Scrambled Eggs (2-5-2)
How harmony at home can be harmed.10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-5-2, Scrambled Eggs, has the right set up and brings in a couple cliches to let us know some poor slob is in the hen house. No. Dog house.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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This 2-5-2, Scrambled Eggs, has the right set up and brings in a couple cliches to let us know some poor slob is in the hen house. No. Dog house.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2019
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That's another motif for a poem... the dog house... I could use that. Thanks for putting that into my brain.
Cheers for your review, Bill.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Wow...this is a powerful and well-written little poem. Your topic of "hen-pecked" is presented well in your 2-5-2. I hope you do well in the contest. You have a great entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Wow...this is a powerful and well-written little poem. Your topic of "hen-pecked" is presented well in your 2-5-2. I hope you do well in the contest. You have a great entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much Cindy for this review. I am glad it met with your approval.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
This is very clever - I like the words you chose and your presentation is great.
Sound syllable count.
Your author notes are bang on... a point well made.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Hello :)
This is very clever - I like the words you chose and your presentation is great.
Sound syllable count.
Your author notes are bang on... a point well made.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your comments of affirmation and good wishes. I prefer to write upbeat things, but sometimes a bit of social comment doesn't go astray.
Comment from Dean Kuch
When your relationship reaches a point where one of the two parties involved is constantly belittled and ridiculed by the other, chances are it's either time to move on to greener pastures or seek some sort of counseling.
If it's worth saving it is worth working towards a mutual resolution.
If not, it's probably time to go your separate ways.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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When your relationship reaches a point where one of the two parties involved is constantly belittled and ridiculed by the other, chances are it's either time to move on to greener pastures or seek some sort of counseling.
If it's worth saving it is worth working towards a mutual resolution.
If not, it's probably time to go your separate ways.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 31-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2019
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Hear, hear. Sometimes though it is so hard to work out whether that particular relationship is actually worth saving... often hard to see the wood for the trees. Greener pastures can get struck by drought too!
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Yes, they most certainly can.
Good luck!
Comment from djeckert
A well done poem that says a lot between the lines ( My favorite kind lol) Your notes say a lot as well, and point to some things well worth considering and remembering. God blesses
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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A well done poem that says a lot between the lines ( My favorite kind lol) Your notes say a lot as well, and point to some things well worth considering and remembering. God blesses
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. I appreciate you taking the time.
It's always a challenge to try and get in more than initially meets the eye.
Comment from sfharper
Strong poem about abuse, very sad ending. Good use of imagery in words and in the picture to show how a situation can degrade emotionally for someone. Good work in such a short piece.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Strong poem about abuse, very sad ending. Good use of imagery in words and in the picture to show how a situation can degrade emotionally for someone. Good work in such a short piece.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Yes it is very sad how relationships can end through verbal cruelty. Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Sugarray77
I see this is to mean that the hen is being pecked. According to your notes, I can see psychological abuse can be just that... abuse of the mind and spirit. Great job on this short 2-5-2 entry...
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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I see this is to mean that the hen is being pecked. According to your notes, I can see psychological abuse can be just that... abuse of the mind and spirit. Great job on this short 2-5-2 entry...
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your nice review. I have always understood hen-pecked to mean by the female towards the male. I checked and the internet gave this explanation:
adjective. browbeaten, bullied, or intimidated by one's wife, girlfriend, etc.: a henpecked husband who never dared to contradict his wife.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he you have a good point made in your notes! I enjoyed the play on words and your 2-5-2 could start an argument! He he he, good luck with the contest, you made me smile, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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He he he you have a good point made in your notes! I enjoyed the play on words and your 2-5-2 could start an argument! He he he, good luck with the contest, you made me smile, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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I think humour can make a message more memorable.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 2-5-2 poem and entry for the contest
with multiple meanings. Positive support is the key, but not always
practiced by couples. Many a relationship is broken from lack of
understanding.
Well said.
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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This is an excellent 2-5-2 poem and entry for the contest
with multiple meanings. Positive support is the key, but not always
practiced by couples. Many a relationship is broken from lack of
understanding.
Well said.
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Communication breakdowns usually...
Thanks for your review and good wishes.
Comment from Ricky1024
Scrambled eggs at 252 writing prompt urgent demon imagery that read well and flowed well with no grammar issues ejection object and contents were both excellent as descriptive measures online perfectly good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Scrambled eggs at 252 writing prompt urgent demon imagery that read well and flowed well with no grammar issues ejection object and contents were both excellent as descriptive measures online perfectly good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your comments and good wishes... much appreciated.
