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Me and You - 40+ years of Poems V2

Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Me and You Together Make One"
Life, Love, Pain, Regrets, Struggles, Blessings

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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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This is a lovely poem of your love for your wife of 43 years. How wonderful. I like how you mention the hard times, the tears, the fun, the coming together as one. You can't do that without the complete mix, it bonds you far tighter than one who has no trials to overcome. It's beautiful, and I wish you much luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    God Bless you and Thank You for your review and Kind words.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi there,

Thank you for sharing this lovely entry in the Love Poem Contest. Your story within the lines tells of a couple who go through life together and face things as one bound unit.

I love the use of math and your metaphors. Good luck to you in the contest,

~Mustang Patty~

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review and insightful review of my poem.
    The math is part of the duality messaging nature of most of my postings.
    God's Blessings to you again for the review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Long lasting relationships take a lot of work and yes there is pain and joy along the way but when you come out the other side and look back, it was all worth it, i enjoyed your raw and honest write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review,
    God's Blessings to you
Comment from Ms. Snyder
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Very good use of mathematics speak within this poem. The meter is good. There is a little room to show your pauses differently on mobile app so meter is better and rhyme flows. Overall very catchy and I like it! Cheers, Fonda

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review and insights on the app.,
    Thank you for the review.
    God's Blessings to you and your family.
Comment from country ranch writer
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It take two in a relationship to become one with the one you love and practice makes perfect in any language.nice. Work up for your poem and keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review, support, and advice. Greatly appreciated.
    God Bless you.
reply by country ranch writer on 17-Jan-2019
    SMILES
Comment from Sally Law
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Happy Anniversary and congratulations on 43 years. My husband and I just celebrated 43 years in December, as well. This is a sweet tribute to your life together. A little different poetry style, but I liked it. You are unique. I am glad you are back at FanStory and that you are feeling good enough to write.
All my best,
Sally

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review and Kind words.
    Trying to complete a promise to my mom to write a book of life's stories and poems.
    God's Blessings to you and your family.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This love poem, Me and You Together Make One, finds that people are similar and different and that those facts can blend into a successful relationship.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review and Kind words of encouragement.
    God's Blessings to you and your family.