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Comment from Marie Foster1
Did you mean to write "obscurity" as the title. I apreciate when people tell me of my oversights. I hope you are of the same mind set. Otherwise, it is a well wrtten, well thought out poem.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Did you mean to write "obscurity" as the title. I apreciate when people tell me of my oversights. I hope you are of the same mind set. Otherwise, it is a well wrtten, well thought out poem.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Yes, it's a tribute to fellow aerospace workers that fell ill and have died due to the toxicity of materials we worked with. Some die in obsurity.
Comment from Marie Foster1
Did you mean to write "obscurity" as the title. I apreciate when people tell me of my oversights. I hope you are of the same mind set. Otherwise, it is a well wrtten, well thought out poem.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Did you mean to write "obscurity" as the title. I apreciate when people tell me of my oversights. I hope you are of the same mind set. Otherwise, it is a well wrtten, well thought out poem.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Yes, a tribute to fellow aerospace workers that fell ill due to the toxicity of materials we worked with. Dying in obscurity.
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I was pointing out that the word in the title is misspelled
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Thank you, I will correct the spelling.
Comment from diamondbogle
This is really good. I liked the flow, the way it read out loud was really on point. I enjoyed the way you made me feel. I think this is going to do really well in the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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This is really good. I liked the flow, the way it read out loud was really on point. I enjoyed the way you made me feel. I think this is going to do really well in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and compliments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some secrets are never meant to be told, nor should they be. We are not entitled to know everything in life and some things are best kept hidden from our eyes, there is a meloncholy tone to your poem and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Some secrets are never meant to be told, nor should they be. We are not entitled to know everything in life and some things are best kept hidden from our eyes, there is a meloncholy tone to your poem and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your time and review.
Comment from Sanku
this was thought provoking .I wonder how many secrets are hidden from the public .You have used mono rhymes in many stanzas and aabb in last two stanzas and abab in the first stanza .This was a worthy experiment and it was enjoyable.All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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this was thought provoking .I wonder how many secrets are hidden from the public .You have used mono rhymes in many stanzas and aabb in last two stanzas and abab in the first stanza .This was a worthy experiment and it was enjoyable.All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and Good Luck wishes.