Back Yard Regatta
I would rather be sailing than doing washing!14 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed reading your 3-5-3 poem. Wonderful imagery
and great play on words.
Sheets billowing in the breeze is a beautiful image akin to
sailing and the reference to rigging is clever.
Good use of alliteration too, with "regatta and rigged."
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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I enjoyed reading your 3-5-3 poem. Wonderful imagery
and great play on words.
Sheets billowing in the breeze is a beautiful image akin to
sailing and the reference to rigging is clever.
Good use of alliteration too, with "regatta and rigged."
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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Thanks you for your supportive review Nancy... the poem came 3rd in the contest, which made me happy because I have only been with FS for a month.
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Congratulations, that's great!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Wow, the combo of picture and verse attracted my attention to your contest entry
liked your illusion for sails, regatta, and rigged - all very expressive
applaud the fact that in this short verse you can evoke such a strong vision in my mind
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Wow, the combo of picture and verse attracted my attention to your contest entry
liked your illusion for sails, regatta, and rigged - all very expressive
applaud the fact that in this short verse you can evoke such a strong vision in my mind
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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I'm so glad you had the imagination to see this poem that strongly. Thank you so much for your very positive review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-5-3, Back Yard Regatta, has the proper formatting and find the launch of the laundry going out with the 'Tide' on 'Downy' waves.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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This 3-5-3, Back Yard Regatta, has the proper formatting and find the launch of the laundry going out with the 'Tide' on 'Downy' waves.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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hah.. I can see you like word play too. Thanks for your review of my poem, Bill.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a creative and wonderful analogy of the sailing-clothing line. A greatly crafted little 3-5-3. Your topic and your format are well-written. I hope you do well in the contest. Yours is my favorite so far. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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What a creative and wonderful analogy of the sailing-clothing line. A greatly crafted little 3-5-3. Your topic and your format are well-written. I hope you do well in the contest. Yours is my favorite so far. :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much for your supportive comments Cindy. There are many great writers on this FS site, I think it is just luck sometimes with who is voting.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
I so appreciate everything about your well-crafted 3/5/3 poem: visual imagery, play on words, and its message. Playful. And your message surely resonates with this reader...frozen in Michigan!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer!
I so appreciate everything about your well-crafted 3/5/3 poem: visual imagery, play on words, and its message. Playful. And your message surely resonates with this reader...frozen in Michigan!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Oh poor you... sorry to tease but it is a lovely sunny day here in NZ.
Thanks so much for your great review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Trying new poetic forms makes you a more versatile author. I say author rather than poet because the shorter forms of poetry, such as your 3-5-3 contest entry posted here, force you to utilize every word and make them count. That, in turn, helps when you write flash fiction or microfiction prose.
Having said that, good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Trying new poetic forms makes you a more versatile author. I say author rather than poet because the shorter forms of poetry, such as your 3-5-3 contest entry posted here, force you to utilize every word and make them count. That, in turn, helps when you write flash fiction or microfiction prose.
Having said that, good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thanks for these comments, Dean. I am certainly finding that my writing has become less meandering through paying attention to what can be said minimally.
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Anytime...
Comment from victor 66
Several thoughts come to mind from your entry. I use to sail quite a bit on, what I believe they would call, "a wet sailor". It was some of the best of times. The second thought, my mother would laundry after she came home from work and it would be dark already. She'd used the headlights of our car to see. Being very young, my little sister and I would run between the sheets and clothing with the headlights on and we had a great time. I appreciate the memories. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Several thoughts come to mind from your entry. I use to sail quite a bit on, what I believe they would call, "a wet sailor". It was some of the best of times. The second thought, my mother would laundry after she came home from work and it would be dark already. She'd used the headlights of our car to see. Being very young, my little sister and I would run between the sheets and clothing with the headlights on and we had a great time. I appreciate the memories. Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your review. I think that is a wonderful thing about reading other people's experiences ? how it reminds of of situations in our own lives.
I hang the washing out in the dark sometimes and I use my camping head torch.
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You're most welcome. It's nice to read that there are still a few people who hang up laundry outside.
Comment from His Grayness
This work is certainly presenting a rare and uncommon chunk of life and doing if really very well indeed, with no suggestions from me to improve it in any way. I loved it entirely as it is and thank this author for a joyful work! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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This work is certainly presenting a rare and uncommon chunk of life and doing if really very well indeed, with no suggestions from me to improve it in any way. I loved it entirely as it is and thank this author for a joyful work! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your praising comments.
I take hanging out the washing as a fact of life here in NZ. It has been very interesting to me that in a couple of reviews it has been noted as a rare and uncommon occurrence. Why is that? Obviously in winter it is difficult, but sunshine gives such a lovely smell to items. Is it because of pollution... or theft... or no back yards? And what a waste of electricity when sunshine is free!!
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Thanks for the delight and please keep that washing machine going so we can still enjoy it's rare energy~ Vance
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image, and thanks for
sharing the notes; at least
your hands were in the water!
-The syllable count is good.
-I like the sailing imagery as
compared to wash on the line.
-I particularly like the "regatta."
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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-Good image, and thanks for
sharing the notes; at least
your hands were in the water!
-The syllable count is good.
-I like the sailing imagery as
compared to wash on the line.
-I particularly like the "regatta."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your review and good wishes, Pam. I always like to read what other writers put in their notes. I am new to FS and when they put some explanation or comment in their notes it gives me a better picture of who they are and what they are interested in. (I am very much a heart-on-my-sleeve kind of person.)
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You are very welcome, and welcome to FS! Hope you enjoy it. I always read the author notes, too, and use them myself. I am a similar type with my heart on my sleeve. I look forward to seeing who you are!
Comment from LIJ Red
Something made me look for clothes on the line as I drove to the diner the other day, and I didn't see any in six miles. The dryer and laundromat rule in this area. Sad, sun does nice things to bedding...excellent 3/5/3 poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Something made me look for clothes on the line as I drove to the diner the other day, and I didn't see any in six miles. The dryer and laundromat rule in this area. Sad, sun does nice things to bedding...excellent 3/5/3 poem.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your review. Yeah, we still flap our knickers in public here!
