Cheers
A Diatelle Entry18 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This diatelle, Cheers, has the correct syllable placements and can possibly refer to a date that never happened. Can make a fire without a spark.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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This diatelle, Cheers, has the correct syllable placements and can possibly refer to a date that never happened. Can make a fire without a spark.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thanks for sharing your insights on this diatelle.
Comment from reconciled
Written very well ...I don't count syllables against anyone either...
It dances and the music sounds familiar.
So there you have it my review. Arvwa-
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Written very well ...I don't count syllables against anyone either...
It dances and the music sounds familiar.
So there you have it my review. Arvwa-
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you for stopping by to share your insights!
Comment from MissMerri
I think this is outstanding. I like the pattern, but I know from reading several of these, it takes much more than a pattern to make it truly pleasing. The lines flow, the rhymes are unforced, the story is told clearly and beautifully and the presentation is equally pleasing. I loved everything about this Diatelle poem. Best wishes in the contest too. I haven't voted yet so I don't know how it's doing but I can imagine it will do very well. ~ MM
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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I think this is outstanding. I like the pattern, but I know from reading several of these, it takes much more than a pattern to make it truly pleasing. The lines flow, the rhymes are unforced, the story is told clearly and beautifully and the presentation is equally pleasing. I loved everything about this Diatelle poem. Best wishes in the contest too. I haven't voted yet so I don't know how it's doing but I can imagine it will do very well. ~ MM
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. I appreciate very much your support!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
My goodness! How I smiled when I read your well-crafted Diatelle. Yes, I realize that a relationship has come to an end, and perhaps, it is a painful end, but the fact that the writer ends with "Cheers!" and hopefully, a good bottle of wine just made me smile aloud! (Of course, I would have preferred a few amaretto sours over wine, but wine is a good second choice!) So amazing that so much emotion can be put into such a restricted poetic form. Kudos!
Best Wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer,
My goodness! How I smiled when I read your well-crafted Diatelle. Yes, I realize that a relationship has come to an end, and perhaps, it is a painful end, but the fact that the writer ends with "Cheers!" and hopefully, a good bottle of wine just made me smile aloud! (Of course, I would have preferred a few amaretto sours over wine, but wine is a good second choice!) So amazing that so much emotion can be put into such a restricted poetic form. Kudos!
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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My first choice has always been Amaretto! Thank you for your insightful review.
Comment from Coco Jane
Nicely crafted. I think everyone can relate to those regretted moments--not only in romance but in failure to take opportunities that life places before us.
Maybe use a stronger word than "filled"-rife? stung? Just a thought.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Nicely crafted. I think everyone can relate to those regretted moments--not only in romance but in failure to take opportunities that life places before us.
Maybe use a stronger word than "filled"-rife? stung? Just a thought.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your sentiments. Will take into account your suggestion as well!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever diatelle poem with a sort of reverse story within it and this is my favourite and I shall vote for you, much enjoyed,, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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This is a clever diatelle poem with a sort of reverse story within it and this is my favourite and I shall vote for you, much enjoyed,, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Dolly! Appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Beautiful poem of unrequited love. I hope it's not based on actual experience, but if it is, at least your made quite the lemonade from the lemons you were dealt. I love the photo you chose to go with this, too. Great work. Good luck in the contest. xo
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Beautiful poem of unrequited love. I hope it's not based on actual experience, but if it is, at least your made quite the lemonade from the lemons you were dealt. I love the photo you chose to go with this, too. Great work. Good luck in the contest. xo
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for dropping in to read and share your insights.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I felt the bookend style rhyming of "tears" at the beginning and "Cheers" as the last word help to tie this Diatelle poem all together quite nicely.
You also tie the center line in with your first and last line rhymes with "years".
Having said that, the rhyming scheme for this is more intricate that appears at first glance.
Good thinking outside the box and best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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I felt the bookend style rhyming of "tears" at the beginning and "Cheers" as the last word help to tie this Diatelle poem all together quite nicely.
You also tie the center line in with your first and last line rhymes with "years".
Having said that, the rhyming scheme for this is more intricate that appears at first glance.
Good thinking outside the box and best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this diatelle! And I am glad you felt I did this format justice - thanks for dropping in to read and share your insights, Dean.
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You are welcome.~Dean
Comment from Ms. Snyder
I hope people don't think this poem is me... It is kind of my signature thing to do - so I hope I don't bring you bad luck. Anyway, it is a beautiful Diatelle and one of my favorite forms! Poet, you have done an exquisite job of making this poem sing from the page and ring with the word that I use as my signature. I was happy to see it be something so grand and I wish you luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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I hope people don't think this poem is me... It is kind of my signature thing to do - so I hope I don't bring you bad luck. Anyway, it is a beautiful Diatelle and one of my favorite forms! Poet, you have done an exquisite job of making this poem sing from the page and ring with the word that I use as my signature. I was happy to see it be something so grand and I wish you luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this diatelle! And I am glad you felt I did this format justice - thanks for dropping in to read.
Comment from jenintorre
This is an excellent poem and fits the criteria perfectly. It is sad and poignant also very well written. Well chosen artwork and presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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This is an excellent poem and fits the criteria perfectly. It is sad and poignant also very well written. Well chosen artwork and presentation. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this diatelle! And I am glad you felt I did this format justice - thanks for dropping in to read.
