Arrangement of Birds
Sight-reading music on the power lines.16 total reviews
Comment from 24chas
This was an interesting write. It's really cool that you noticed the formation and got a poem out of it. Good flow as well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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This was an interesting write. It's really cool that you noticed the formation and got a poem out of it. Good flow as well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your great review. I noticed the birds, and thought of music notes, so I combined both ideas. I had to research music terms though to find one that captured my intention... arpeggio.
Comment from RodG
The photo and the poem are beautifully paired to bring out the meaning of your poem. I can easily visualize birds on a wire as being notes on a staff. Better yet, I can HEAR the "arpeggio" of bird song. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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The photo and the poem are beautifully paired to bring out the meaning of your poem. I can easily visualize birds on a wire as being notes on a staff. Better yet, I can HEAR the "arpeggio" of bird song. Rod
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thanks, Rod. We have lovely bird song in NZ and as I have many trees around my house I am very aware of the music of birds.
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My pleasure. Rod
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with an interesting musical connection to the visual of the photo,
especially with the five lines.
Perhaps, it's just a convent place for birds to land
or maybe they relate to the humming in the wires.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
RS
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with an interesting musical connection to the visual of the photo,
especially with the five lines.
Perhaps, it's just a convent place for birds to land
or maybe they relate to the humming in the wires.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
RS
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your comments... another reviewer said the birds were probably tweeting!
Comment from humpwhistle
Being this day and age, I suspect they may be tweeting, rather than humming.
Indeed, they appear to be notes on a staff. Nicely done.
I wish you best at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Being this day and age, I suspect they may be tweeting, rather than humming.
Indeed, they appear to be notes on a staff. Nicely done.
I wish you best at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Funny about the tweeting.... but MY birds definitely are feeling the humming vibrations. I have plenty of trees around my house and bird song in NZ is delightful.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the birds on the electric / telephone lines like notes on a music staff ready to be played by the musician any time he likes to. It may be quite a Symphony.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the birds on the electric / telephone lines like notes on a music staff ready to be played by the musician any time he likes to. It may be quite a Symphony.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Sandra.
NZ bird song does indeed make a symphony at times.
Comment from donette1914
how adorable is this?
very clever use of your words that draws ones in and that takes talent.
The photo goes well to make this come to life.
It was a pleasure to read you're fine well-penned work.
I hope for the best in the contest
donette1914 3/16/2019
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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how adorable is this?
very clever use of your words that draws ones in and that takes talent.
The photo goes well to make this come to life.
It was a pleasure to read you're fine well-penned work.
I hope for the best in the contest
donette1914 3/16/2019
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and good wishes, Donette.
