Redemption II
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Comment from country ranch writer
She has put all she loves in harms way and now it is her fault he has come back and is making everyone pay so what is she going to do now to get rid of hum in the 64hundred dollar question.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
She has put all she loves in harms way and now it is her fault he has come back and is making everyone pay so what is she going to do now to get rid of hum in the 64hundred dollar question.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. Yes she has put all and everyone she cares about in harms way. The interesting question is how is going to protect them, or is she going to be the first to feel Lances justice? Thank you for reading.
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guess we will have to see
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Yes we will because I haven't even decided yet. LOL
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smiles
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
This second book looks intriguing. I imagine we will now go with Lance as he escapes and tries to either get Susie back or track her down to kill her.
You've set the stage well. Looking forward to seeing the direction you take this in,
~MP~
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
Hi there,
This second book looks intriguing. I imagine we will now go with Lance as he escapes and tries to either get Susie back or track her down to kill her.
You've set the stage well. Looking forward to seeing the direction you take this in,
~MP~
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. I am still deciding which direction. I have to decide if it will a completely evil Lance or if some of the good Lance is even present. Thank you for your encouraging words. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think I missed this book last time, but will follow it now. Thanks for putting a synopsis type prologue, it will make it easier to get into this one. It seems, Susie has made a big mistake. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
I think I missed this book last time, but will follow it now. Thanks for putting a synopsis type prologue, it will make it easier to get into this one. It seems, Susie has made a big mistake. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. Yes Susie has made a big mistake, and that is from the last book. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Vicki Ziemer
I see that this is a start of a book that is a continuation of the first book. This is very intriguing, but, I think there are a couple of things that may make it flow better. One thing is the first paragraph, where Susie is involved with Detective Case and moving in with him. I think if you referred to Susie Morrell by her whole name in the first sentence, then, Susie in the next sentence. Also, I would think that since Susie is in a romantic relationship with Detective Case, he would be referred to by his first name, after the initial introduction. Saying that Susie has become involved with him and is moving in with him, might sound a bit more natural if it was reworded a little.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
I see that this is a start of a book that is a continuation of the first book. This is very intriguing, but, I think there are a couple of things that may make it flow better. One thing is the first paragraph, where Susie is involved with Detective Case and moving in with him. I think if you referred to Susie Morrell by her whole name in the first sentence, then, Susie in the next sentence. Also, I would think that since Susie is in a romantic relationship with Detective Case, he would be referred to by his first name, after the initial introduction. Saying that Susie has become involved with him and is moving in with him, might sound a bit more natural if it was reworded a little.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. Thank you for your suggestions and I will look at them and do some changes. I am glad it has some intrigue. Thank you for reading.
Comment from meeshu
this is well set up to be a very good story. a patient Lance is going to be a most evil Lance. I am looking forward to a wild ride, ESEL.................meeshu
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
this is well set up to be a very good story. a patient Lance is going to be a most evil Lance. I am looking forward to a wild ride, ESEL.................meeshu
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. I appreciate your words of encouragement to continue with the story. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Christine C Autry
Oh No! Lance's back no I thought he was gone for good. Wow they shouldn't have cracked that mirror now they're going to have to pay. I'm glad you're writing more was good to read some of your stories thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
Oh No! Lance's back no I thought he was gone for good. Wow they shouldn't have cracked that mirror now they're going to have to pay. I'm glad you're writing more was good to read some of your stories thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the review and rating. thank you for your wonderful words of encouragement to continue writing. Thank you for reading.
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You are Welcome.
Comment from 24chas
I'm looking forward to reading this, SLMorrical. I missed the first one, but after reading this prologue I know I'm going to like it. Found one small thing: Susie by not burying the mirror has sealed her fate, and possibly the fate of others around her. (By not burying the mirror, Susie has sealed...) Just reordered the sentence so it didn't read as awkwardly. Just my opinion, though.
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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
I'm looking forward to reading this, SLMorrical. I missed the first one, but after reading this prologue I know I'm going to like it. Found one small thing: Susie by not burying the mirror has sealed her fate, and possibly the fate of others around her. (By not burying the mirror, Susie has sealed...) Just reordered the sentence so it didn't read as awkwardly. Just my opinion, though.
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Comment Written 25-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and rating. The first one is in my portfolio is you want to take a look, Thank you for pointing out the correction and it has been corrected.Thank you for reading.