haiku (snowflakes fall)
haiku51 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi jmf4119. This is a very good Haiku and has a capturing Satori well done and I like the fact is is not 5-7-5 Hmmm as you have used the Haiku requiements as they have meant to be Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine ( we had a 42 degree here today so your poem cooled me down)
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Hi jmf4119. This is a very good Haiku and has a capturing Satori well done and I like the fact is is not 5-7-5 Hmmm as you have used the Haiku requiements as they have meant to be Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine ( we had a 42 degree here today so your poem cooled me down)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Chrissy for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, lovely haiku, Janet. Very well penned.
Lines one and two show a definite grammatical connection while displaying excellent concrete imagery.
Your "kigo", or seasonal reference, is obviously winter.
Your haiku is written in the present tense, as if you were experiencing the scene in the here and now.
The satori, or final line -- that "Ah-ha!" moment of insight that makes haiku so popular -- is also very well done.
You get my very last "six" of the week for this.
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Ah, lovely haiku, Janet. Very well penned.
Lines one and two show a definite grammatical connection while displaying excellent concrete imagery.
Your "kigo", or seasonal reference, is obviously winter.
Your haiku is written in the present tense, as if you were experiencing the scene in the here and now.
The satori, or final line -- that "Ah-ha!" moment of insight that makes haiku so popular -- is also very well done.
You get my very last "six" of the week for this.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Dean for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate your reading my work and the six stars are a special bonus coming from you. Even your reviews are fun and creative :))))
Blessings
Janet
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Anytime, Janet.
You're more than welcome.
~Dean
Comment from Sugarray77
You have written a very beautiful Haiku. I enjoyed reading the satori of sleeping beauties... makes me long for spring. I would mention that in your notes you mention 31 syllables... that is for a Tanka... a haiku is 17 or less. Just an observation.
Melissa
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You have written a very beautiful Haiku. I enjoyed reading the satori of sleeping beauties... makes me long for spring. I would mention that in your notes you mention 31 syllables... that is for a Tanka... a haiku is 17 or less. Just an observation.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Melissa for your kind comments and catching my mistake in the notes. I've been working on some tanka poems lately that do have 31 syllables or less as opposed to the 17 or less in a haiku. I greatly appreciate your thoughtfulness.
Blessings
Jan
Comment from tbacha58
You chose so well your picture to walk along with your beautiful phrase. It meant so much different than others posting the Haiku, yours was the reality seen in this picture. So smooth. As if a person is lying down covered with the snow. Good luck. Loved it. Terry xoxo It deserves my six with pleasure.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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You chose so well your picture to walk along with your beautiful phrase. It meant so much different than others posting the Haiku, yours was the reality seen in this picture. So smooth. As if a person is lying down covered with the snow. Good luck. Loved it. Terry xoxo It deserves my six with pleasure.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging review and the amazing six stars. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Snowflakes Fall, presented in short-long-short formatting, describes the blanket that covers thedormant life beneath it. Nice.
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This haiku, Snowflakes Fall, presented in short-long-short formatting, describes the blanket that covers thedormant life beneath it. Nice.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Bill for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
I like it! Fun satori ending calling those resting flowers "sleeping beauties." Good encampment of the two first lines.
Great to see you posting again! Happy New Year!
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I like it! Fun satori ending calling those resting flowers "sleeping beauties." Good encampment of the two first lines.
Great to see you posting again! Happy New Year!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments. I am happy to be back posting. It has been a while. Thanks for noticing.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your haiku makes effective use of every syllable. This is a lovely description
of how a season exerts its "authority" over the outgoing season. Good
metaphor in third line
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Your haiku makes effective use of every syllable. This is a lovely description
of how a season exerts its "authority" over the outgoing season. Good
metaphor in third line
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Janice for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I'm always happy to hear from you and greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
A beautiful Haiku for the perfect time of year. Indeed, the flowers are sleeping, awaiting to be awoken in the spring. Well written and sure to be a contender. Keep up the good writing and have a blessed New Year!
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A beautiful Haiku for the perfect time of year. Indeed, the flowers are sleeping, awaiting to be awoken in the spring. Well written and sure to be a contender. Keep up the good writing and have a blessed New Year!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Marc for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent, Janet. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Your haiku is well worded and makes sense. It has nice rhythm, flow and impactful third line. Marilyn
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This is excellent, Janet. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Your haiku is well worded and makes sense. It has nice rhythm, flow and impactful third line. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Marilyn for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you. .
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Susanjohn
And the snow sure does fall! I worry about all my sleeping beauties all winter long!! Great little Haiku. Nice imagery and I enjoyed reading. Good luck in the contest!
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And the snow sure does fall! I worry about all my sleeping beauties all winter long!! Great little Haiku. Nice imagery and I enjoyed reading. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
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Thank you Susan for the thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
