Lord, I can't take anymore of this Pain and Suffering". --> Christ, "Please Lord, I can't take anymore of this pain and suffering."
"his Kidneys" --> his kidneys
"first place. My answer would " --> first place, and my answer would
"Working environment 35+ years (Aerospace chemicals)." --> a thirty-five year work environment in aerospace chemicals.
"February My eldest" --> February, my eldest
"query in his" --> query on his
"need or Organs to Please notify """" --> need of organs to please contact.
"offer request and he notified my Kidney transplant Doctor" --> request, and he notified my kidney transplant doctor
"reservations and my Son pleaded some more asking - " what would you need to help make the decision"?" ---> reservations, and my son pleaded, asking my doctor what he would need to help make the decision.
"The Doctor listed" --> The doctor listed
"told my Wife and Son to expect to hear a no due to my" ---> told my wife and son to expect a 'No' due to my
"condition having recently lost my Left hand and Right finger tips. " --> condition: I have recently lost my left hand and right finger tips due to the Diabetes. [if that is incorrect, please just add a period after tips - my apologies if it is incorrect]
"Power of Prayer was in full effect as my Family and Friends familiar with my plight Prayed." ---> power of prayer was in full effect as my family and friends familiar with my plight prayed and prayed.
"and Blessings bestowed upon us to include new Transplant Family Members" ---> and blessings bestowed upon us to include a successful procedure as well as new Transplant Family members.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review and insight.
The purpose of the capitalization of the words was to emphasize them as best as I could in the context they were used.
Thanks for Sharing your knowledge, I hope what I did is permissible.
Comment from apky
This is very moving indeed. I was merely browsing the FanStory site and happened to come across your essay. The writing is wonderful but what moved me here was the subject and the way you put your message across:
Love and Togetherness.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you the best of the festive season!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This is very moving indeed. I was merely browsing the FanStory site and happened to come across your essay. The writing is wonderful but what moved me here was the subject and the way you put your message across:
Love and Togetherness.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you the best of the festive season!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Go6 Bless you and your family for sharing these wonderful words.
Merry Christmas
Comment from Sugarray77
This is an excellent entry for this contest. I love how you developed your writing to include important history, explanation of characters, and a heartfelt theme. Good job and good luck in this contest.
Melissa
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This is an excellent entry for this contest. I love how you developed your writing to include important history, explanation of characters, and a heartfelt theme. Good job and good luck in this contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review and insightful words. It is more difficult to type with my Right hand finger tips missing above the first knuckles.
Merry Christmas
God Bless you and your family.
Comment from Bill Schott
This piece, A Prayer Answered, is a terrific story odf perseverance and blessings. We all pray here that you will get that kidney and be made whole.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This piece, A Prayer Answered, is a terrific story odf perseverance and blessings. We all pray here that you will get that kidney and be made whole.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the review and Well Wishes.
Happy Holidays to you and your family.
