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The Discarded Swing

A sad state of affairs

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Comment from Sugarray77
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What a very poignant verse this is and you are absolutely correct in stating that is is a sad travesty for our young people. Well written and a great entry for the 3-5-3 prompt.

Melissa

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you for reviewing my entry, Melissa.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Excellent short verse combined with its accompanying illustration

unfortunately simpler kids' days are replaced too often by a computer keyboard

Good luck in contest

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Mark. It's a shame, but true.
Comment from victor 66
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Isn't that a kick in the pants? I'm sure there may be some benefits to the video games, I just don't know what they are. I just remember sixty some years ago, you couldn't get a kid in a house when all their friends were outside. The future will be interesting. Good luck.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Victor. A kick in the pants is right. They don't know what they are missing.
reply by victor 66 on 15-Feb-2019
    Do you suppose our grandparents went through this with the radio? I know I went through it with the television. Is it just our perspective? And yet, being outside has got to be better than being down in the basement.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    I truly think that computers and video games are different. It's so pervasive and addictive. Tv and radio just weren't entertaining enough to keep our attention from dusk to dawn. Kids can tailor their games to do exactly what they want. We were stuck with what was on the air. I can't explain the attraction, but its different. I see it in the classroom. We have recess outside and they want to bring out their iPads or they want to have recess in the computer lab. And, it is so exciting for them.
reply by victor 66 on 16-Feb-2019
    Perhaps, with me, it's just a generation gap. I'm pretty old. You are right though, the gaming, the ipads? people of all ages seem seduced and the devices take on a huge priority. I don't know if I'll live to see the next generation but I'm curious to see how they will evolve. Take care.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Ohhhhh....the poor swings! ;) They creak along with the monkey bars that are covered with bird droppings....very sad...:) Good offering for this contest -- best of luck at the polls! ;) ;)

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thanks, Yvette. Poor swings is right, and I love them so.
Comment from Debra White
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Hello :)
This is a very good entry for the 3-5-3 contest.
Perfect syllable count, nice alliteration in line 1 and I hate to say it, but your words, sadly, speak the truth. Nicely presented.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Debra. This is sadly a very truthful poem.
Comment from Anne Mabley
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So true! What happened to the joy of playing outside? I love the artful, silent swing to accompany your poem. This could be a poster displayed where parents take their kids.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    That's a great idea, Anne. The photo of that swing is artful. It speaks volumes by itself. It needs to be displayed in pediatric offices.
    Thanks for the insightful review.Than
Comment from Douglas Paul
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Unfortunately there is a lot of truth in this poem. You managed to produce a very powerful message in a few short words. Well done

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Douglas Paul. Unfortunately, it's not hard to see the truth in this one.Th
Comment from patcelaw
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To think that our children are not out in the sun and fresh air is a shame. Sadly the youngsters are becoming soft because they are not getting enough exercise. Patricia

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    You are right, Patricia. Children need to play with their whole bodies.
Comment from Chip Kuzborski
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Nice job, insightful commentary, did a lot with a little. I still hold out hope that the littlest of them still enjoy being whoosed into the air!

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
    Thank you, Chip. My grandson is two. Already he opts for the iPad over the swing. It is a sad state of affairs.
reply by Chip Kuzborski on 15-Feb-2019
    Ugh.