Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I found this entry to be very cerebral. I agree with some of the points made but not all of them. I find reaching salvation going hand in hand with earthly politics to be an unlikely pairing.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019

Dear Earl:

A Spiritual life, in my opinion, should surround itself with the proper use of a moral code of conduct, an attitude that supports political justice, fair economic opportunity, and love for the common good. A government's rule of law should reward those who live their life accordingly to the will of God and not what pleases their cultural or benefits them personally.

Thank you for the comments and for taking the time to read the piece. I appreciate your thoughts and time.

Regards,

gsnewton75

Comment from Jaye Bennett

Exceptional

Wow! I enjoy discussions of this kind. You laid out your case point by point, telling why you thought the way you did. You told where the basis of your theory came from -- the Bible via Thomas Jefferson. I think you did an exemplary job of this. I have written columns on current situations and the politics thereof which put forth similar views. The writing is in simple enough language almost anyone can understand it. The way it is written is also easy to read and grasp. Great job.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019

Hi Jaye,

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my piece and for your kind comments. I appreciate your
time and analysis.

Cordially,

gsnewton75

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

Thank you for sharing your entry in the Non-Fiction Writing contest. I appreciate how you presented the story in a STORY FORMAT, and then gave your commentary separately.

It is a difficult assignment for some folks to write a non-fiction piece and keep it full of dialogue and 'showing' and not 'telling.'

Great job and I wish you well in the contest,

~Mustang Patty~

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019

Hi Mustang Patty:

I'm so glad you are still active in the writing business. I appreciate your comments.
Thank you for reading my entry and for your review. Best wishes to you.

Cordially,
gsnewton75

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

An interesting discussion--for some.
Me, I like a good philosophical discussion. But I think this might be over done.
I'd consider a serious edit job. Weigh your story against your readers' potential interest level. Just a thought.

Peace, Lee


We were having trouble coming up with a logical way to handle the presentation and was hoping maybe our religion professor would stop by before his mid-morning class for coffee and give us some last minute ideas to think about. --this is a more complicated sentence than it has to be. I suggest breaking it up. Also, 'was hoping' should be 'were hoping'.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2019

Dear humpwhistle:

Thank you for your comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read the piece and make a comment. One question - How do I know what the readers' potential interest level is?

Regards, gsnewton

reply by humpwhistle on 14-Jan-2019

Naturally, you don't. It's a knack you develop. You measure what interests you against what interests your readers.
Of course, all subjects are interesting when framed just so. Your reviewers can tell you a lot. I hope this helps. Lee