The Hair on Grandma's Chin
(Distracting, but irrelevant to the bigger picture.)11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so lovely, and exactly how a child would think when visiting a new grandma for the first time. But, as it also happens, it doesn't take too long before the little girl is loving her grandma so much, she cries when she has to go home. aww, that was so nice. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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That was so lovely, and exactly how a child would think when visiting a new grandma for the first time. But, as it also happens, it doesn't take too long before the little girl is loving her grandma so much, she cries when she has to go home. aww, that was so nice. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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I am so glad you found it to have an authentic feel. Thanks for your comments.
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed meeting the child and her grandmother here. You do a wonderful job of characterizing both, but Grandma's single facial hair makes her distinctive. But this is really a narrative about LOVE and how a child learns HOW to give and receive it. Delightful! Rod
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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I really enjoyed meeting the child and her grandmother here. You do a wonderful job of characterizing both, but Grandma's single facial hair makes her distinctive. But this is really a narrative about LOVE and how a child learns HOW to give and receive it. Delightful! Rod
Comment Written 01-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for your warm review, Rod. Giving and receiving via a chin stubble whisker. She's a rather unusual grandma, possibly over exaggerated by the child influenced by bedtime stories.
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You are very welcome. Rod
Comment from DragonSkulls
Haha, what a memento, a chin hair. Ahhhhhh. Thank you for the chuckle, author. Glad to see at least a couple people go outside the box for this contest, lol. I love the picture too. I wish you the best of luck in the booth.
Ron
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Haha, what a memento, a chin hair. Ahhhhhh. Thank you for the chuckle, author. Glad to see at least a couple people go outside the box for this contest, lol. I love the picture too. I wish you the best of luck in the booth.
Ron
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This Grandma was a larger than life character. I'm glad the kid got to appreciate that and not to judge by outside appearances.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about grandparents and knowing that you don't have eperience with grandparents you sketch a perfect picture of how a loving grandma should be against the one who look always too neat and don't want her dress wrinkled up.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about grandparents and knowing that you don't have eperience with grandparents you sketch a perfect picture of how a loving grandma should be against the one who look always too neat and don't want her dress wrinkled up.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much for your delightful review Sandra. This grandma is certainly not one to bother about appearances, much more into fun times with grandchild. Her skills are over exaggerated to make that point. And the child picked up on the lesson not to judge someone by outside appearances too.
Comment from Michele Harber
This poem is so beautiful that it actually brought tears to my eyes - in a good way. To hear that it was written by someone who's never had children nor known his or her grandparents makes it that much more amazing. I truly felt this was from the perspective of a child, and yes, something as simple as a chin hair can be enough to scare a child in just the way you describe. I enjoyed that you told a full story, from the beginning of the trip to the end, created full-fledged characters who changed and grew throughout the poem, and made it rhyme to boot. This is very well done. Your list of the grandmother's "talents" might be just a bit overdone ("juggles knives then writes her name in blood"), but what child wouldn't want to have a grandparent who could do all the things you describe?
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This poem is so beautiful that it actually brought tears to my eyes - in a good way. To hear that it was written by someone who's never had children nor known his or her grandparents makes it that much more amazing. I truly felt this was from the perspective of a child, and yes, something as simple as a chin hair can be enough to scare a child in just the way you describe. I enjoyed that you told a full story, from the beginning of the trip to the end, created full-fledged characters who changed and grew throughout the poem, and made it rhyme to boot. This is very well done. Your list of the grandmother's "talents" might be just a bit overdone ("juggles knives then writes her name in blood"), but what child wouldn't want to have a grandparent who could do all the things you describe?
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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What a great review! Thanks for your thorough comments Michele. I think I have the imagination of a child... I often slip into hyperbole as entertainment for myself while writing, but in this poem maybe the child exaggerated grandma's skills in a similar manner, possibly influenced by the bedtime stories that were being read.
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Perhaps, but whatever the influence, you definitely captured the child's mind in a way that was so believable that your "disclaimer" at the end took me totally by surprise. Anyway, you're very welcome for the review, which I was only too happy to give.
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Thanks again. x
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a great poem filled with lots of love for Grandma and I really enjoyed the jaunty rhymes and fun activities, and the last line is a gem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This is a great poem filled with lots of love for Grandma and I really enjoyed the jaunty rhymes and fun activities, and the last line is a gem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thank you Dolly. I am glad you enjoyed reading about this rather different grandma.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
Ha ha ha! This is a really funny poem, but with such sweet sentiment, eventually. A magical chin whisker? Ha ha ha. This is a great contest entry. Good luck and thanks for the laughs. Jan
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Hi Contest Author,
Ha ha ha! This is a really funny poem, but with such sweet sentiment, eventually. A magical chin whisker? Ha ha ha. This is a great contest entry. Good luck and thanks for the laughs. Jan
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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I am pleased this brought you pleasure and a chuckle. Magic can be found in unexpected places.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Fine, you have expressed clearly how your Dad's Mum, your Nonna, was love with you, as you discovered visiting her, noticed her likes, and you still keep her hair as memory; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Fine, you have expressed clearly how your Dad's Mum, your Nonna, was love with you, as you discovered visiting her, noticed her likes, and you still keep her hair as memory; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your review and comments. i am so pleased my poem met with your approval.
Comment from dragonpoet
It sounds like a wonder time and a good lesson in not judging people before you know them. It seems like her grandma is the kind anyone would want. This was a fun poem
A possible change fun-time blast could be such fun, what a blast.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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It sounds like a wonder time and a good lesson in not judging people before you know them. It seems like her grandma is the kind anyone would want. This was a fun poem
A possible change fun-time blast could be such fun, what a blast.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your generous review and comments. I've noted your suggestion. It is always helpful to get another point of view. This grandma in the poem sure has some unusual attributes. I wonder if the child can be believed. The lesson in not being judged is the prime one.
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You're welcome. I also think it is also nice that the grandma gave the granddaughter her hair. I think it would be great to have something to remember each person in our family.
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Comment from 24chas
This was a great read. I love the change in the attitude toward your Nonna from the beginning to the end. The piece had a good flow and imagery as well. Nice job.
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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This was a great read. I love the change in the attitude toward your Nonna from the beginning to the end. The piece had a good flow and imagery as well. Nice job.
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2019
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Thanks for your comments and observations. I was conscious of trying to keep the change so it didn't jump too much, so i am pleased you thought it had a good flow.
