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Comment from patcelaw
I the thirteen lines you have shown to us the kind of young boy Landon is. Nicely done. May God bless his young life and built him into a great and powerful man. Patricia
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I the thirteen lines you have shown to us the kind of young boy Landon is. Nicely done. May God bless his young life and built him into a great and powerful man. Patricia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you Patricia. for your lovely sentiments.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this fine example of the Boutonniere form plus the photograph of your grandnephew in a bit of comic relief. I enjoyed your meter and rhymes and the fun. The ensemble is a warmhearted way to honor your brother. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you for sharing this fine example of the Boutonniere form plus the photograph of your grandnephew in a bit of comic relief. I enjoyed your meter and rhymes and the fun. The ensemble is a warmhearted way to honor your brother. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you Joan, you comments are well appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the poem and the picture.
Comment from Pantygynt
An interesting form and I have a feeling it is probably more difficult to aschieve than it looks. I imagine the catalectic final foot makes life easier because we English speakers on the whole like to end our lines on a stressed syllable.
There is only one word in this that seems to me to get 'across' the metre. The given form requires 'DOingIT marVELousLY'. Well it may be a pronunciation thing but I want to say 'MArvelOUSly' and you won't let me. 'Doing marvelously, see?' would work better I think. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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An interesting form and I have a feeling it is probably more difficult to aschieve than it looks. I imagine the catalectic final foot makes life easier because we English speakers on the whole like to end our lines on a stressed syllable.
There is only one word in this that seems to me to get 'across' the metre. The given form requires 'DOingIT marVELousLY'. Well it may be a pronunciation thing but I want to say 'MArvelOUSly' and you won't let me. 'Doing marvelously, see?' would work better I think. Just a thought.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pantygynt. Well, you know how we Americans strangle English. So I see your point -m potato- potahto.
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Let's call the whole thing 'arf'.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Boutonniere. First of all I am sorry to hear about your loss. The little boy put a lot of effort in to keep that tree from falling. It seems he had quite a great deal of fun posing for the photo.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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A very well-written Boutonniere. First of all I am sorry to hear about your loss. The little boy put a lot of effort in to keep that tree from falling. It seems he had quite a great deal of fun posing for the photo.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra from the review and the condolences.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm so sorry for your loss, Tom, but applaud you for celebrating your brother's life. I think that is how we should see death, especially if you are Christian, or whatever faith, and believe that we go on and will meet again. I want that for my funeral. You brother's grandson is a lovely looking guy, and doing a grand job there keeping that tree from falling down! lol. Another lovely poem, my friend, and another lovely photo that inspired it. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I'm so sorry for your loss, Tom, but applaud you for celebrating your brother's life. I think that is how we should see death, especially if you are Christian, or whatever faith, and believe that we go on and will meet again. I want that for my funeral. You brother's grandson is a lovely looking guy, and doing a grand job there keeping that tree from falling down! lol. Another lovely poem, my friend, and another lovely photo that inspired it. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Sandra for this lovely rev iew and comments, as well as the condolences. Now I've lost 2 older brothers, and one younger one. I was no. 3 out of 5.
Comment from Teresa Alford
Thanks for sharing your poem about Landon. He is totally adorable. It sounds like you are close with him. I am sure he enjoyed having you write a poem about him. I recently wrote a story for one of my grandsons and he was quite pleased. Good job on the poem. Keep writing! TA ";~)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thanks for sharing your poem about Landon. He is totally adorable. It sounds like you are close with him. I am sure he enjoyed having you write a poem about him. I recently wrote a story for one of my grandsons and he was quite pleased. Good job on the poem. Keep writing! TA ";~)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Teresa. Yes, he was delighted. I had written on about his brother a couple of months ago, and promised him I'd write one about him too.
Comment from Pat Fleming
This is so adorable. Such a cute little tale of your son doing such a fantastic job holding up that magnificent tree. Very clever, the flow feels like a child's tale, bouncing along. This is very nice work and I love when a good poet takes something simple from every day life and composes a poem about it. Poetry is a wonderful thing in the right hands.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This is so adorable. Such a cute little tale of your son doing such a fantastic job holding up that magnificent tree. Very clever, the flow feels like a child's tale, bouncing along. This is very nice work and I love when a good poet takes something simple from every day life and composes a poem about it. Poetry is a wonderful thing in the right hands.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pat, i am delighted that you enjoyed this poem. i appreciate the review, comments, and encouragement.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
At the Celebration of Life instead of funeral for Richard, this photograph of London was taken, the tree is still standing plain and will continue; poet remembers the occasion; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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At the Celebration of Life instead of funeral for Richard, this photograph of London was taken, the tree is still standing plain and will continue; poet remembers the occasion; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you ALD for this fine review.
Comment from GracieAnn
Trieschel,
This Boutonniere write is simply but intricately composed sharing a universal knowledge of what little boys are made of. In their minds, they can accomplish anything because they are strong! Too bad that the world tries to prove them wrong.
:0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Trieschel,
This Boutonniere write is simply but intricately composed sharing a universal knowledge of what little boys are made of. In their minds, they can accomplish anything because they are strong! Too bad that the world tries to prove them wrong.
:0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Gracie. I smiled at you comment. So true, I appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from tfawcus
A tricky little form, but one that lends itself to humour, as the name suggests. Your theme is perfect for it. Just one line where the trochaic pattern falters: "a bit of rascality," What a fine picture of Landon.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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A tricky little form, but one that lends itself to humour, as the name suggests. Your theme is perfect for it. Just one line where the trochaic pattern falters: "a bit of rascality," What a fine picture of Landon.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you Tony. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes it does lend itself to humor. Indeed, a was so enamored with the word - rascality - that I had to let it ruin my meter. Lol.
